Name: Dreyden Wedertz Date: Block: A-6 TOOLS FOR ENGLIS S! OLARS: S"##ATI$E ASSESS#ENT Soto, Gary.

"Seventh Grade." Baseball in April and Other Stories. New York: Harcourt Brace Jovanovich, 1990. Print.

T%e &enre o' Seventh Grade () a real()t(c '(ct(on *(ece +a)ed on Gary Soto,) l('e (n m(ddle )c%ool- It () real()t(c '(ct(on +eca.)e (t () not all tr.e/ +.t (t co.ld *o))(+ly %a**enT%e *.r*o)e o' t%() *(ece 0a) to enterta(n t%e reader and to e1*o)e %() m(ddle )c%ool l('e to create %.mor 'or t%e *lea).re o' t%e a.d(enceT%e a.d(ence) o' Seventh Grade are c%(ldren/ )t.dent)/ yo.n& ad.lt)/ *reteen)/ teena&er)/ and anyone 0%o en2oy) +ook) 0(t% )ome %.morT%e ma(n (dea () a+o.t a &.y named $(ctor/ 0%o %a) 2.)t entered to %() '(r)t day o' )e3ent% &rade and () *lann(n& to 0(n t%e %eart o' a &(rl %e %a) +een cr.)%(n& on )(nce t%ey 0ere +ot% tak(n& 4catec%()m cla))e) at Sa(nt T%ere)a,)5e kee*) on mak(n& a 'ool o' %(m)el' (n 'ront o' %er/ +.t (n t%e end/ )%e 0ant) to &et to&et%er 0(t% %(m )o %e can %el* %er 0(t% Frenc%- e )ee) t%() a) a 0ay (nto t%e(r 'r(end)%(* +e(n& )omet%(n& more +y )ay(n&/ 4O% no/ I l(ke +e(n& +ot%ered-5 T.rn) o.t/ 46%e ()7 &o(n& to l(ke )e3ent% &rade-5 Gary Soto/ T%e a.t%or o' Se3ent% Grade/ .)e) 0ord c%o(ce t%ro.&% t%e(r 0r(t(n& +eca.)e (t () a l(ttle more o' a lo0er 3oca+.lary and .)e) )lan& ).c% a) e)e/ 0%(c% mean) man- Al)o t%e a.t%or add) d(''erent act(on) 0%(c% matc%e) t%e tar&eted a.d(ence ).c% a) $(ctor and #(c%ael do(n& a %and )%ake 0%en t%ey meet one anot%er (n t%e %all0ay*re)ent/ ()*an(c 0ord)/ )lan&/ or collo8.(al()m)/ t%(rd *er)on omn()c(ent: T%() )tory &(3e) Se3ent% Grade a lot o' 2oy'.l and %.moro.) 'eel(n&) (n t%e )torySoto .)e) a lot o' deta(l) and de)cr(*t(on to de)cr(+e a certa(n )(t.at(on- A) 0%en $(ctor tr(e) o.t a )co0l/ a) %() 'r(end) #(c%ael commonly doe)/ 4%() teet% )%o0ed alon& 0(t% t%e 'eroc(ty o' %() )%o.lderIt () a 3ery o*t(m()t(c )tory a+o.t %(m try(n& to &et a &(rl/ named Tere)a/ +.t %e 2.)t kee*) em+arra))(n& %(m)el' (n 'ront o' %er/ +.t (t t.rn) o.t 3ery o*t(m()t(c a+o.t %() l('e 0%en )%e dec(de) to %a3e a )t.dy date 0(t% $(ctor-

Becau e ! want to "ive the reader in ide to the thou"ht , #ee$in" , and action , ! wi$$ or"ani%e &y writin" 'y havin" very de cri(tive )uote #ro& (reviou (art , &akin" &y character think a$oud, "ivin" i&a"ery o# the ituation , and u e $ot o# adver' , ad*ective , and noun to add u (en e to the hort tory. Becau e &y diction hou$d e ta'$i h the &ood o# u (en e, ro&ance, *oy, and heart'reak, ! wi$$ u e word that de cri'e the character #ee$in" , thou"ht , and addre the (oint that +he #ee$ that +he hou$d &ake acro whoever +he i ta$kin" to.

