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JAYME: Longish email re eclectons and
proposal to collaborate (play)
I should have given you directions to the eclectons since they do generally
like to stay out of sight. I started making ecelctons about a year ago and I
put them online to share with one of the other designers here and to get
some kids I know involved. Here is the link to the Eclectons blog:
http://eclectons.blogspot.com. You can find basic info about eclectons is in
the right sidebar. There is also a later post about the eclecton’s homeland,
Eclectonia
http://eclectons.blogspot.com/2008/05/where‐do‐eclectons‐go.html
The first eclecton I made was this one:
And the first paper eclecton I made was this one, which someone suggested
looked like a soldier.
After that suggestion I began to imagine staging a great battle scene with a
bunch of these toilet paper roll eclectons—they are obviously easy to
make—but that prompted the question about what the eclectons would be
fighting over. I decided that the reason for the battle would be that the
paper eclectons were going up against the plastic eclectons in an attempt
to gain access to a portal leading back to Eclectonia. The plastic eclectons
would be guarding the portal and they were pretty much guaranteed to win
as they could blast the paper eclectons with water and torch them with fire
so the aftermath of the battle would be pretty gruesome for the paper
eclectons.
But then I thought, “OK, but why this racial hatred between the eclectons?”
and I started thinking about the Hutus and Tutsis of Rwanda and the two
warring tribes on Easter Island and all of these situations where you have
this intense hatred between two groups. So often it turns out that today’s
oppressors were yesterday’s oppressed. So I started to imagine that in the
early days of eclecton history, paper eclectons had been the dominant
power with great paper cities and opulent works and what few plastic
eclectons there were had been held in contempt because they were feeble:
the glue that worked so well for the paper eclectons wouldn’t hold the
plastic eclectons together. Sometimes the plastic eclectons had to be
(horror of horrors) scotch‐taped together. But then a new glue—a secret
formula—was concocted that would hold together plastic eclectons and
they became the dominant race that went on to enslave the paper
eclectons in retaliation. Their slogan became “Stay True to the Glue.”
It seemed to me that there were some possibilities for a story with maybe
sympathizers between the two races, love interests, hero/heroine of
unknown parentage emerging with characteristics of both paper and
plastic, sage hidden in the depths of the recycling center, glue as a
metaphor for love, etc. etc. and I thought that it would be fun to work with
you to piece together a story since you are the one with all the expertise in
story lines, character development and that sort of thing.
What do you think?
Saturday, May 9, 2009 1:16 PM
KEN: RE: Longish email re eclectons and
proposal to collaborate (play)
Sure. I would be interested in playing eclectons. I went to the site and the
ones I am fondest of are #16 and #19.
Others look surprisingly sinister, and it's easy to picture the paper and
plastic ones ganging up against each other. And the quislings, brave
resistance fighters, and illicit trysts along the way. Even in outline some of
your ideas bust me up ‐‐ the sage in the recycling center, the hero/heroine
of murky and possibly mongrel parentage. I think it should be a heroine,
somehow. I find it especially poignant that all this strife is over a portal
back to Eclectonia. All that darkness and rage over homesickness.
Seems like the approach would be serialized, right? Like webisodes or
nineteenth century novels. Is there a venue? Is it Illustration Friday? Quick
warning: if we collaborate on anything you will be driven quickly crazy by
my practicality. I'm always looking for the lines I should be coloring inside
of. (Creativity's great, you know, so long as it can be decently contained.)
I could see crashing Illustration Friday once a week or every other week,
with a grand narrative outline in mind but enough flexibility to detour into
whatever theme they declare ‐‐ "waste," "electricity," whatever. I'm trying
to think of the format: is each installment a still image and surrounding
text? Has anyone ever seen an eclecton move?
In Japan they serialize novels for cell phones, I hear.
Tuesday, May 12, 2009 9:31 AM
JAYME: Prezi as a possible tool for us
I just finished creating the invitation to work on the
21st century global learner action figure. Check out
the presentation tool I used for the invitation, Prezi:
http://prezi.com/52605/ It takes a few moments to
load and then you click on the arrow in the lower
right corner to run through the sequence. You can
zoom in and out on elements by clicking them. The
tool has a lot of interesting possibilities, I think.
Sunday, May 24, 2009 9:18 PM
KEN: An opening prezi salvo
http://prezi.com/80146/view/<http://prezi.com/80
146/view/>
Things I'm noticing:
‐ it's fun to mess with, and you're right that it isn't
hard to learn
‐ something text heavy doesn't work very well ‐‐ I think your invitation
made better use of this medium
I'm trying to think of story elements that would rely on this style of
movement from frame to frame. Could we devise something that
integrated the advance to each frame into the narrative? I will ruminate.
Tuesday, May 26, 2009 2:52 PM
JAYME: Slideshare contest
As fate would arrange things, I
just received an
announcement from
SlideShare promoting their
‘Tell a Story Contest.’ The
contest has all the advantages
of “lines,” which, contrary to
any impression you may have
formed about me,* I like. There’s a limit of 30 slides and a deadline of
June 15. http://www.slideshare.net/contest/fuze‐tell‐a‐story‐contest
What do you think? Would that be a small enough bite?
Think about it and let me know.
*For the record: I not only like lines but am incredibly finicky about in their
placement in drawings. I just like to be able to color any which way inside
of them.
Wednesday, May 27, 2009 10:53 AM
KEN: RE: Slideshare contest
I agree that this would be a good way to start. As you say, it’s a “small bite”
and is well defined. How about if I get back to you in a couple of days with
some ideas for stories?
Friday, May 29, 2009 8:21 AM
KEN: Some ideas
Here are some possible beginnings. They go into backstory and character
more than the 30‐frame submission would, I think ‐‐ they're premises more
than stories, and roughly the second half of each one remains to be
written. I'll be curious to know which if any look promising, and if you think
they're on the right track.
1. The early days.
Paper eclectons rule. Particularly hard on his plastic employees is FLOK
TARDY, pompous and smug. They keep him preened and crease‐free. One
of his employees, NEMESS FURLONG, has an independent streak. He's
been mocked as a cripple all his life, because he's held together by a piece
of tape. Tardy took him into the household as a lavish display of pity, to
impress his paper friends. But really he just thought it would give him
license to be especially cruel to Furlong, who didn't have a lot alternatives.
One day Furlong's tape falls off, and he's rushed to the hospital. There he
encounters other wounded, persecuted, and downtrodden plastic
eclectons. Though they all have a lot in common, no one else has Furlong's
independent streak. Together, Furlong and the other deformed plastic
eclectons decide to lead a revolt against the ruling paper class. Their first
target: Flok Tardy.
