Name: GABASA, MARIA ANGELICA G.

Schedule: 8:00-10:00 Thursday

Subject: Comm11- Purposive Communication Course Offering Number: M021

Learning Task/Activity Module 6: Lesson 6.2

A friend of mine asked you for assistance with the following application letter. Read it carefully,
assess its usefulness, and rewrite it when required.

Dear Ms. Brown,

Please consider my application for the position of assistant in the Engineering Department. I
am a second-year student majoring in electrical engineering technology. I am presently an
apprentice with your company and would like to continue my employment in the Engineering
Department.

I have six years’ experience in electronics, including two years of Engineering studies. I am
confident my background will enable me to assist the engineers, and I would appreciate the
chance to improve my skills through their knowledge and experience.

I would appreciate the opportunity to discuss the possibilities and Benefits of a position in the
Engineering Department at Concord Electric. Please phone me any weekday after 3:00 p.m. at
(555) 568-9867.

I hope to hear from you soon.

The given application letter doesn’t contain a heading. It lacks necessary information about the
sender and the recipient. The said application letter does not include the sender’s contact
information such as his/her name, physical address, phone number, and email address. It does not
have a date. The name of the hiring manager, his designation or title, the name of the company,
and its address are not present. These only mean that it does not follow the formal and proper
format in making an application letter. With these, I would recommend to him/her to revise and
improve his/her application letter in order for him/her to make a great impression to the recruiter
which can possibly give him/her a leg up on the competition.
The Recommended Format:

(Applicant’s Name)
(Applicant’s Address)
(Applicant’s phone number/e-mail address)

(Date written)

(Hiring Manager’s Name)

(Title)
(Company Name)
(Company Address)

Dear Ms. Brown,

Please consider my application for the position of assistant in the Engineering Department of
Concord Electric. I am currently a second-year student majoring in electrical engineering
technology.

I am presently an apprentice with your company and would like to continue my employment in
the Engineering Department. I studied for two years in Engineering. I also have six years of
working experience in electronics, through which I have performed crucial jobs in repairing.
These experiences have honed my skills and knowledge in the field. With this, I am confident
that I will become a valuable and effective assistant to the engineers.

As an engineering student, I am aware of the tasks and duties that I will partake in your
company. I believe that a relationship with your company will be beneficial not just to the
company, but also to myself. I know that your company is the best training grounds for
engineering students like me. Working as an assistant in the Engineering Department will surely
help me improve my skills and gain enough knowledge about the field of engineering.

I hope you will spare a little bit of your time to read the attached resume. If I am what you’re
looking for in your company, you can contact me during weekdays after 3:00 p.m. at (555) 568-
9867.

Sincerely,

(Applicant’s Signature)

(Applicant’s Name)