,o achieve "ood entence tructure, ! wi$$ &ake ure to #o$$ow a$$ o# the "ra&&ar ru$e -ca(ita$i%ation, (unctuation, etc.., add $ot o# de cri(tion, kee( the a&e ver' ten e un$e in a #$a h 'ack, #ore hadow, or other ituation where the ver' ten e wou$d chan"e, and u e a voca'u$ary that wou$d 'e u ed in that date, 'y that a"e "rou(, without 'ein" o##en ive or har&in" any o# the reader . ! wi$$ u e i&a"ery, a #ir t (er on narrator, diction, and (arado/ in order to e ta'$i h u (en e, kee( &y reader on ed"e, and to $et the reader in on how the character i #ee$in", thinkin", ayin", and actin" around other that "reat$y a##ect their deve$o(&ent throu"hout the tory. 0 ! want thi (iece o# writin" to how that ! a& a very deter&ined, de cri(tive, and dee( writer, o ! wi$$ work add irony, dia$o"ue, hy(er'o$e , under tate&ent , and &any other $iterary device in order to &ake the (rota"oni t i# the tory chan"e the way +he hou$d and wi$$ ha(e the tory to &ake it the 'e t hort tory that it can 'e. Dreyden Wedertz A-6 Ne0 Lo3e: A%---I can 'eel t%e cool a(r o' A++e3(lle/ So.t% !arol(na r.)%(n& t%ro.&% me a) I am 0alk(n& to0ard) my +.)- W%(le %ear(n& t%e 'all red/ oran&e/ and &reen lea3e) cr.nc%(n& .nderneat% my year-old 'lat)/ I looked .* at t%e )ky 0onder(n& (' t%() () t%e year I &et t%e &.y- It () my )en(or year at A++e3(lle (&%/ and I,3e +een cr.)%(n& on t%() &.y #(c%ael !aron )(nce 0e met (n Second Grade- We .)e to +e t%e +e)t o' 'r(end) .nt(l %e )tarted dat(n& La.ra 9o%n)on (n %() )o*%omore yearB.t/ I %a3e dec(ded to do )omet%(n& a+o.t t%atLa.ra and #(c%ael +reak .* 0(t% eac% ot%er a'ter e3ery )t(nk(n& '(&%t- e doe)n,t l(ke %er earr(n&)/ t%ey +reak .*- e l(e)/ t%ey &et +ack to&et%er- S%e doe)n,t )%o0 .* to %() 'oot+all &ame/ t%ey +reak .*- It,) l(ke a Taylor S0('t )on& )t.ck on re*layWell/ +e'ore I made my mo3e/ I %ad to con).lt my +e)t 'r(end 9o)e*% #(ller a+o.t %(m- I %a3e a)ked %(m a+o.t e3eryt%(n& )(nce t%e F(r)t Grade- e %a) %el*ed me 0(t% e3ery *ro+lem/ and e3eryt%(n& t%at %a) e3er %a**ened to me/ I 'elt t%at %e 0a) t%e r(&%t &.y to a)kA'ter Geometry cla)) I 0alked .* to %(m at %() locker (n t%e :;; %all- I a)ked %(m/ 4So< 0%at do yo. t%(nk a+o.t #(c%ael !aron-5 4=o. mean t%e &.y yo.,3e +een cr.)%(n& on )(nce l(ke/ I don,t kno0/ Second Grade- I &.e)) %e,) okay- I don,t really kno0 %o0 yo. 0ant me to *.t t%at-5 4!an yo. at lea)t +e )er(o.)>5 4I %a3e no (dea 0%at yo. 0ant me to )ay? I &.e)) %e,) okay +.t (t,) .* to yo./ not me-5 4I really need to &et )ome GIRL- 'r(end)-5 I )a(d/ look(n& .* at %(m 0(t% a &lance- 4It () really %ard to r.n (dea) a+o.t +oy) t%ro.&% yo. +eca.)e yo. kno0< yo. don,t e3en .nder)tand- e,) )0eet/ k(nd/ +.t %e,) dat(n& La.ra-5 4I kno0- I may +e a d.de +.t I,m not )t.*(d-5 4Are yo. ).re>5 I )a(d 0(t% a )m(le to )%o0 I 0a) k(dd(n&- We +ot% )tarted la.&%(n& and 0alk(n& o.t o' t%e )c%ool to t%e )(de0alk- We %a3e al0ay) 0alked %ome to&et%er (n)tead o' tak(n& t%e +.) +eca.)e t%e +.) () 2.)t )o tort.ro.)- @(d) )cream(n& l(ke t%ey are (n a %a.nted %o.)e/ all o' t%e &.y) )*end t%e 0%ole t(me )ay(n& d.de/ a0e)ome/ and e3en +ro- I kno0 t%at (t () %o0 t%ey talk/ +.t (t &et) annoy(n& a'ter t%ree year) o' l()ten(n& to (t e3ery<)(n&le<dayWe talked a+o.t t%e te)t (n tr(&onometry .nt(l 0e t.rned le't onto Green3(lle Street-