2. Eclecton love.
A time of warfare and mutual hatred, punctuated by bouts of ethnic
cleansing. For generations the paper eclectons have been losing to the
sturdier plastic ones, whose battle cry is "Stay True to the Glue."
SEMOLINA PILCHARDS is an earthy, rough‐around‐the‐edges adolescent
paper eclecton. She loves practical jokes, her room is a mess, and her
parents wish she more delicate and refined. Their family lives on the
outskirts of the city, in a grubby refugee camp. Semolina is impatient with
her mother's emphasis on cleanliness, a losing battle for a race so porous.
One day she's playing fortress with some young boys she's babysitting
when she sees KCALIM ECNERRET, a plastic eclecton soldier, changing the
tire on his jeep. He and his friends joke roughly, easily, with military
comaraderie. She falls in love. And against all her upbringing, she secretly
climbs into the jeep to see where he lives.
3. The sage in the recycling yard.
A human soccer mom and her daughters pull up to four white bins behind
the local police station, one for plastics and the other for paper. Her girls,
MARTHA and SARAH, are identical twins with different personalities.
Though only 10, Martha is precocious in conversation, and she and her
mom talk almost as peers, comparing their impressions of the soccer coach
and making each other laugh. Alone in the back seat, Sarah is in her own
world. She watches as Martha and their mom walk around to the hatch,
still talking, and pull out the bags of recycling. Through the opening Martha
shoots her sister an accusing look, so Sarah gets out to help. She tosses in
the last bag ‐‐ cardboard coffee sleeves, crumpled homework assignments ‐
‐ as their mom gets back behind the wheel. The car won't start. She lets
Martha use the cell phone to call Triple A, and the three settle in to wait:
Martha and the mom chatting in the front seat, and Sarah standing outside,
staring down into the open recycling bin . . . where she sees a very old page
of a magazine, maybe from twenty or thirty years ago, wearing a cocktail‐
napkin fedora and addressing rows of egg cartons and toilet paper rolls,
here to gain his insight about the war that rages in the dark places between
the plastic bins and the paper bins . . .
Friday, May 29, 2009 10:12 AM
JAYME: RE: Some ideas
Brilliant. These are all so terrific. I had to go to a meeting right after I got
this and it was nearly impossible to keep a straight face.
I love them all but in the interest of practicality I think Number 1 would be
the easiest to put together. Can't wait to build Nemess Furlong and Flok
Tardy. Also all the other "wounded, persecuted, and downtrodden"
eclectons. This is going to be fun. Better buy an extra bottle of glue on my
way home...
Thanks for writing these. I can see that I'm going to learn a lot. I love the
details, like Flock Tardy making a big show of his phony charity and Momma
Pilchard's emphasis on cleanliness, "A losing battle for a race so porous."‐
something I hadn't considered.
Friday, May 29, 2009 4:08 PM
KEN: RE: Some ideas
Glad you liked the stories! #1 it is. I'll mull a little further and may send
you more notes, but I don't want to get too far along independently. It'll
help if, as you play with your parts, you can send me images as you go ‐‐
however rudimentary.
I'm really glad that contest came along to give us lines to color inside of.
Friday, May 29, 2009 6:44 PM
JAYME: Type animations
Just one question about animations. I'm generally a purist and avoid
PowerPoint bells and whistles but in this case it seems like they could be
useful storytelling devices and make it possible to do more with fewer
slides — but perhaps this is what you were saying earlier. Thinking about
the idea of Tardy's cruelty to Furlong I used one of the old eclecton images
to play around with typographic animations. I have it set to run without
clicking in the slideshow view.
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Friday, May 29, 2009 7:14 PM
KEN: RE: Type animations
That is a HOOT. And the facial expression is, well, expressive. It all seems
so feasible, doesn't it?
I think the text animations have a lot of possibility. Like you, I avoid them
for regular presentations, but this is different in enough ways that they're
worth trying. I could also see them coming in handy in a prezi frame.
(Don't know if prezi supports animated media uploads, but I think it does.)
If we use prezi next, I'd be up for anything to keep the text from appearing
so dead after those dynamic transitions.
Monday, June 1, 2009 8:40 AM
JAYME: Character pics
I have been working on the characters and am sending you some images to
see what you think. Nemess Furlong’s head might be a little too Wall‐E‐like
but he should be able to give a pretty full range of motion/emotion. Flok
Tardy, you’ll notice, is a dustbag. He has “Important” written on him in 3
different languages, which should assure his pedigree. His arms and hands
are made of sandpaper. I have and extra eye/headpiece that I can use to
change his expression and superimpose it in Photoshop as needed. I also
think that when the scenes are complex we could sometimes go with
drawings or silhouettes like the one I included. I’ll try playing around with
some styles.
I’ve included some of the gang from the hospital but this was harder to
wrap my head around since I’m usually trying to make eclectons look
perfect. Maybe I’ve gone overboard with these guys looking pathetic. I
might try making a couple of peppier looking ones. This is a different way
of working since usually I start by just seeing what suggests itself in the bits
and pieces. Also, I had only ever made that one paper eclecton and
thinking about what materials to use for Tardy started me thinking about
the differences in personality that the paper materials suggest: seed
packets and tea bags would suggest a different eclecton than firecracker
casings or telephone books.
Tardy’s pupils are wooden matchsticks (I went to town to get paper
matchbooks, which I was originally thinking of using for his feet, but I forgot
to get them.) Matchsticks seem like kind of a risky thing for paper
eclectons to sport.
Monday, June 1, 2009 9:34 AM
KEN: RE: Character pics
These are really good. They're cracking me up. And even though you say it
was hard getting your head around wounded eclectons, they really look
wounded. I'm a little amazed. I just looked again and I can't always tell
how you did it, but I'm laughing.
I'm also encouraged by the range of movement and facial expressions
you're building in, and the idea of the drawing or silhouettes when things
get complex. It gives us maneuvering room for later, you know?
I worry about Wall‐E for two reasons: first, like you say, Nemess looks a
little like him ‐‐ but just in the shape of the head I think. The body (and the
inspired peg leg) help a lot ‐‐ they're completely different, don't look at all
like a robot, etc.
The second thing is for my part of this. Have you seen many Buster Keaton
films? I have, and I swear they got many of the visual gags and style from
him, particularly in Wall‐E's nearly dialogue‐free 30‐minute opening. I
hadn't thought about it till I saw Nemess, but I want to make sure my
writing doesn't feel like it's in the same style. I gotta remember he's an
independent, aggressive revolutionary ‐‐ more like Che Guevara than a
lovable robot.
Tardy is nicely detestable, and the word "important" all over him cracks me
up.
I'm going to mess with some story ideas based on these guys. Can I include
and name plastics A, B, and C?
Thanks for the pictures. I will play as opportunities allow, and write back.
