ELT. Structure of Rody Paragraphs ‘Analysis of Body Paragraphs Practice of Body Paragraph Lesson Summary, TASK 1 IMPROVE YOUR SCORE Task Achiovernent ones herence and Cohesion — 2 Tanies Lexical Resource owes ‘Grammatical Range and Ac Lesson Summary, TASK 2 Learning Outcomes (Cheek Your Knowledge Overall Structure ‘Tonics Question Types, A Tovies Improve your IELTS Academic Writing score / Paragra, Lesson Lesson 13 37%) Previous 13, Topic 6 37% Complete Analysis of Body Paragraphs In the previous video, you learnt about the structure of body paragraphs for Task 1. Now you will analyse another model response that. describes a bar chart. Before you look at the model response, read the question below. Look at the body paragraphs. How are they organised? What are their topics?ELT. Structure of Body Paragraphs Practice of Body Paragraphs Language Focus: Contrast Organisstion andLogic 3 Tavies Practice Lesson Summary, TASK 1 IMPROVE YOUR SCORE Task Achievernent ones erence and Cohesion — 2 Tanies Lexical Resource ones ‘Grammatical Range and Ac Lesson Summary, TASK 2 Leatning Outcomes (Check Your Knowledge Overall Structure ‘sTowis ‘Question Types. A Topics Model Response In all four countries, the least Popular holiday was staying at home, which had between 8% and 13% popularity. Beach holidays and Skiing received relatively similar responses across the four countries, with a difference of only 8% and 10% respectively, between highest and lowest percentages. The holidays that produced the greatest difference in response were hiking and city holidays. Hiking was most popular in New Zealand, at around 38%, which ‘was also the highest percentage across all responses. However, in South Korea the popularity of hiking was only just over 10%. City holidays, on the other hand, received a strong preference in China, at 30% while in New Zealand this holiday was one of the least popular, at only around 8%. Check Your Answers ¥ Locating Information Look again at the model response and identify where each piece of information (1-6) came from in the chart (A-F). 2) tls, i aELT. Structure of Body Paragraphs, Practice of Body Paragraphs OrganisationandLogic Tonics Lesson Summary, TASK 1 IMPROVE YOUR SCORE Task Achievement 2onies Coherence and Cohesion 2 Tanies Lexical Resource ones Grammatical Range and Ac... 2 Topics Lesson Summary TASK 2 Leatning Outcomes (Cheek Your Knowledge Qverall Structure ‘Sonics ‘Question Types. Tonics 1) Inall four countries, the least popular holiday was staying at home, which had between 8% and 13% popularity. 2) Beach holidays and Skiing received relatively similar responses across the four countries, with a difference of only 8% and 10% respectively, between highest and lowest percentages. The holidays that produced the greatest difference in response ‘were hiking and city holidays. 3) Hiking was most popular in New Zealand, at around 38%, which was also the highest percentage across all responses. 4) However, in South Korea the popularity of hiking was only just over 10%. 5) City holidays, on the other hand, received a strong preference in China, at 30% 6) while in New Zealand this holiday ‘was one of the least popular, at only around 8%. Check Your Answers ~ 1. In all four countries, the least popular holiday was staying at home, which had between 8% and 13% popularity. F 2. Beach holidays and Skiing received relatively similar responses across the four countries, with a difference of only 8% and 10% respectively, between highest and lowest percentages. A 3. Hiking was most popular in New Zealand, at around 38%, which was also the highest percentage across all responses. D 4. However, in South Korea the Popularity of hiking was only just over 10%.IELTS Structure of Body Paragraphs Practice of Body Paragraphs Language Focus: Contrast Organisstion andLogic 3 Tapes Practice Lesson Summary, TASK 1 IMPROVE YOUR SCORE Task Achievernent 2onics Coherence and Cohesion Tonics Lexical Resource owes ‘Grammatical Range and Ac Lesson Summary, TASK 2 Leatning Outcomes (Check Your Knowledge Overall Structure ‘Sous ‘Question Types. A Topics 5. City holidays, on the other hand, received a strong preference in China, at 30% C 6. while in New Zealand this holiday was one of the least popular, at only around 8%. B Assessing Body Paragraphs Look at these attempts to write body paragraphs for this chart. What feedback would you give this candidate? Does the response include all details from the bar chart? Which details does it include? Skiing is a popular holiday activity. 30 percent of people in ‘Australia and South Korea prefer skiing; however, only 20% of people in China enjoy skiing. Beach holidays are preferred by between 15 and 20 % of people in New Zealand, China and South Korea but they are more popular in Australia where 25% of people prefer them. The preference for city holidays varies greatly with only around 7% of people in New Zealand preferring them compared to around 30% of people in China and Southern Korea. Hiking also has significant differences between countries. Over 35% of people in New Zealand like this type of holiday while only 12% of People in South Korea enjoy it. Staying at home has the lowest percentage for each country.ELT. Structure of Rody Paragraphs, Practice of Body Paragraphs Language Focus: Contrast Qrganisetion and Logic 3 Topics Practice Lesson Summary, TASK 1 IMPROVE YOUR SCORE ‘Task Achievernent tonics Coherence and Cohesion 2 Tanias Lovical Resource 2opies ‘Grammatical Range ang Ac Lesson Summary, TASK 2 Leamning Outcomes (Check Your Knowledge Overall Sty ‘Question Types ‘Tonics Check Your Answers ~ No. The response does not include all details from the bar chart. There is lot of information in this chart, so it is important to highlight the key Information only. in this case, the response has included information about the highest and lowest percentages for each holiday. It also finds similarities and groups data together. For example, it groups skiing and beach holidays together as these both have similar popularity in the four countries. It also groups hiking and city holidays together because these both received the most varied popularity in the four countries Selecting key information, and grouping information like this (rather than mechanically recounting detall) will help you to achieve a good band score in Task achievement. Mark Complete LESSON 13, LESSON Previous Next