Essay 1 Feedback

First Draft Feedback

● Under my thesis: “So, what is your claim? What did you discover based on your

experiment?”

● Overall feedback: “it seems like you were headed in a great direction. I am hoping your

second draft is complete, so that I can give you more precise feedback.”

Second Draft Feedback

● Do not end a paragraph with a citation

● Do not forget the page number

● These entries must be single spaced

Final Draft Feedback

● How can you make your claim sound more effective?

● This essay is great. However, you must rewrite your thesis statement in order to effectively

convince your audience about your experiment and the conclusions you reached.