Monday, June 1, 2009 10:38 AM
JAYME: Making Nemess more of a renegade
Hmmm. I think for a renegade his eyes can’t be round, or at least not the
same size and round and the pupils shouldn’t be in the middle. He should
be able to give some sideways looks. Also some indication of a mouth
turned up at least at one corner. I’ll see what I can come up with. And yes,
please name plastics A, B, and C.
Tuesday, June 2, 2009 9:11 AM
JAYME: A new head for Nemess – with attitude
I made a new head for Nemess. I looked at pictures of Che Guevara but he
didn’t seem to have any defining features/expressions that said
“renegade.” So I went with trying to give Nemess features that said
“unpredictable,” “a little nutty,” “ irreverent.” See what you think. He
definitely looks stronger now even though his head is still held together
with rubberbands. I forgot to get a photograph of it but the black and
yellow eye can telescope, which gives him a slightly crazier look. Also, he
looks over his shoulder nicely and his shadow is pretty dramatic. I think the
yellow headpiece adds a little bit of a punk note, too. I forgot to say last
time that I will make him a feather duster to keep Flok Tardy clean.
I think that’s all for now. I’ll try to make some more hospital guys tonight.
Wednesday, June 3, 2009 5:41 AM
KEN: RE: A new head for Nemess – with attitude
Nice job ‐‐ somehow he looks not only more aggressive, but more proudly
plastic, too. Like you say, a little punk.
Feather duster sounds fun.
Thursday, June 4, 2009 10:46 AM
JAYME: Animation experiments
I’m sending 2 slide experiments. The first one doesn’t have any animation
but the second has a fair amount. I was trying to see if I couldn’t capture a
sense of disorientation at the hospital.
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Thursday, June 4, 2009 4:57 PM
KEN: RE: Animation experiments
These are so great. I wonder whether for the sake of the contest this would
count as two slides or three? The animation works well, I'd say. Not too
distracting, even for the purist.
I'm attaching a first draft outline. I was aiming for 27 slides and ran over, so
I'm hoping you'll see things to cut ‐‐ either because they don't add to the
story, or because they're hard to make visual. I left a column for you to put
in notes if you want to work from this and send it back, but any way is fine.
Friday, June 5, 2009 6:32 PM
KEN: Too much story?
I didn't mean to make your in‐box sag under the weight of so much story,
and you'll be joining a long, proud tradition of skinflint indie producers if
you tell me to reduce the characters, or locations, or page count. I'll
cheerfully do any or all of those. But I am looking forward to seeing what
you do with Wand.
Tuesday, June 9, 2009 8:53 AM
JAYME: Some pictures for scenes
I worked on the scenes over the weekend. I must have been insane to
think that I would be able to get much acting ability from eclectons. (Small
bite, small bite?) However I did finish up all of the sets and props and most
of the characters by Monday afternoon but then it was dark and rainy and
hard to shoot anything. (Full disclosure: I only have this old digital camera
that runs on batteries that have to be taped in because the housing is
broken. Also I’m a terrible photographer but I get by just taking millions of
shots and usually do better with natural light.) The sun did come out
between 4‐7 last night so I cleared the dog out of the potting shed and shot
a few things there. Also it was out between 5‐6 this morning so I think I got
one more. I’m sending you bits and pieces of what I have so far but I’m
starting to gain (a little) confidence that it can be pulled off.
I think I’ll send this in two separate emails so it doesn’t completely clog
your inbox. The first will be just general shots and the second email will
have what I think could be possibilities for slides. I’ve started numbering
them based on the outline you sent. See what you think. I think I’ll get
better as time goes on.
Tuesday, June 9, 2009 8:54 AM
JAYME: Slide possibilities
Here are some possibilities for slides but I think some of them might be
improved if there is time. I’m not too happy with the way Tardy’s
“Importants” are swelling and I think I could improve Banesh blushing.
Tuesday, June 9, 2009 10:21 AM
KEN: RE: Slide possibilities
So far so good! The plastic cups stacked on each other for the additional
kitchen worker made me laugh ‐‐ very resourceful. I really like what you did
with Wand ‐‐ was that really originally a doily? Or did you cut up a round
piece of paper? I think you made her eyes quite expressive.
I also really like your nighttime lighting for the hospital, and the way you're
staging all this. Pretty good for a self‐proclaimed terrible photographer.
Tuesday, June 9, 2009 11:54 AM
JAYME: RE: Slide possibilities
Here are a few more. I should be able to get some better ones tonight.
What do you think? Will we be able to pull this off? The eclectons are a
little stiff...
Tuesday, June 9, 2009 2:12 PM
KEN: RE: Slide possibilities
I do think we'll be able to pull this off. I wouldn't sweat the stiffness or lack
of emotional range. (I have written for actors with less emotional range.)
Your latest slides haven't yet resorted to onscreen text, which'll go a long
way.
Do eclectons stand easily? If so, you might try less stagey arrangements,
letting some have their backs to us, blocking the lens with part of the set,
implying more life outside of the frame, etc. (Easily said, when you don't
see that the world beyond the frame is dog in a potting shed.) I'm not sure
that's feasible, or even particularly what you're going for.
Wednesday, June 10, 2009 1:11 PM
JAYME: More scenes: Hospital
I’m sending a few more shots I took last night and this morning. I’ll batch in
separate emails.
Wednesday, June 10, 2009 1:14 PM
JAYME: More scenes: Scullery
Wednesday, June 10, 2009 1:15 PM
JAYME: More scenes: Dusting
Wednesday, June 10, 2009 1:32 PM
JAYME: Last two
I think there are some others but I have to look through them.
Wednesday, June 10, 2009 2:09 PM
KEN: RE: More scenes: Hospital
How fun! I love the listening at the door, and how you used the extended
part of the plastic head to look like a leaning ear! Nice job varying the
angles, too, in the hospital scenes, "knocked over," etc.
Thursday, June 11, 2009 9:25 AM
KEN: The story
Here is a Word file of the story. What really stumps me is how to
incorporate text, transitions, etc. into the images. Still to do. But
meanwhile here's a possible ordering and narrative.
Thursday, June 11, 2009 9:31 AM
KEN: One more thing
Forgot to mention: this is a 30‐slide draft. I don't have strong convictions
about which images I cut. I'm pretty sure we need three close‐ups, where
indicated, but I'm less sure of the pictures I selected. You have good ones
of the other party guests, preparing the canapés, eating, etc. They may
work better than what's here.
Thursday, June 11, 2009 1:11 PM
JAYME: RE: The story
This is great! And funny (but no surprise there). I think I can put the slides
together easily from what you’ve given me. I like what you’ve done with
the beginning and the end is perfect. I’ll try to get some of it pulled
together tonight and send you what I’ve got tomorrow. I hate to have it
run into your weekend but maybe what I’ll do is email you a near final draft
on Sunday. That way, if you have the time and want to make changes, you
can. Otherwise, I think there is all of Monday to upload it to SlideShare so
there should be time to make any changes you want then — I think they
extended the deadline a bit anyway.
