Cal State Fullerton Mail - peer review

12/10/13 11:03 AM

Jeffrey Mueller <jeff24mueller@csu.fullerton.edu>

peer review
1 message Joanne Davac <joanne.davac@gmail.com> To: jeff24mueller@csu.fullerton.edu Peer Review: Improve Your Argumentative Essay One of the biggest challenges writers face is reading their own work as a reader rather than as the writer. Because you know what youre trying to say, youll find it easy to understand your draft. To determine what you should do to revise your draft, ask a friend or classmate to read your essay and answer the following questions. Wed, Nov 13, 2013 at 1:50 PM

Purpose

1. How do you interpret my purpose for writing? Does my goal seem to be to convince or to persuade? Your purpose is that you want to convince others that tap water is good for you. Yes, you are meeting your goal. 2. Is my overall claim plausible and debatable? Do you agree with what I had to say? If not, what should I do to convince you? Your claim is debatable for sure. There are a ton of people who dont want to drink tap water and bottled water for safety reasons.. 3. Do the reasons Ive offered to support my claim seem sufficient and appropriate? YES.

Readers

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Did you find the issue significant? Why or why not?

Yeah, my family doesnt drink tap water (from our house) because ours is softened water. But we waste so much money on bottled water. 5. Does my reasoning seem sound? Did you catch any fallacies?

It seems sound, no fallacies. 6. Have I used argumentative appeals appropriately and effectively? Should I consider making any other kinds of appeals? Yes. Sources 7. Does the evidence Ive offered to support my appeals make sense? Can I add or clarify anything to help you understand the argument better? Do you think any of the evidence is unnecessary?

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I think you did well on your reasoning and evidence.

8. Do my sources strike you as reliable and appropriate? Does any of the evidence Ive used seem questionable? Have I relied on any sources too heavily? Yes. Using the CDC is a great source. 9. Is it clear which ideas and information are my own and which came from my sources? Yes. Context 10. Have I clearly introduced and effectively handled counterarguments? Did I present ideas and issues fairly? Yes. 11. How familiar were you with this issue before reading my essay? Do I need to provide more (or less) background information or context? Did I fail to include any reasons or evidence that you expected? Im pretty familiar with the argument ! 12. Could I strengthen any of my appeals by bringing in design elements, such as photographs or tables? Maybe use a statistic table.

For each of the points listed above, ask your reviewers to provide concrete advice about what you should do to improve your draft. It can help if you ask them to adopt the role of an editorsomeone who is working with you to improve your draft. You can read more about these and other collaborative activities in Chapter 4.

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