The document provides marks and comments for an essay on the novel Hamilton. It awards full marks of 5 out of 5 in four categories: knowledge and understanding of the work; analysis and evaluation of literary elements; coherence, focus and organization of the essay; and effective language use. The comments praise the deep knowledge, interpretations connected to the topic, and use of evidence to support the argument about hypocrisy regarding education.
The document provides marks and comments for an essay on the novel Hamilton. It awards full marks of 5 out of 5 in four categories: knowledge and understanding of the work; analysis and evaluation of literary elements; coherence, focus and organization of the essay; and effective language use. The comments praise the deep knowledge, interpretations connected to the topic, and use of evidence to support the argument about hypocrisy regarding education.
The document provides marks and comments for an essay on the novel Hamilton. It awards full marks of 5 out of 5 in four categories: knowledge and understanding of the work; analysis and evaluation of literary elements; coherence, focus and organization of the essay; and effective language use. The comments praise the deep knowledge, interpretations connected to the topic, and use of evidence to support the argument about hypocrisy regarding education.
A: Knowledge, understanding and interpretation - 5 out of 5
The knowledge and understanding of the literary work run deep. What’s more, this knowledge is relevant to the line of inquiry and topic of higher education. Clearly this student has made extensive interpretations of this one, arguably small, motif in the novel. The conclusion especially shows a deeper understanding of the literary work in the context of the stock market crash of 1929 and the Great Depression and connects these events to a lack of educated, middle-class citizens. The inclusion of quotations from the primary source supports the argument that the wealthy class’ outlook on education is hypocritical.
B: Analysis and evaluation - 5 out of 5
The candidate has not only analysed allusions to Oxford University, JP Morgan and Maecenas, but the candidate has also evaluated their relevance to the argument of the essay, that book smarts don’t matter in a corrupt world.
C: Coherence, focus and organisation - 5 out of 5
The essay is very coherent. Clear topic sentences outline the focus of the paragraphs. The final sentence of each paragraph ties back nicely to the thesis statement.
D: Language - 5 out of 5 The student’s use of vocabulary, tone, syntax, style and terminology is convincingly accurate, varied and effective.