Thursday, June 11, 2009 2:48 PM
KEN: RE: The story
I'm glad you liked it. I just reread the rules, and it still looks to me like noon
on Monday:
http://www.slideshare.net/contest/fuze‐tell‐a‐story‐contest
It's hard for me to gauge our competition. I guess the slideshare site's main
purpose is to hold actual presentations from meetings, not to run this
contest ‐‐ that's why so many of the entries just look like run of the mill
powerpoints. People had things up there already, and just chose "enter the
contest" as an option. I didn't realize that before.
The other murkiness is timing: the contest rules say the presentation has
to be uploaded after May 26, but many of the presentations under
"entries" are older than that. And getting views and votes! And some are
more than 30 slides long. I think ours would work better at 33. That would
give room for your additional angle of Nemess sampling the food, plus your
reaction shot from the paper party guests, plus some establishing shot.
Establishing shot: you know how the first sentence of this draft says
somewhere you have stuff you don't use anymore? That premise of yours ‐
‐ the definition of eclectons as ephemeral combinations of found objects ‐‐
really charms me. I wonder whether for a traditional "establishing shot,"
instead of Flok's nice house you could show an actual kitchen drawer, or
random stuff heaped in a toolbox in your potting shed, with your real dog
nearby. Something like that would be the first frame of the story, and
people who look closely might find Flok's "important" label buried there, or
a pink ribbon, if they went back and looked. Then the second frame would
be the first of those I sent you, etc.
I don't know. If there's a longer version of this after my screenplay's
revised, maybe that's the time to figure out how to build in more of your
premise.
Thursday, June 11, 2009 3:03 PM
KEN: Looks like animations aren’t possible
And further to that . . .
I just uploaded one of my presentations and found that their conversion
software can't preserve animation or transitions. Huh. At least, it can't do
it from PowerPoint 2003. Just straight frame advances.
Thursday, June 11, 2009 3:17 PM
JAYME: RE: Looks like animations aren’t possible
Oh no. That’s terrible. As I recall in their promotional slideshow they
encourage contestants to use animations and embed sound. Damn. I had
thought that on the first slide I would have a picture of odds and ends with
your first sentence: “Somewhere where you live, there are odds and ends
you don’t use anymore” and then, with the second sentence, “They don’t
mind, because when you’re not around they assemble themselves into
eclectons” I would fade in smaller pictures of the cast. That definitely
changes things.
Hmmm...
You say they can’t do it from PowerPoint 2003? Do you think they can from
2007? From a pptx file? Because I do have 2007. I just tend to save things
as ppt to make sure that anyone can open it.
I’ll take a look but I should have checked that out earlier.
Thursday, June 11, 2009 3:33 PM
KEN: RE: Looks like animations aren’t possible
Might be worth trying from 2007. I only have 2003 here and at home, so I
can't give it a shot. It is a bummer ‐‐ it also makes me wonder about the
text effects you were trying.
Thursday, June 11, 2009 3:43 PM
JAYME: RE: Looks like animations aren’t possible
Ok. Well I’ve just been to the site again and you’re right, even those
“animations” that show up on their promotional slides are just slide
changes. But that’s alright. This is still doable. Who knows – maybe even
better. Let me see what I can come up with tonight. Here is the link to the
announcement that they’ve extended it until Friday
http://www.slideshare.net/newsletter/2009/june1?utm_source=MailingLis
t&utm_medium=email&utm_content=jaymej%40wsu.edu&utm_campaign
=Newsletter+2009+June
But the rules are still saying June 15th so we should probably play it safe. I
think the story you wrote is simple and direct and the words will lend
themselves to static slides. This will still work. See, it’s what we get for
thinking limits are so great.
Friday, June 12, 2009 8:43 AM
JAYME: Birth of a Rebel slides
Here are the slides so far. I still need to make some changes/additions,
noted below. Most of the changes are early on. It gets better as it goes
along. See what you think. I realized that since there were no options for
animating the type, there was probably no reason to stick with the fonts
that every PowerPoint user had, or to risk having the type get skewed. So I
decided to create the type as part of the image in Photoshop. This means
it’s more stable but it also doesn’t give you the chance to edit directly, that
is without going through me—hope that’s alright.
So here are the changes that strike me this morning:
#1. Just generally unhappy with the feel of this slide – looks like an 80’s
greeting card.
#2. Change text formatting slightly – from 3 lines to 2.
#4. Need picture.
#5. Need different visual. Want to get a good shot of Nemess but Tardy
should be in the slide somehow.
#12. Maybe work on the swelling importance but it doesn’t seem as bad to
me as it did earlier.
#15. Needs picture.
#19. Needs picture.
#23. Show shadowy form of match and melting arm.
#26. Remove to get us to the 30 slide limit?
We’re getting there, I think.
Friday, June 12, 2009 9:18 AM
KEN: RE: Birth of a Rebel slides
Good moves to here! I like the judicious use of more than one image per
slide, and your choice of typeface ‐‐ I forgot to mention yesterday that
those are not stable in the conversion. I play it very safe and still had
spacing problems.
To your notes:
#1. Just generally unhappy with the feel of this slide – looks like an 80’s
greeting card. I agree. Maybe it's too nakedly expository to line up the
main characters in portraits?
#2. Change text formatting slightly – from 3 lines to 2.
#4. Need picture.
#5. Need different visual. Want to get a good shot of Nemess but Tardy
should be in the slide somehow. I don't know. It's pretty dramatic to go to
him alone at a different time for his character intro.
#10 I like what you did with slide number 10 ‐‐ makes me laugh that you
have Nemess turning around cause Caper busts him for snacking.
#12. Maybe work on the swelling importance but it doesn’t seem as bad to
me as it did earlier. Looks fine to me ‐‐ really.
#15. Needs picture.
#19. Needs picture.
#23. Show shadowy form of match and melting arm.
#26. Remove to get us to the 30 slide limit? Heck, yes. I'd even remove it if
we were below the limit ‐‐ it doesn't add much.
I like your slide #30 close‐up a lot. I'm not sure the last two slides work
story‐wise. It may be that Moss should get the second‐to‐last close‐up so
we end on Nemess. I will ruminate.
Friday, June 12, 2009 1:10 PM
JAYME: New first slide
See if you think this is any better.
Friday, June 12, 2009 2:37 PM
KEN: RE: New first slide
Better! Looks less like the GoGos vacation video. (Was that your 80s
reference I wonder?)
