The Short Narrative Essay

Unit 1
Self-study Material
Corrections are marked with a ✘

Task 1.
1. Wrong
2. Right
3. Wrong
4. Right
5. Wrong

Task 2.

Essay part From line To line

Introduction 1 4
Development 5 19
Conclusion 20 22

Task 3.

Wrong sample Correction

1 I hadn’t learnt I had not learnt
2 an idea, a great volleyball match an idea: a great volleyball match
3 with my friends! Carla, Luke, Lucy and Mat. with my friends, Carla, Luke, Lucy
and Mat
4 mom made us lemonade, we were spending mom made us lemonade. We were
spending
5 Immediately I called my mom, Lucy was bleeding Immediately I called my mom. Lucy
was bleeding
6 We just were playing, we had never imagined We just were playing. We had never
imagined
7 After that we visited Lucy After that, we visited Lucy

Task 4.
1. a. It was a hot summer day and I had been lying on my bed bored to death for hours.
2. b. I thought it would be a great idea to invite some friends to play volley ball at home.
3. a. When my friends arrived home we started playing while mum got some lemonade
ready for us.
4. a. I could see that Lucy´s eye was bleeding so I called my mum. ✘
 5. b. Unexpectedly the ball had hit one of Lucy´s eyes right above the eyebrow. It had been
just an accident. We were playing and had never thought it could have happened.

Task 5.
Gap 1. a. Sports can be a source of fun especially when we are young. When I was a child I played
volleyball with my friends when I was bored. ✘

Gap 2. b. An incident took place and it ruined my plans. I learnt that the hard way. ✘

Gap 3a. My friends arrived early in the afternoon. It was really hot so mum prepared some
lemonade for us. ✘

Gap 4. b. When we were having fun there was something unexpected. ✘

Gap 5. a. The fact was that Lucy and I were about to lose the match so Luke took advantage and
tried to strike.

Gap 6. a. When I saw blood on her face I shouted at mum who came as fast as a flash. She checked
Lucy´s eye and brought some first aid stuff to stop the blood. We stood still and silent while she
did do.

Gap 7. b. Once Lucy calmed down and mum confirmed that it was just a small cut, mum called
Lucy´s parents who came home in no time.

Task 6.

Mistake Correction
1 Love it Love them
2 We are child We are children
3 Made us lemonade Made some lemonade
4 Luke has always been Luke had always been
5 But this time, he overboad. But this time, he crossed the
line.
6 Unfortunately, meanwhile Lucy was jumping. Unfortunately, while Lucy was
jumping
7 My mum couldn’t understood what My mum couldn’t understand
what
8 Had never imagined it would happen Had never imagined it could
happen
9 And took her to the hospital And took her the hospital
10 That Lucy will have to wear a band That Lucy would have to wear
a band
11 So she will have been recovered by two So she would recover by two
12 Now, we all learnt we have to be Now, we all learnt we had to
be
13 From now on, board games From then on
14 Board games will be a good idea Board games have been a
good idea