I looked +ack at %(m 0onder(n& 0%at t%at e3en meant- B.t< (t,) t(me 'or me to &o to t%e ca'eter(a and '(nally tell #(c%ael %o0 I really 'eelI a**roac%ed t%e do.+le 0ooden door) t%at lead (nto t%e ca'eter(a- I 0alked (n and )a0 #(c%ael- B.t %e 0a)n,t alone- e 0a) 0(t% La.ra- T%ey 0ere )(tt(n& on t%e ta+le) +enc%e) k())(n&- I 'led o.t o' t%e ca'eter(a door)/ my eye) +.rn(n& and 0ell(n& .* 0(t% tear)- I co.ldn,t +el(e3e 0%at I )a0- Alt%o.&% I kne0 t%ey d(d l(ke eac% ot%er/ I 0o.ldn,t t%(nk t%at t%ey 0o.ld e3er &et +ack to&et%er- I co.ld 'eel )omet%(n& 0ell(n& .* (n)(de o' meI co.ldn,t '(&.re o.t 0%at (t 0a)/ .nt(l I remem+ered t%e *(ct.re t%at I )a0T%en/ I kne0 0%at (t 0a)< An&erT%e ne1t day/ I )tarted 0alk(n& to )c%ool and 0a(ted +y 9o)e*% to come o.t o' %() %o.)e/ l(ke I al0ay) do- Beca.)e )c%ool )tart) at A:BC/ (t 0a) )t(ll dark o.t)(de- I )tarted to &et 0orr(ed- It 0a) )(lent- 9.)t l(ke t%e *art) o' a %orror mo3(e 0%ere t%e c%a(n)a0 k(ller come) .* +e%(nd t%e *er)on and )ta+) t%em (n t%e +ack- #y *%one ran& and I 2.m*ed- #ay+e I )%o.ld c%an&e my r(n&tone 'rom +e(n& t%e t%eme )on& 'or t%e mo3(e allo0een- E)*ec(ally )(nce (t () clo)e to allo0eenI *(cked .* t%e *%one and )a(d/ 49o)e*%/ yo. )cared t%e %eck o.t o' me??5 4So-rry/5 %e )a(d 0(t% a &(rly accent- 4 ey/ I,m not &o(n& to +e a+le to make (t to )c%ool today/ I,3e &ot t%e 'l.-5 4Okay/5 I )a(d- 4Well<I %o*e yo. 'eel +etter-5 I ke*t on 0alk(n& to )c%ool .nt(l I &ot to t%e t.rn do0n Ea)t arr()+.r& Street- It 0a) )t(ll *(tc% +lack o.t)(de/ *l.) (t () )t(ll only A:DC o.t)(de- I looked +ot% le't and r(&%t +e'ore cro))(n& t%e )treet +eca.)e t%() () a *retty +.)y )treet 'or A++e3(lleS.ddenly/ all I %eard 0a) a lo.d )creec%/ a) a car )lammed on (t) +rake)T%e car '(nally t.rned on t%e(r %eadl(&%t) a) )oon a) t%ey )a0 me- All o' a ).dden/ I co.ld only )ee 0%(te/ and I 'elt t%e %ard metal on t%e 'ront o' t%e car %(t t%e )(de o' my +ody/ %ardI 0oke .