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Braeden Kimball

Mr.Smith

Honors Junior Literature

19 October 2023

The Hidden Dangers of Trans Identity in American Society

75% of trans identifying individuals have experienced suicidal ideation, and 30% of those

have attempted suicide (National Library of Medicine). LGBTQIA+ and specifically transgender

issues have become a blurry and nuanced topic of discussion as the dangers of which are

unknown to many. In truth, society is taking the wrong methods to curing the dangerous social

epidemic that is LGBTQIA+ and bystanders blinded by ignorance are helpless in addressing the

underlying problems behind the movement. Mainstream American media is manipulating

LGBTQIA+ identities to push narratives which are potentially dangerous to confused and or

troubled youth and adults.

In recent years, a strong push has been made, primarily by young radical liberals, and

many others, to bring LGBTQIA+ into the school curriculum in complete ignorance to the not

fully developed brains of children and young adults. At the young age of many, being told they

could be in the wrong body can be extremely confusing and stressful, as well as dangerous as

these same kids still believe in fantasy. The initiative in place as of now in 30 US states is to

physically alter the body of young people and cause permanent changes and potentially long

term health concerns through the process called “gender affirming care.” “Defined by AAMC as

“A range of social, psychological, behavioral, and medical interventions “designed to support

and affirm an individual’s gender identity.”” (AAMC.org). Doctors employ puberty blockers
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which stunt hormones in the body and alter the normal path of development, which are also

known to have health consequences such as brain swelling and loss of bone density.

“Transgender persons have higher rates of depression and anxiety compared to others.” On top of

this “transgender persons use substances at higher rates compared to others” and “trans men who

still have a uterus, ovaries, or breasts are at risk for cancer in these organs as well as trans women

who are at risk for prostate cancer.” (VUMC). Clearly, the dangers of gender affirming care are

serious and oftentimes chronic.

All just covered is in failure to mention those who regret their decision to transition and

in result of such lead a miserable life strewn with pain and extreme dysphoria. While the

detransition rate is only about 8%, this number stands to grow by year. This is because of gender

dysphoria diagnosis increasing by year. Transition regretters and detransitioners are silenced and

ignored by society was “the number of these people is too small to matter” in their eyes. Scott

Newgent, a trans man appearing in “What is a Woman?” describes his extreme regret in medical

transition, and lifelong medical complications due to it. He warns of children who believe to be

trans, that they are far too young to determine their future and alter their physical wellbeing.

Scott has endured numerous medical issues such as weekly infections of butchered reproductive

organs which have dramatically lowered his life expectancy. Doctors are actively frightening

parents their children will commit suicide if not receiving medical transition. In reality, after

receiving medical transition, the rate of suicide stands to increase by about 20 times at that. The

dangerous narratives which “medical professionals” are forcing onto the world are causing more

pain to children and adults than ever before.

Down to its core, the idea that one can change his or her gender based on “socially

constructed” ideals is deeply rooted in inherently objectifying ideals. A large number of women
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have come out stating their belief that trans women who dress up and adopt historically female

mannerisms in “expressing their gender identity” are limiting womanhood to materialistic norms.

At this point, the majority of people find it difficult to define simple words such as “woman,”

though pursue research in gender studies. The entire trans movement is based on cosmetic

medical institutions looking to steal the lives of confused young individuals through

experimental and dangerous surgeries. Yet, millions of people defend the mockery of gender that

is new wave LGBTQIA+ supporters. It is so ridiculous that as a society we are allowing trans

woman into woman’s sports. Men are biologically stronger than woman by default. “Muscle

strength of women indeed, is typically reported in the range of 40 to 75% of that of men.” As

well as the fact of “a qualitative difference in muscle tissue, such as a higher concentration of

glycolytic enzymes and greater proportion of fast type muscle fibers in men” (National Library

of Medicine). Trans athlete, Lia Thomas, of Pennsylvania University, is a swimmer who won the

NCAA Division 1 championship in 2022. Despite Lia being at a noticeable genetic advantage, he

was allowed to take away the opportunities of biological woman looking to compete at the

highest level. As a society we are fighting for woman’s rights but taking them away, letting men

who may identify however they want to invade these spaces and competitions? The trans

movement is forcing society to take a massive step back.

In conclusion, mainstream American media is manipulating LGBTQIA+ identities to

push narratives which are potentially dangerous to confused and or troubled youth and adults.

The medical paths currently being taken are extremely dangerous to the future health of

transitioners. Those who regret transition are silenced and do not receive the support and

compensation they deserve. Finally, the fact that gender ideology is based on objectifying ideals

and the issue of trans athletes.

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Braeden,

Solid job keeping consistent ideas throughout your paragraphs, and writing detailed topic

sentences which are reflective of the content of the paragraphs. A couple areas to improve:

● Making sure that all of our analysis has evidence to back it up. You mostly did this,

but in your last body paragraph there were some ideas that needed some more

evidence to fully support the ideas.

