OETademy

Your OET Coach

24 February, 2010

Dr. Donald Harrison

Oral pathologist Commented [DR1]: P
123 Queen St
Brisbane 4001

Re: Christina Hollis D.O.B: 20 March, 1950 Commented [DR2]: Add a comma here (,)

Dear Dr. Harrison,

I am writing to refer Mrs. Hollis, a 60-year-old married school teacher who presented with Commented [DR3]: Add a comma here (,)
a complaint of re-occurrence of inflamed gums. She also has ulcerated lesion on both Commented [DR4]: of the inflamed
cheeks and tongue which is suspected for oral lichen planus.
Commented [DR5]: an
Her medical history revealed that Mrs. Hollis was diagnosed with heart palpitations and
Commented [DR6]: and the tongue
high levels of cholesterol. She regularly takes Noten 4mg and Zocor 10mg daily.
An initial examination revealed that she has inflamed gums, red raised patches in the Commented [DR7]: as an

mouth and the tongue. She also has ulceration on her cheeks and has difficulty in eating. Commented [DR8]: and
Oral B mouth wash was advised by a pharmacist that helped initially but the gums flared Commented [DR9]: mouthwash
up again. Biotene dry mouth tooth paste and mouth wash was suggested but no Commented [DR10]: add a comma (,)
improvement has been observed. She manages to eat soft food.
Commented [DR11]: were
Mrs. Hollis is a regular attender and has had her dental check-ups on yearly basis. She
has amalgam fillings in her teeth, and has her wisdom teeth extracted. She has been Commented [DR12]: prefers

presented with dry mouth and bleeding gums for many years.
It would be appreciated, if you could further assess and manage Mrs. Hollis as you think
appropriate.
Please do not hesitate to contact me, if you have any further questions.

Yours sincerely,
Dentist
 Report
Word Length 193
Comments 1. The purpose is apparent in the introduction, and is clearly
explained in the conclusion.
2. The letter tries to include relevant case notes, but some
required information is missing.
3. An attempt to organize the content logically is seen, but
order of information and paragraphing need a little bit
improvement in places.
4. In addition, there are minor inaccuracies related to
vocabulary, basic grammar and sentence structure.
5. Overall, the letter needs improvement.
Estimated Grade C+
Estimated Score 330/500
Advice 1. Convey the purpose of the document generally in the
introduction.
2. Always read and select case notes carefully.
3. Avoid basic grammar errors.
4. Improve choice of words.
5. Improve the structure of sentences.
6. Improve coherence/paragraphing.
7. Always proofread the letter after finishing it.
OETademy OETademy offers a comprehensive package to cater all your OET
preparation needs:
Courses
1. PREMIUM PACKAGE
11 Live Zoom Orientation Sessions
08 “One-to-One” Speaking Sessions (with Feedback)
Detailed Listening & Reading Guidance along with Tips & Tricks
08 Letter Assessments (02 Letters will be Benchmark Assessed)
Complete Study Material
24/7 WhatsApp Support for any Queries
Detailed Guidelines regarding Test Day and What to Expect
Grand Mock Test (on OET Pattern)

➡ Discounted Price: RS. 8999/-

OETademy Letter Rs. 799/Letter
Assessment Rs. 4999 / 8 Letters (Bulk Offer)
Service