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Respect is very important for a society to work well. The young people are usually INTRODUCTION
(E) Attitude is defined;
thesis is clearly focused;
taught by their parents to respect their elders. Some young today are raised to only subject is significant ▢
(G) Unclear; formulaic;
think of themselves and do not respect the elders surroundings them. I disagree that not creative ▢
(F) Incomplete, ineffective,
the young today has lack of respect for the eldery due to poor parenting. There are or missing ▢
(P) Lack of knowledge and
various factors that cause young people lack of respect to eldery. understanding of the
topic ▢

Firstly poor parenting. Nowdays, parents pay less attention to their children due to
BODY PARAGRAPHS
(E) Interesting;
busy working. They were used to give their children everything and anything their sophisticated; insightful ▢
(E) Detailed; accurate;
children want, no matter the things is needed or just their children want. In Parents convincing ▢
(E) Engaging and powerful
should never use disrespectful words for the grandparents in front of their children. choice of words ▢

Because children learn from what they see and if parents do not show respect to (G) Simplistic; uneven in
quality; lack in relevance ▢
grandparents, children will do the same to other elders. (G) Uneven ▢

(F) Absent or ineffective ▢

(F) Vague, missing, or
Next, school also play an important role in inculcating moral values to youngs. For inaccurate ▢
(F) Limited, monotonous,
example, by telling the young the important of respect to elders and stories. inappropriate ▢

Teachers also teach them how to greet elders and talk politely with the elder. In (P) Lack of knowledge and
understanding of the
school punishment is needed for those who lack of manners. I believe that with topic ▢

good cooperation between parents and schools, the young will be more politely PLAGIARISM
(E) Less than 10% ▢
and have good manners to the elders. (G) 10%-15% ▢
(F) 16%-20% ▢
(P) More than 20% ▢

The influence of friend can give a negative effects on young. The young will learn ---------------
ORGANISATION
what their friends do and they will do in the same way. If their friend did not show (E) Effective argument;
reinforces the content ▢
respect to elders, they will do that too. As we can see the video that going viral by (E) Effective and varied ▢
(G) Ineffective or
someone, it shows that the elders ask the a group of young man to go to prayer. inconsistent ▢
(F) Random, absent ▢
But what the young man did was, they scold the old man and hit him. It is truly (P) More than 20% ▢

heartbreaking that old people are not being well-treated and respected.
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MECHANICS
(E) Complete; varied;
interesting ▢
(E) Error-free ▢
(G) Variety is present; some
errors are evident ▢
(G) Careless/ distracting ▢
(F) Repetitious; fragments
and run-ons are frequent ▢
(G) Block meaning ▢
(P)Inability to form
coherent sentences ▢

In conclusion, all parties must work together to curb the problem lack of respect CONCLUSION
(E) Extends; connects;
comments on topics ▢
for the elders. If more people were respectful, the world would be more positive (G) Summarizes previously
stated information ▢
in lively. Lack of respect should not be appearing in our next generation. (F) Absent, incomplete, or
unfocused ▢
(P) Lack of knowledge and
understanding of the
topic ▢

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