● Connecting the concluding sentence back to the claim AND the thesis (so the aspects

of living in America/succeeding

● Making sure all of the quotes are properly integrated and cited in MLA

Works Cited

Jackson, Daniel. “Suicide-Related Outcomes Following Gender-Affirming Treatment:

A Review.” Cureus, 20 Mar. 2023, https://doi.org/10.7759/cureus.36425.

Mitchell, Travis. “Americans’ Complex Views on Gender Identity and Transgender

Issues.” Pew Research Center’s Social & Demographic Trends Project, 28 June 2022,

www.pewresearch.org/social-trends/2022/06/28/americans-complex-views-on-ge.

Accessed 23 Oct. 2023.

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“Why Transgender Ideology Is Harmful for Children (and Everyone).” ERLC,

erlc.com/resource-library/articles/why-transgender-ideology-is-harmful-for-childre.

Accessed 23 Oct. 2023.

Human Rights Campaign. “The Lies and Dangers of “Conversion Therapy.”” Human

Rights Campaign, 6 Sept. 2011,

www.hrc.org/resources/the-lies-and-dangers-of-reparative-therapy.

Vanderbilt University Medical Center. “Key Transgender Health Concerns | Program

for LGBTQ Health.” Vumc.org, 2018,

www.vumc.org/lgbtq/key-transgender-health-concerns.

Boyle, Patrick. “What Is Gender-Affirming Care? Your Questions Answered.” AAMC,

12 Apr. 2022,

www.aamc.org/news/what-gender-affirming-care-your-questions-answered.

“What Challenges Do LGBTQ Students Face? | Williamsburg Therapy.”

Williamsburgtherapygroup.com,
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williamsburgtherapygroup.com/blog/what-challenges-do-lgbtq-students-face#:~:t.

Accessed 23 Oct. 2023.

What Is a Woman? lgbt.foundation/whatisawoman.

https://www.bbc.com/news/newsbeat-60429942

Rubric

Skill Not Foundational Proficient Advanced

Yet
Identifies a topic Appears in first Thesis establishes a
paragraph complex claim

Thesis establishes a
topic and a claim

Thesis Comments:
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Includes three or Includes multiple Includes specific,

fewer sources pieces of evidence meaningful, and
(from 8-10 sources) well-chosen evidence
Some evidence that clearly relate to that relates to the
relates to the thesis the thesis thesis

Includes multiple Includes a wide variety

Evidence pieces of evidence in of evidence
each body paragraph (primary/secondary
sources, political
Includes multiple types cartoons, opinion
of evidence pieces, studies, poetry,
fiction/narrative, etc.)

Comments:

Summarizes Explains how evidence Explains well-selected

sources supports topic points of comparison
sentence of individual among sources and
paragraphs evidence and their
connection to the
Explains how evidence thesis
Analysis supports the thesis of
the essay Demonstrates use of
advanced vocabulary
and varies sentence
patterns; evidence of
distinct voice and style
in the writing

Comments:

Little connection Explains how the Clearly explains

between texts; texts/sources are relationships among
difficult for the related, though points texts (how they
reader to see how could be more selective confirm or challenge
the texts are related or better developed each other, build on
each other, provide
Synthesis Includes multiple differing perspectives,
sources in each body etc.)
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paragraph
Utilizes a variety of
Utilizes transition transition words and
words and phrases phrases

Comments:

Some elements Heading is correctly No errors in MLA format

missing or some formatted
errors in MLA format
Pages are numbered

Most in-text citations

are correctly formatted

Works Cited: each

source entry is in correct
MLA MLA format
Format
Comments:

Shows evidence of Most quotes are All quotes are correctly

basic proofreading correctly integrated integrated

Follows essay Shows evidence of

Conventions
organization careful proofreading

Shows evidence of
proofreading

Comments:

Essay Checklist

Content:
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Thesis is the last sentence of my first paragraph

Each body paragraph has a topic sentence that is argumentative and relates to the
contents of the paragraph
I have included the required amount of evidence
My analysis explains how the evidence proves my claims
My body paragraphs relate back to my topic sentence and my thesis
I have attempted to synthesize my sources (agreement, disagreements, etc).
By restated thesis is the first sentence of my conclusion paragraph
I have properly cited my sources (in-text, works cited)

Writing
I have eliminated “dead words” from my writing (see list below)
I have looked at my transition words and phrases to ensure that they are effective
My quote integrations grammatically flow with my evidence (avoiding hanging
quotes)
I have included words/phrases from my thesis in the body of my essay (or synonyms)
I have utilized a grammar checker to catch errors
I have read my writing aloud to check for clarity

List of dead words:

● “I”
● YOU
● WE
● LIKE
● THING
● STUFF
● KIND OF
● SORT OF
● GOOD
● BAD
● HAPPY
● SAD
● MAD
● THIS QUOTE SHOWS (INSTEAD: EXPRESSES, ILLUMINATES, DEMONSTRATES,
DETAILS, EXPLAINS)
● “MANY WAYS”
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● “SEVERAL DIFFERENT WAYS”

● “TO BE” VERBS: IS, ARE, WERE