Class code: 223_DTA0121_01

Student’s name: Huỳnh Hoằng Nghĩa

Peer editor’s name:
Date: 19/5/2023

WRITING ASSIGNMENT – LESSON ___

Unit:
Topic:

1. The chart below shows the average cost of monthly contract for four different
mobiles (cell phones) in a European country from January to September 2002,
measured in euros.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make
comparisons where relevant.

 1st draft

The line graph below shows illustrate the average cost of monthly contract for four
different mobiles (there are Domo, Lex, Sim TX and Alpha) in a European country
from January to September 2002, measured in euros.

As can be seen from the graph, the average cost monthly of Domo, Lex and Alpha
were risen. The average cost monthly of Sim TX was decreased. Mobile Domo is the
highest in the beginning and the average cost monthly of Alpha is the lowest.

In January to April, the numbers of Domo, Lex, Sim TX and Alpha increased over the
period shown. But from January to February the number of Lex decreased from 11
euros to 10 euros.
Lex costs 12 euros per month in January, more than 3 euros of Sim TX. The figures
for the two providers were relatively close in June at around 13 euros per month before
the opposite trend became apparent. The average cost of Lex rose to 18 euros in
September, while Sim TX offers users a minimum price of 8 euros.

 Self-assessment (checklist)

 Peer assessment (checklist)

Content PEER Comments/
ASSESSMENT Suggestions
Task Response
Is the essay at least 150 words? x
Is the topic identified in the introduction? x
Does the thesis statement discuss both views x
as being asked?
The comparisons are
Is each paragraph related to the topic?
still a bit fragmentary
I don't see the writer's
Does the conclusion summarize both views
comment, they are just
and state the writer’s opinion?
doing the comparison.
Coherence & Cohesion
Are there one introduction, two body x
paragraphs, and one conclusion in the
essay?
Is there a clear topic sentence in each x
paragraph?
Are relevant examples and/or other x
supporting details (explanation, reasons, …)
included?
Are the sentences well linked together using x
appropriate cohesive devices?
Lexical Resource
Has the question been suitably paraphrased? x
Has consistent repetition of vocabulary been x
avoided?
Have spelling and word-choice errors been Some words are
checked? grammatically
incorrect.
Is there sufficient use of academic x
vocabulary?
Does the essay contain vocabulary specific x
to the topic?
Grammar Range and Accuracy
Has a range of simple, compound, and x
complex sentences been used?
Have the verb tenses and subject-verb x
agreement been checked?
Some sentences don't
Are most sentences error-free?
match
Has correct punctuation been used? x

 Final version

 Rubric for grading

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