Some day ‐‐ and maybe not for this presentation ‐‐ I want to better
articulate why I think your dog, or someone's hand, or a real living room
should be visible as part of the story. There's something about juxtaposing
a vigorously real‐world setting like that against this decontextualized
eclecton fantasy that (for me at least) goes to the charm of your premise. I
like the idea that when I was a ten‐year‐old reading on the living room
floor, there might have been things going on in my mom's sewing box that
she didn't know about. Thirty frames may not be enough room to hold
both worlds side by side, though.
Friday, June 12, 2009 6:54 PM
JAYME: Nitpicking
I’ve changed it a couple of times since I sent it too you. I’m going through
now nitpicking each slide. I think there might be room for a couple of real‐
world intrusions within the 30 slide framework. And I’m sure the dog
would love to ham it up. What else is he good for besides inciting the skunk
to go off under the house at 4:00 in the morning? Such a great way to
wake up. Real life is sometimes overrated but I like your point about the
ten year old reading on the floor and imagining things going on in the
sewing box.
Don’t know the GoGos on vacation video. I seem to have missed most of
the 80s. Is it something that would round out my education?
Friday, June 12, 2009 7:17 PM
KEN: RE: Nitpicking
I'm nit‐picking too. Will it have a title frame? If so, I think it'd help to read
"Chapter 1. Birth of a Rebel." Otherwise the cliffhanger ending may annoy,
you know? Viewers could think it's a mistake.
Friday, June 12, 2009 7:48 PM
JAYME: RE: Nitpicking
I agree it should have a title frame to set up the context that it’s part of a
larger story. I’ll try to send you the most recent version, dog and all,
tomorrow afternoon.
Saturday, June 13, 2009 12:20 PM
JAYME: Birth of a Rebel ready for review
Here they are. I’ll check email later to find out if there are any changes you
want to make. I think it pulled together pretty well. Though I wasted a lot
of sausage pieces and dog treats trying to get that dog to do what I wanted,
which he never quite did. Would you check for spelling errors?
Saturday, June 13, 2009 12:36 PM
KEN: RE: Birth of a Rebel ready for review
They look great. No spelling errors. Let’s go ahead and post them.
Saturday, June 13, 2009 1:05 PM
KEN: Eclectons: Birth of a Rebel is up
Here's the link: http://www.slideshare.net/x4i8EtU3/birth‐of‐a‐
rebel?from=email&type=share_slideshow&subtype=slideshow
Fingers crossed.
Saturday, June 13, 2009 1:10 PM
JAYME: RE: Eclectons: Birth of a Rebel is up
I was on SlideShare when Birth of a Rebel appeared and I tried it out. It
seemed to work just fine. What a funny venue this is. I went ahead and
gave it a vote. I will post Banesh on Illustration Friday tomorrow and we’ll
see if that helps get some traffic to it.
Saturday, June 13, 2009 1:35 PM
KEN: RE: Eclectons: Birth of a Rebel is up
I've asked Cyndi and my mom to vote, and will widen the effort from there.
I think if we serialize this you should get top billing, though. Think of it as
alphabetical order.
Sunday, June 14, 2009 9:05 PM
KEN: The cursed indifference of the electorate
Okay, our story has 53 page views and only five votes?!
Among our voters: the random serial number is me, Kiniki is my wife
Cyndi's Hawaiian name. Then I see you and what I'm going to guess are
two of your friends. I've contacted mine and suspect they're among the
snooping‐but‐non‐voting. I really thought they had a stronger civic sense.
Or, it's me going to the page 48 times to see if anyone's voted yet.
My mom doesn't know how to load Flash.
In brighter news, Cyndi got out of her car this afternoon and saw a mop in
the corner of the garage, sponge side up with two rivets holding it in place.
She immediately recognized an eclecton smiling at her.
Monday, June 15, 2009 7:14 AM
KEN: FW: Congratulations! Your presentation 'Birth Of A Rebel' is being
featured on the SlideShare homepage
Hey, those two guys I'm picturing in the garage in Denmark like us! And two
viewers commented. This is fun.
From: Slideshare [mailto:service@slideshare.net]
Sent: Monday, June 15, 2009 3:26 AM
To: ken.odonnell64@
Subject: Congratulations! Your presentation 'Birth Of A Rebel' is being
featured on the SlideShare homepage
Hey x4i8EtU3!
Your presentation is currently being featured on the SlideShare homepage
by our editorial team.
We thank you for this terrific presentation, that has been chosen from
amongst the thousands that are uploaded to SlideShare everday.
Congratulations! Have a Great Day!,
‐ the SlideShare team
Monday, June 15, 2009 9:20 AM
JAYME: RE: Congratulations! Your presentation 'Birth Of A Rebel' is being
featured on the SlideShare homepage
Good to hear about being featured! I also posted on Illustration Friday and
linked back to the eclectons blog:
http://eclectons.blogspot.com/2009/06/illustration‐friday‐unfold.html In
that blog post I linked your name back to your IMDB page, which seemed
more appropriate than you CSU profile—but perhaps there is a different
site you would prefer? Or no link at all? Just let me know and I’ll change it.
We already got one comment from one of the IF illustrators.
I’m glad Cyndi liked it and I’m glad she’s seeing eclectons. (They really are
everywhere.) It seems to be going over well. I showed it to the people who
took me out to dinner on Saturday and they were charmed. I showed it to
my parents when I went over to upload the link to Illustration Friday on
Sunday and they liked it. Then on Sunday night I went to dinner at some
friends’ house. I wasn’t going to bring it up but as I walked in the door, my
friend was sitting on the couch with her laptop and she looked up and
asked me if I had ever heard of Slideshare. So I showed her and her
husband “Birth of a Rebel” and she was ecstatic about every slide and twist
of the story. When we got to the end, she asked,
“But what’s going to happen?”
“Well, I don’t know exactly.”
“I think they should kiss.”
“That would be tricky without lips.”
“Yes, but you made them. You could give them lips.”
(I suppose I could but would that really stretch them as characters.)
I guess we’ll wait and see what the next couple of weeks brings. In the
meantime, I’ll start sending the link out to more people...
Monday, June 15, 2009 9:38 AM
KEN: RE: Congratulations! Your presentation 'Birth Of A Rebel' is being
featured on the SlideShare homepage
How exciting! Yes, my IMDb link is probably the right one to use. And
thank you so much for promoting this. How great that people seem to be
enjoying it ‐‐ one really never knows. The dialogue between you and your
friend is a hoot.
Monday, June 15, 2009 11:25 AM
KEN: My Slideshare user name: x4i8EtU3
I have a horrible user name: x4i8EtU3. I can never tell when it's going to be
used as an actual name, or just the first field in a pair to log in.
