Dear Author,

I applaud your commitment to discussing the historical significance of the Vietnam-era

NCO Candidate Course. Your dedication to this manuscript and how you explore the Vietnam-

era NCO Candidate Course and its lasting impact on shaping the modern Army is truly

admirable. The purpose of this report is to help you in meeting the needs of your readers

effectively. By offering my constructive feedback, our main goal is to refine your manuscript so

that it becomes a captivating narrative that impacts your target audience. This includes

individuals with an interest in military history such as military historians, military personnel, and

other people interested in the evolution of NCO training within the U.S. Army. So, let’s refine

your manuscript so it makes a lasting impact on these readers.

Your manuscript, NCO School: How the Vietnam-era NCO Candidate Course Shaped

the Modern Army, passionately explores the historical significance of the Vietnam-era NCO

Candidate Course. However, the current structure and style lack the cohesion necessary to fully

engage the reader in this crucial historical exploration. While engaging, the informal tone may

not align with the expectations of a scholarly work. The chapters, while captivating, lack the

details and organization needed to provide a clear roadmap for the reader. These issues are

interconnected, impacting the flow of the narrative, and effecting a coherent understanding of the

lasting impact of the Vietnam-era NCO Candidate Course. These structural and stylistic concerns

are important to address as they directly impact the reader’s engagement, requiring a coherent

blend of historical accuracy and compelling storytelling to resonate effectively with the target

audience.

For example, structurally, your journey from a simple article to a comprehensive

exploration occasionally disrupts the manuscript’s flow, particularly in sections addressing

enlisted policies post-World War II. You transition from an article to a book which is marked by

moments of historical reflection and policy shifts, leading to occasional disruptions in the flow of

the manuscript. Consider streamlining the narrative, ensuring a seamless connection between

historical events and their impact on the NCOCC program. Stylistically, while the content has

great historical details, there is an opportunity to strengthen the manuscript with more vivid

stories or firsthand accounts in Chapter 1, where you discuss the origins of the NCOCC in

response to the Army’s shortage of sergeants during the war. This will provide a deeper

connection to the historical events described.

I hope you consider these revisions, rewrites, and additions with enthusiasm and

confidence. These are huge enhancements that will only strengthen your manuscript. The reasons

for these revisions are for our shared goal – to publish a manuscript that leaves an impact on the

readers. If you need any further guidance or have any questions, I am here to offer support. I can

not wait to see the evolution of this manuscript and celebrate the success of a narrative that will

make a lasting impact on the readers.

Best,

Sara Tilton