SNOW TOWN SAI GON

I always wonder what snow looks like? . Unfortunately,

Vietnam belongs to the monsoon climate, so there is almost no
snowfall. And last week when my friend came back from the US, I
asked her how the snow looked, is it hard and she took me to Snow
Town SG in Thu Duc.
I thought how could there be snow in the heart of SG? But
when I got there, I was completely surprised and immersed in the
snowy space. The chilly air makes me feel like I'm in a faraway
European country. I have personally touched the snow and I know
it is very porous and white, not dry as I imagined. then we went to
the ski area at Snow Town, it was moderately steep and had full
protective gear. so a person like me who doesn't know what snow
is like can also skate easily.
Not only skiing, there are also many interesting games such
as snowman molding, shooting, or adventure games. We played all
the games, then went out to eat, and took some pictures as a
souvenir. My friend said that "although this is just artificial snow,
it's fun to play, isn't it, if I have the opportunity I will take you to
the US so that you can touch real snow". That day I was really
happy and happy to have such a close friend.
If everyone wants to know what snow looks like, Snow Town
Saigon is the ideal destination that everyone should not miss.
Therefore, if you have the opportunity to travel to Saigon, once
come to this famous amusement park to have fun and have
memorable memories.

Reviewer: Huynh Thi Truc Bang

Your essay is wonderful, I can visualize how your trip is in
Thu Duc.
However, you need to pay attention to the punctuation and
tenses.
And I don’t see any risk in your trip because the topic is”
One risky event”.