Monday, June 15, 2009 11:35 AM
JAYME: RE: My Slideshare user name: x4i8EtU3
Oh. I don’t know. It sounds vaguely Eclectonian. You should make up
some picture of yourself using the numbers and letters and upload it as
your profile picture just to really intrigue people.
Monday, June 15, 2009 11:48 AM
KEN: RE: My Slideshare user name: x4i8EtU3
That made me laugh out loud.
Monday, June 15, 2009 12:59 PM
JAYME: RE: My Slideshare user name: x4i8EtU3
Dear x4i8EtU3: Online identity is not a laughing matter.
Tuesday, June 16, 2009 12:33 PM
KEN: Twelve votes!
Hey, three more ‐‐ nice to see. And a couple of hundred views! Plus a new
comment! I love my avatar. It even resembles me. I'm really kind of
amazed. Thank you. Maybe I should use that as my name everywhere. I'd
need to work on a pronunciation next.
Tuesday, June 16, 2009 1:41 PM
Jayme: RE: Twelve votes!
I see we’re not featured on the homepage anymore. However, I asked my
friend Brian to embed it in a post on his blog, which he says he’ll do tonight.
I personally think we should get the prize for the “Best Story Telling Ability.”
In the meantime I’ll try to think of other places to get it connected.
Wednesday, June 17, 2009 10:03 AM
JAYME: Birth of a Rebel on Puck
The slides did get embedded in a post on Puck:
http://www.briancharlesclark.com/birth‐of‐a‐rebel/
I don’t what kind of traffic it gets—but more than any of my blogs. We’ll
see.
Wednesday, June 17, 2009 10:15 AM
KEN: RE: Birth of a Rebel on Puck
This is great! What a good recommendation he wrote. I'm going to start
sending people there instead of straight to slideshare. He really frames it
well.
Thursday, June 18, 2009 8:23 AM
KEN: We have 384 views
Dear God. And 21 votes. I wish we could tell how that means we rank, but
I don't see a way.
Do you feel like trying chapter 2? I know, I'm supposed to be working on
my screenplay.
If you're game, I'm picturing another thirty slides on slideshare for now. If
we find a venue we like better, we could always use the last frame to tell
people where to go next.
Only for the next one please give yourself billing above me. It's your idea
and I have a feeling it takes you about ten times as much time for your part.
And if you don't buy those two reasons then think of it as alphabetical
order.
Thursday, June 18, 2009 1:30 PM
JAYME: RE: We have 384 views
Yeah. It’s hard to tell how it is going but the feedback is fun to read and I
think there is clearly an interest for a second chapter. And yes, I would
certainly be up for doing that. (Have you already got it plotted out?)
One book that might interest you if you haven’t already read it is The
Invention of Hugo Cabret. It’s a thick book, 500 pages or more, that is filled
with pictures but not exactly a graphic novel. It is more like it just switches
mode between pictures and text. It’s not perfect (though it won a
Caldecott) but it might make an interesting starting point for us. It also
interweaves the story of the filmmaker Georges Méliès.
Well, whatever happens with the Slideshare contest, I do think people got
hooked by the story.
Thursday, June 18, 2009 2:04 PM
KEN: RE: We have 384 views
I will very roughly outline some possible chapters, not slides, so that if we
do add a chapter 2 we can be sure it's not painting us into a corner. I just
saw that the library has The Invention of Hugo Cabret, which I'll look at this
weekend. It seems pretty cool.
Friday, June 19, 2009 1:57 PM
JAYME: RE: We have 384 views
Well, we probably won’t win this contest but the comments have been
encouraging. We’ll see what next week brings. I look forward to hearing
outlines for new plot twists.
Sunday, June 21, 2009 12:43 PM
JAYME: Thinking about the format for next time
I just checked to see how many votes we’d gotten. 42. Not too shabby.
We’ll see.
I found the notes from the original scenarios you wrote this morning and
they really are good. But as I read them, I kept thinking about how to avoid
losing all of the subtlety you have written in. It keeps nagging at me that
there’s got to be a format that would work.
Sunday, June 21, 2009 6:14 PM
KEN: Outline for 10 chapters
I was thinking the same thing re subtlety, and remembering your notion
that we could always insert a drawing instead of photographs, if the action
or backgrounds got more sophisticated than you could make with a real
eclecton. Yesterday I got The Invention of Hugo Cabret from the library,
and see what you mean. I think if we do more of these we should aim for
some portion of the slides to be narrative without words. Like 20%?
It's nice to see 41 votes, and all those views! Is it really 508? Cool too that
the views come from so far off . . . Belium, Peru. Pullman. (Pullman is Canis
Sirius, our latest vote. I really really hope it's not Kona voting for himself.)
Hey, I just went back and now I can't see how many votes we have. Did the
contest end?
So I'm attaching an outline for ten chapters. It's not too detailed until the
end, where I want to make sure there's a possible resolution for everything.
Other caveats:
‐ outlines make notoriously dry reading!
‐ this is all more history and poli sci than I think the story would feel ‐‐ it's
just what happens when you highlight plot over character
‐ within each chapter we could look for opportunities for whimsy,
digression, using Kona or someone else to break the fourth wall, etc.
Monday, June 22, 2009 9:45 AM
JAYME: RE: Outline for 10 chapters
This is so brilliant! So funny. It makes me want to get started on it right
away. Though I recall that you have a July 15th deadline and there are
probably any number of things I should be doing. And the format question
is still out there but I think it is easier to figure that out by working through
it. It’s likely that by time we reach chapter 10, we will have hit upon more
potent ways of combining the narrative and the visuals.
So, even though I know how you hate making up names for characters, do
you think you could make up some for Wand’s parents, sibling(s) and
betrothed? (I’m imagining that he is some kind of handsome but dull friend
she’s had since childhood but I will wait for the name.) If I had the names I
could be tinkering with making characters while you are busy doing real
work.
Kona did not vote for himself but maybe he should. He went home on
Friday and he even seemed kind of sad to go but I can always get him back
when we need him to play a part in this. I miss him more than I had
anticipated.
Thanks for the outline. There is nothing dry about it. It’s completely rich
and I can’t wait to “see” it all unfold.
Monday, June 22, 2009 9:52 AM
KEN: RE: Outline for 10 chapters
Glad you liked it. I will ruminate on names. (Yesterday Cyndi pointed out
they all sound like Ikea furniture.)
Monday, June 22, 2009 4:22 PM
KEN: Background on the Banesh family
Here's some musing for you. You'll see I gave you no quarter whatsoever
on the subtleties. I'm not sure we could write this stuff let alone stage it
with discarded objects. Maybe these are just the parts of the iceberg
below the water . . .
If you can give me that circus flashback it'll be really cool.
