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● If you are using information from another source, you must cite it.

● What is this?

● No pronouns

● There is no conclusion?

Final Draft Feedback

● Link these two together using "however"

● Where is all of this information coming from?

● page number?

● What else can you say about this? The paragraph consists mainly of citations. There is

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● At the collegiate level, you want to try to use more effective transition words.

● Punctuation

● Name of the article is in quotation marks and the journal name is always italicized.