ojoarz024, 11:40 (1) Facebook
itis a generally well written motivational letter but there are a couple of problems.
There is too much use of passive voice and that is not considered good, And there
are too many paragraphs. 3 paragraphs are more than enough one talking about
your background one what you wanna do in future and why this uni etc. and
formatting for that quote is also kinda weird just merge that with the text normally.
‘One other problem is chronological... You should mention things in the order they
happened like you mentioned your job before your subjects interests it should be
the other way around. Also make it alittle bit more personal like instead of just
saying | am interested in project management because of this subject mention a
project you did and what aspects of that project in that subject got you interested
in this field etc. if you can't find an appropriate example that you actually did just
make it up
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