* a day later/ lay(n& (n a %o)*(tal +ed- I %ad needle) attac%ed to my arm and my 'oot and arm ele3ated- T%e n.r)e came (n and a)ked me/ 4So El(za+et% Fort(n/ do yo. remem+er 0%at %a**ened ye)terday morn(n&>5 4No/ 0%y> W%y am I (n %ere> W%at %a**ened to me>5 I m.)t %a3e +een )cream(n& at t%e n.r)e +eca.)e )%e )at .* a l(ttle )tra(&%ter and %er eye) &ot 0(de- 4Well %oney/5 )%e )a(d- 4=o. 0ere (n a )e3ere car acc(dent (n3ol3(n& a dr.nk dr(3er- =o. 0ere %(t on t%e r(&%t )(de o' yo.r +odyT%e *ol(ce 0ere a+le to track do0n t%e dr(3er o' t%e car/ )o %e () %a3(n& c%ar&e) *.t on %(m- =o. %a3e ).''ered )ome m(nor memory lo))- =o. 0(ll need to )tay +ed-re)t 0%(le yo. reco3er +eca.)e o' )ome o' yo.r +roken +one)- =o. 0(ll +e a+le to %a3e )ome 'r(end) and 'am(ly (n %ere to rem(nd yo. o' )ome o' t%e memor(e) t%at yo. %a3e 'or&otten- I 0(ll lea3e yo. %ere )o yo. %a3e t(me to *roce)) all o' t%() (n'ormat(on-5 S%e 0alked o.t o' t%e room 0%en I %eard )omeone call(n& my name- It )o.nded l(ke )omeone t%at I,3e %eard (n )ome dream)/ +.t 0%en %e came (n/ I %ad no (dea 0%o (t 0a)4 ey El(za+et%/ %o0 are yo. 'eel(n&>5 %e )a(d4Good- One 8.(ck 8.e)t(on t%o.&%-5 4W%at () (t>5 %e a)ked4W%o are yo.>5 e )tared at me l(ke I 0a) (n)ane/ )o I a)ked a&a(n- 4W%o are yo.>5 4I,m 9o)e*%- 9o)e*% #(ller> Don,t yo. remem+er me> We,3e +een +e)t 'r(end) e3er )(nce l(ke/ )econd &rade> =o. really don,t remem+er me do yo.>5 e &ot .* o'' o' t%e +ed and )tarted to r.n o.t o' t%e room- Be'ore %e le't I &ra++ed a %old o' %() r(&%t arm and a)ked/ 4W%ere are yo. &o(n&>5

