Professional Documents
Culture Documents
Sender
Feedback Has idea
Returns to Sender
Sender encodes idea
Sender
Receiver
select channel
decodes message
and transmits
message
Defining Your Business Writing Goals
• Purposeful
• Economical
• Audience-oriented
Introducing the 3-x-3 Writing Process
Prewriting
25%
Revising
50% Drafting
25%
Determining Your Purpose
• Why are you sending the message
Secondary Audience
• How is secondary audience different from primary?
• Supply more background information?
• Reshape message for secondary audience?
Remember that receivers will be thinking…
Message Importance
Amount and speed of feedback
Need for permanent Record
Cost: How expensive?
Degree of formality
Confidentiality and sensitivity
Receiver’s preference
Receiver’s technical expertise
Ten Levels of Richness in Workplace
Communication Channels
Richest To Leanest
Ten Levels of Richness in Workplace
Communication Channels – cont.
Richest To Leanest
Expert Writing Techniques
Spotlight audience benefits
NOT: The warranty begins right away.
BUT: The warranty starts working for you immediately
Because we need more space for our This two-for-one sale enables you to
new inventory, we are having a two- buy a year’s supply of supplies but
for-one sale. pay only for six months’ worth.
Developing Reader Benefits and the “You” View
“I” and “We” View “You” View
Interview the
Target audience
Pleased
Somewhat interested
Neutral
Organizing Ideas Into Strategies
Use the Indirect Strategy
if audience will be
Uninterested
Displeased
Disappointed
Hostile
Achieving Variety With Four Sentence Types
1. Simple sentence (one independent clause)
She needs a Job
Fragment:
E-mail seems boring. When compared with Twitter.
Revision:
E-mail seems boring when compared with Twitter.
Three Common Sentence Faults
2. Avoid run-ons (two independent clauses without
coordinating conjunction or semicolon).
Run-on:
He’s addicted to social media he posts updates constantly.
Revision:
He’s addicted to social media, and he posts updates constantly.
Revision:
He’s addicted to social media; he posts updates constantly.
Three Common Sentence Faults
2. Avoid comma splices (two clauses joined without proper
punctiation).
Comma splice:
He prefers a tablet, she prefers her laptop.
Revision:
He prefers a tablet; she prefers her laptop.
Revision:
He prefers a tablet; however, she prefers her laptop.
Revision:
He prefers a tablet, but she prefers her laptop.
Prefer Short Sentences
• 15 words • 90%
• 19 words • 80%
• 28 words • 50%
Developing Emphasis
Emphasize important ideas by using vivid and specific words
General Vivid, Specific
She has a new gadget. Lisa loves her new iPad.
Dovetail sentences by
Sustain the key idea by
connecting the Use a pronoun in one
repeating a key
beginning of each new sentence to refer to a
expression or a similar
sentence with a word noun in the previous
word throughout a
from the end of the sentence.
paragraph.
previous sentence.
Building Coherence With Transitional
Expressions
Use transitional expressions to build coherence for special effects:
Flabby Concise
At this point in the time Now
Due to the fact that Because
In very few cases Seldom
Despite the fact that Although
In the near future soon
Revising for Conciseness
Limit long lead-ins.
Wordy Concise
This is to let you know that
Monday is a holiday.
Monday is a holiday.
I am sending this e-mail to
Our internal audit begins on
announce that our internal
January 5.
audit begins on January 5.
Taking Time to Revise:
Writing Process:
Wordy Concise
There are at least ten
At least ten applicants applied
candidates who applied for
for that position.
that position.
It was Becca Lopez who was Becca Lopez was finally
finally selected. selected.
Revising for Conciseness
Reject redundancies
Redundant Concise
Combined together Combined
Exact same Exact or same
My personal opinion My opinion
Refer back Refer
Revising for Conciseness
Purge empty word
Wordy Concise
In the case of General Motors, the
General Motors was reorganized
car company was reorganized.
We are aware of the fact that We know many managers need
many managers need assistance. assistance
When it arrived, I deposited your I deposited your check
check immediately. immediately
Revising for Conciseness
Condense messages for social media microblogging.
Personalize whenever
Include only main ideas
possible
Be prepared to revise
Choose descriptive but many times for
short words. conciseness, clarity, and
correctness.
Tweet Reply to Unhappy Bank of America
Customer
@BofA Help.
Sorry you feel that way.
If you change your mind
and want to see if we
can help, please DM
your name/zip/phone.
Making Your Message Clear
Keep it short and simple
Wordy Concise
It would not be inadvisable for
you to affix your signature at You should sign now.
this point in time.
Here are implements that are
necessary for the job to be Here are tools to do the job
completed in a satisfactory satisfactorily
manner
Making Your Message Clear
Dump trite business phrases.
Trite Improved
Pursuant to your request As you requested
Please do no hesitate to Please
With reference to About
Enclosed please find Enclosed is
Making Your Message Clear
Drop clichés (worn phrases), slang (informal words with
extravagant meanings), and business buzzwords.
• Including bulleted or
• numbered lists
Setting margins
• Use 1 to 1 ½ inch margins
How to set
Margins
Enhancing Readability Through Document
Design
Setting for Ragged-Right Margins Result
Ragged-right margins provide more white space
and improve readability
Punctuation
Names and
Grammar
numbers
What to
Spelling Watch for in Format
Proofreading
How to Proofread Routine Documents.
Reading messages on Look for typos,
screens: Use the down misspellings, and easily
arrow to reveal one line at confused words.
a time. Read from a
printed copy, to be safer.
1 2
Print a copy,
preferably double
Set it aside and
`
spaces. take a breather
3 4
Allow adequate
congratulate
time for careful
yourself when you
proofing
find them.
5 at least twice-once
for meaning and
once for grammar
and mechanics
6 reading speed and
focus on individual
words.
To Revise Manually, Use Basic Proofreading Marks.
Delete
Capitalize
Transpose
Close up
To Revise Manually, Use Basic Proofreading Marks.
Insert
Insert space
Insert punctuation
Insert period
Start paragraph
To Revise Manually, Use Basic Proofreading Marks.
To Revise Manually, Use Basic Proofreading Marks.
Revised Copy
Beginning September 1, the doors leading to the west side of the building
will have alarms. Because these doors also function as fire exits, they
cannot be locked; consequently, we are installing alarms. Please use the
east side exits to avoid setting off the ear-splitting alarms.
To Revise Digitally, Strike through and Color.
This is a short note to let you know that as As you requested, I made an
investigation of investigated several of our competitors’ websites. Attached
hereto is a summary of the findings. of my investigation. I was really most
interested in making a comparison of the employment of comparing
marketing strategies as well as the use of navigational graphics used to
guide visitors through the sites.
Evaluate Your Writing
Does it attract the Is it polished and
reader’s attention? clear?