Wand's household:
Sheen Banesh: Wand's mom. In her day Sheen was a straight‐A student
and an overachiever. She also won the paper beauty contests and was
queen of the prom. She shares Wand's ideals but wants her to think about
what will happen when she's older, and needs to make a living of her own.
She's relieved that Wand has found a wealthy eclecton to marry, but
worries that she loves him for reasons that are juvenile and fleeting. She's
watching each second as the clock runs out on a precarious engagement,
fingers and ribbons crossed.
Strum Banesh: Wand's dad. He is smitten with his daughter. He grew up
bohemian, traveling in the circus. Once when he was young, to his surprise,
an out‐of‐frame gigantic human being accidentally flew a paper airplane
into the middle of the circus. To Strum's amazement the airplane winked at
him before the human came to fetch it, and Strum knew he had his next
acrobatic act. For several years he worked hard to figure out paper
airplanes, cracked aerodynamics ‐‐ tough with materials so tiny ‐‐ and
earned a fortune. And he won Sheen's heart. Although he loves his wife,
he thinks she rates creature comfort too high. Strum's been poor and rich,
and was okay either way so long as he had a compelling project to work on.
He doesn't come out and say it, but suspects his daughter Wand might
really be happier poor. And he desperately wants her to be happy.
Liff Banesh: Wand's older brother, no longer living at home. He's a young
bachelor in the city, caught up in the fast‐paced world of eclecton finance.
Streebo: the plastic eclecton who was Wand's nanny as she grew up. Her
relationship with Wand is complicated; they both understand that as a
paper eclecton Wand is the superior, but Streebo's authority was imprinted
while Wand was very little, and hers is still the only voice that can bring
Wand to a dead stop with a single rebuke. Streebo is Wand's closest
confidante, the perfect listener offering intimacy without influence. When
Wand feels charitable toward the oppressed plastic eclectons, it's Streebo
she's thinking of. She believes Streebo is content and loyal.
Deem Tumery: Deem is Wand's betrothed, heir to the vast Tumery fortune.
He and Wand really love each other and delight in philanthropy. His love is
a bit more romantic than hers, but just barely: mostly he's proud of the
way other eclectons look at her, and feels lucky when they hold hands (or
paper straws). Her fondness for him is less starry‐eyed: she knows he has a
good heart and respects his altruism. Deem embodies the tension between
Wand and her mother: Sheen believes her daughter should marry for
placid, responsible reasons, and Wand would swear that's what these are.
It's an uneasy truce.
Tuesday, June 23, 2009 8:49 AM
JAYME: The Circus
I knew the circus was going to come into this thing sooner or later. We
should do that flashback. I think I’ve figured out a strategy. And this
morning, driving to work, I thought of an imp I can recruit for the
interloping human. But it will take a few days. I should probably have
something to you by Monday. All the characters are going to be fun to do.
Deem Tumery sounds like something edible and highly caloric. Also, I’m
thinking a 1‐ring circus. I like those better anyway. Let me know if you
were counting on more rings...
PS. My son, Sam, put Birth of a Rebel on his Facebook site and he said that
some of his friends are already asking about chapter 2.
Tuesday, June 23, 2009 9:17 AM
KEN: RE: The Circus
One ring is great! My preference, too. And Monday is fine. I am tickled
that Sam's friends are asking about Chapter 2. Pretty cool.
Monday, June 29, 2009 8:31 AM
JAYME: Circus flashback
I put some pictures for the flashback in slides just to give an idea of possible
sequences. We can change things around at any point and I have plenty of
other pictures though not so many of the boy. (I’m used to working with
Kona and, in my enthusiasm, I think I may have overfilled Lucas with animal
crackers, cherries, and juice. He said it was making his tummy hurt to bend
over too much.) He won’t be around for a couple of weeks but, if we had
to, I could probably get him to come out and pose again.
I just looked back at the notes you sent and realized that I had completely
forgotten about the plane winking. Let me think about how to do that. I
need to make some aviator goggles and a neck scarf for Strum but I think
the boots could stay which is why I made him a ring master instead of an
acrobat. I know that he’ll need a new plane of his own but I have to do
some research on that. It’s kind of embarrassing but I actually don’t know
how to fold a paper airplane so I had to get Lucas’s father to make one.
What would you think about continuing to create these chapters in
PowerPoint but then exporting them as movies and uploading them into
YouTube? That would allow us to animate the type since I think that the
static type and images are really fighting for the viewer’s attention. If we
could use motion as another channel—and just keep in simple with fade‐ins
and fade‐outs, etc.—to bring in elements; I think that would be less jarring.
It wouldn’t be that hard to convert Chapter 1. If we do it that way, it also
has the advantage that you would be able to edit the text whenever you
wanted.
Monday, June 29, 2009 9:36 AM
KEN: RE: Circus flashback
These are so amazing! I love that you keep finding ways to make the found
materials appropriate for the characterizations ‐‐ the dollar bills, and
especially Streebo's warning bag!! They both made me laugh out loud.
Other things that are great:
‐ Wand has Sheen's eyes.
‐ The little paper airplanes in Strum's eyes.
‐ The characterizations! It's really something how they look like who they
are, especially Deem for some reason. His eyes make him look kind of
blandly well meaning.
‐ The star paper background for the circus is really nice ‐‐ gives it an
enclosed, tent‐like space and also suggests an audience.
‐ Frame 6 of the PowerPoint ‐‐ I'm not sure how you did that. The airplane
looks blurry, like you caught it in mid‐flight, and the composition in depth is
dramatic.
‐ Lucas is well cast! Worth his steep fees.
Is it in keeping with your original idea for the eclectons to be so clear to
him? In frame nine his sneakers come into view, and Strum and the lion are
kind of busted. I thought when Lucas came into frame, they'd go back to
looking like random objects, a little like the way Kona sees them on the
table in Chapter 1. Not sure what a balled up brown paper bag and a wide
paper ring would be doing on your porch . . .
I think jumping to You Tube is a great idea. It lets us make things move, like
you say, and it's also easier to tell people where to look. I didn't know
PowerPoint could export to movie format.
Saturday, July 4, 2009 9:39 AM
KEN: Notes for Chapter 2
Here's a bit more story. I think it's working in terms of the plot and
characters, but I feel like I haven't given you much to work with visually.
There's an awful lot of talking. Are there better ways to stage these
scenes? More interesting locations, or stuff they can be doing while they
talk? Not sure what to do.
Monday, July 06, 2009 11:28 AM
JAYME: RE: Notes for Chapter 2
This looks amazing—as usual—and I will start trying to piece some scenes
together, maybe even tonight. It’s so much fun to watch the story unfold
but to be involved in it at the same time. It’s kind of like reading but on an
entirely different level. OK. I’ll try to send you something to work with
and/or think about by Wednesday (but how am I going to get Wand to
smile and drink tea?)