4To &et )omet%(n& t%at m(&%t rem(nd yo. o' e3eryt%(n& t%at %a) %a**ened +et0een .)/5 %e )a(d a) %e ran o.t t%e door- Ne1t 0ere my *arent) 0%o came (n- 4 ey %oney<%o0 are yo.>5 t%ey a)ked-5 4I,m do(n& '(ne/5 I )a(d4So< 0%at d(d 9o)e*% )ay to yo.>5 4W%o>5 4=o.r +e)t 'r(end> =o.,3e kno0n %(m )(nce )econd &rade-5 4=ea%/ %e 0ent to &o &et *roo' t%at I kno0 %(m +.t %e doe)n,t r(n& a +ell-5 4Well< 0e,ll let yo. re)t/ &et 0ell )oon %oney-5 9o)e*% came +ack (nto t%e room 0(t% a )cra* +ook (n %() %and- e )at do0n on t%e +ed a&a(n and o*ened (t .* to t%e '(r)t *a&e- T%ere 0a) a *(ct.re o' me and anot%er &.y t%at I d(dn,t reco&n(ze- 4T%at,) me and yo. (n )econd &rade/5 %e )a(d *o(nt(n& at t%e *(ct.re- 4Don,t yo. remem+er t%()>5 I )%ook my %ead a*olo&et(cally and looked .* at %(m- () eye) looked 8.e)t(ona+ly +l.e- () )%ort +londe %a(r 0a) %an&(n& do0n o3er %() 'ace- e 0a) 'la0le))- e *.t %() %and on t%e )cra*+ook and )tarted talk(n& a+o.t all o' t%e t%(n&) t%at %e and I d(d to&et%er- I t.rned .* and )at on t%e +ed ne1t to %(m and I )tared (nto %() )ea +l.e eye)- e *.t %() %and +e%(nd my %ead and I )at .* )tra(&%ter- We +ot% leaned (nto eac% ot%er and o.r l(*) to.c%ed- We d(d (t a&a(n and )omet%(n& came +ack to meAll o' t%e memor(e) a+o.t 9o)e*% and I came +ack (nto 'oc.)- I remem+er t%at *(ct.re- It 0a) t%e n(&%t o' t%e $alent(ne) *arty at 9o)e*%,) %o.)e acro)) t%e )treet- We )%ared a *(nk %eart-)%a*ed c.*cake 0%(le )(tt(n& on t%e +r(ck )ta(rca)e com(n& o.t 'rom %() +ack *orc%- We co.ld )mell t%e &olden *(ne needle) .nderneat% o.r 'eet on t%e &ra))- T%e *(ne tree) looked %.&e o3er .) a) t%e cool Fe+r.ary +reeze +le0 t%ro.&% o.r %a(r- No0 I co.ld remem+er e3ery )(n&le deta(l a+o.t 9o)e*% and meWe leaned +ack 'rom eac% ot%er and 0e +ot% )m(led- 4I remem+er e3eryt%(n& no0- =o.<me< We,3e +een +e)t 'r(end) 'ore3er- o0 co.ld I %a3e not remem+ered>5 I )a(d- I )tarted to cry- 4I can,t +el(e3e I 'or&ot my +e)t 'r(end 0%o I,3e kno0n 'or l(ke/ ten year)- I,m )o )orry 9o)e*%-5 4It,) okay/5 %e )a(d- 4A) lon& a) yo.,re okay-5 I looked .* at %(m and %e )m(led- I )m(led +ack- All t%() t(me/ I kne0 9o)e*% m(&%t +e t%e one/ and t.rn) o.t %e ()- I ne)tled .* a&a(n)t %(m and *.t my %ead on %() )%o.lder- e *.t %() arm aro.nd me and 0e )at t%ere 'or 0%at (t )eem) l(ke to +e 'ore3er- I %a3e 'or&otten a+o.t La.ra/ and #(c%ael/ and anyone el)e 0%o %ad come +et0een .)- T%e one t%(n& t%at really mattered/ 0a) t%at (t 0a) 9o)e*% and I/ 0%o 0ere to&et%er- T%ere co.ldn,t %a3e +een a +etter end(n&EART B: REFLE!TION Goal One Re'lect(on: I t%(nk I d(d 0ell on add(n& deta(l/ 'eel(n&)/ and (n)(&%t) (nto my )%ort )tory +eca.)e I +el(e3e t%at (t () a 3ery deta(led *eace- I added a lot o' d(''erent e3ent) and tr(ed to add a lot o' deta(l )o t%e reader can act.ally 'eel and kno0 %o0 t%e c%aracter 'eel)-

Goal T0o Re'lect(on: I t%(nk t%at I .)ed (ma&ery and mood 0ell (n my )tory +eca.)e (t c%an&e) mood t%ro.&%o.t a lot o' my )tory/ +.t I co.ld add a l(ttle more deta(l 'or (t to %a3e more ).)*en)e and %eart+reak +eca.)e t%at () 0%at t%e e))ence o' t%e )tory really ()-

Goal T%ree Re'lect(on: I t%(nk t%at I need to 0ork on my amo.nt o' determ(nat(on t%ro.&%o.t my 0%ole *(ece +eca.)e at )ome *o(nt) my 0r(t(n& lacked (n t%e amo.nt o' deta(l/ 'eel(n&/ and mood )o I 'eel t%at I need to 0ork on (t-

#y Wr(t(n& Eroce)) figure out

First I had to figure out what genre the story should be

Next I had to what it would be about so I thought of something dramatic. Next I did some research to find good names, a good school, a good part of the country, and the route from the school to her house to make it as real as possible.

Next I used a plot structure to map out the whole Story.