Task Comment: Feedback

Your Comments

 Do you think it’s a good sample writing? (Description)

 Yes / because they can practice grammar (focused on language)
/ topic sentence, orders with transition words and concluding sen-
tence
 No / need more focus on “sequence” / need more freedom (too con-
trolled)
 Your Comments

 Describing an event

 Yes
brainstorming
 No
outdated topic / too old
too difficult (need to write two sentences from scratch)
no coherence
Argumentative Essay: Feed-
back
 Structure

 Need to be in a paragraph format (not an outline!)

 Thesis statement => the last sentence of the paragraph

 Each paragraph needs a topic sentence

 Body paragraph => at least 5 sentences

(topic sentence -> supporting sentence 1 -> example -> supporting sentence 2 -> example ->
conclusion)
 Content

 Provide opposing views to check if your topic is argumentative in nature

 Example: problems with recycling (what are the opposing views?) / need to change a cer-
tain law (what are the grounds for legitimizing this as an official law?)
 Can you lay out the topic in the body paragraphs or does the discussion end in the intro-
duction?
 Coherence

 Thesis statement not a question

 Does the introduction “lead” the readers toward the thesis statement?

 Is the thesis statement holistic enough to cover the topic sentences?

 Do the topic sentences contain keywords that are related to the thesis statement?

 Do you have enough details to support the topic?

 Does the concluding paragraph summarize the essay?

 Reflect and Revise

 Underline the parts you would like feedback

 Structure
 Expression

 Check to see if your essay need to work on any of the issues mentioned today

 Check your grammar

 Check punctuation and spelling

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