Wednesday, July 08, 2009 8:41 AM
JAYME: Wand and Deem walking home
I only have a few slides to send you. I wasn’t really thinking when I said
that I’d have something to you by Wednesday that it only left two evenings
and one of those I had promised to create a logo or a friend of mine. All I
have so far are Wand and Deem walking home. You weren’t sure where
eclectons would be walking and neither was I but I had an idea when I was
driving home and threw something together before the “dying of the light.”
There are bits of unintended humor as a result. See what you think. Still
trying to get the type animations smooth and logical. I’ll try to get some
more scenes done before Friday.
Wednesday, July 8, 2009 8:57 AM
KEN: RE: Wand and Deem walking home
That's INSPIRED. The unintended humor is a must keep. I love your picks!
Just great, great titles. Age of Innocence, the faces, the poses. It's really a
hoot. Nice lighting, too. I'm so relieved you found a way to make this
visual.
Friday, July 17, 2009 11:10 AM
JAYME: Chapter 2 slides so far
I’m attaching the Chapter 2 ppt. You’ll see that there are still some major
gaps but having a weekend to work on it will make a big difference. I’m
guessing all the shots should be done by Monday. I just noticed that a
couple of them look a little blurry. I’m still ambivalent about the text
animations and maybe will try to do without them but still export the slides
as a movie. There’s that balance between what would look cool and what
would actually get done. And now that I’ve seen the outline for all 10
chapters it seems a shame to disappoint our fan base...
Friday, July 17, 2009 11:51 AM
KEN: RE: Chapter 2 slides so far
This is beyond fun, really. This PowerPoint is a hoot. The books work even
better in the full context, huh? I'm also relieved that the text‐free slides
don't feel weird. I was worried that it would feel like the story had
stopped, but somehow it doesn't. Maybe it's cause I've read The Invention
of Hugo Cabret?
My favorite of the silent slides is the transition from 11 to 12. Streebo's
eyes are so emphatic it really looks like she's turning to Wand accusingly.
The awkward pause on frames 35 and 36 is also working, I think. Oh ‐‐ and
the quick getaway, and judicious use of Lucas and his reaction shots, looks
good. It's reassuring that you found so many ways to downplay the
dialogue, after that talkfest I sent you.
There really isn't anything here I'd suggest changing or doing otherwise.
From what I can see of the occasional blurriness, it's working. The
eclectons where you want our attention are always clear, and letting the
bystanders in the foreground or background go soft helps clarify the story.
At least I think.
Monday, July 20, 2009 10:41 AM
JAYME: Chapter 2, the movie
I finished the Chapter 2 slides. They exported really well as a movie but it’s
a QuickTime movie. Can you open those?
I tried exporting the movie in different formats (AVI, mp4, etc.) but they
were much choppier. It could probably use a soundtrack but I would be out
of my depth trying to choose music. My son, Sam, decided to set up a
Facebook fan site for Eclectons. I couldn’t remember if perhaps Cyndi had
already done that? I’m not a big Facebook person but everyone else I know
is. Sam also thought that we should run some subplots in Twitter where
some of the minor characters would have their own Twitter accounts and
would be twittering between chapter installments. It’s kind of an
interesting idea. Probably someone is already working on the great Twitter
novel.
Monday, July 20, 2009 11:58 AM
KEN: RE: Chapter 2, the movie
You gave Strum a T‐square!!! That is a riot. So are the blueprints tacked up
on the wall behind him. It's especially great when you bring them back ‐‐
only more developed ‐‐ on slide number 44. It says so much about his
character, and where his heart is. And you got him to look guilty!! I am
amazed.
I also really like slides 31 and 32 ‐‐ the flares on the image of the successful
circus, and the small frame around Sheen, implying a neatly contained
image in a photo album or something. It's just the perfect hint about
what's setting Wand's teeth on edge.
Somehow you got Streebo folding tiny sheets that appear embossed. Are
those toilet paper? Great touch.
A request for you: on slide 36, can you move the text so it's above Deem?
I'm afraid it implies now that Wand said it. Same thing on 40 and 41 ‐‐ I
think nudging the placement of the text closer to the speakers might make
it a clearer read. (The way you did it on slide 52 and the others in the
workshop is what I'm picturing.)
On slide 48 it looks like the image is hiding some of the text ‐‐ but just on
my PowerPoint version, I guess because the typeface slipped. It works fine
as a QuickTime movie (which thankfully I was able to see). Generally the
whole thing seems to work better as a movie, and I don't miss the
soundtrack. Somehow the timings help, especially with the non‐dialogue
slides.
I think Sam's ideas are great. I'm glad he created a Facebook site. Like you,
I've opted out of that world for now. But I really think twittering would be
wise. I really liked Caper as a character and was bummed he didn't have a
greater role in the complete outline. It would be fun to try floating some
kind of "where's Caper?" story while he has amnesia, knocking out periodic
updates from strange places he describes.
Please give yourself billing above me. Please.
I don't know how to go from Quicktime file to You Tube. Do you? Do you
have an account? Do you want me to open one and futz with it? Also: can
you movie‐ize Chapter 1, so You Tube users will have access to it as well?
Here to help if I can.
Monday, July 20, 2009 3:54 PM
JAYME: About the billing
I made the changes and put the new movie in the dropbox. I’ll go ahead
and movi‐ize Chapter 1 (but I think I should change the type so that it is
consistent with the others). I will look into uploading it onto YouTube. I’ve
done it before, a couple of years ago for CTLT, but I don’t have an account.
About the billing: the writer is always listed before the illustrator—even in
those 5 sentence picture books. Also, the whole reason to do first author,
second author, etc. is to inform about the relative contributions but in the
case of writer and illustrator it’s pretty clear: you wrote, I illustrated.
Besides, I put us on the same line: you on the left, me on the right. I
suppose that somebody could probably read something into that if they
wanted to. But I truly think it’s okay and that anything else would be odd.
Truce?
Monday, July 20, 2009 4:26 PM
KEN: RE: About the billing
Yeah, okay truce. Meanwhile, I feel bad perpetuating what I guess is a
longstanding tradition of shafting the illustrator.
This is smashing. Thanks for getting the dialogue near the speakers. I
watched it carefully and checked for typos, and it looks clean. No futzing
necessary. I'll leave You Tube to you, and I'll try to create a Twitter account
for someone. Okay with you if I start with Caper?
Monday, July 20, 2009 4:33 PM
JAYME: Caper and Twitter
Please Twitter away. Sam said that he started an account for eclectons,
which is @eclectons but I’m not entirely sure what that means. And I can’t
seem to remember my name and password for Twitter—it’s been awhile.
So I’ll leave the twittering to you and Caper is a great place to start. Can’t
wait to see what you do...