Name: Date: Block: A6

Abby Snipes

TOOLS FOR ENGLISH S HOLARS: S!""ATI#E ASSESS"ENT $ART %: ANAL&SIS OF A $ROFESSIONAL 'RITING SA"$LE ONeal, Shaquille. "A Good Reason to Look up." Chicken soup for the Kids Soul. Ed. Canfield, Jack, et al. ee!field "each, #L$ %ealth Co&&unications, 'nc., ())*. +!int. ,he -!itin. sa&ple, /A .ood Reason to Look 0p1 23 Shaquille ONeal, is a nonfiction na!!ati4e tellin. the e4ent of a hi.h school student, -ho !eali5es the 2eha4io! to look up to. ,he pu!pose of this te6t is to sho- that it is i&po!tant to 2e a leade! and a !ole &odel fo! othe! kids, 2ecause it !epeatedl3 states that it is i&po!tant to !espect othe!s and lead othe!s to that sa&e !espect fo! othe!s, /73 +a!ents -anted &e to 2e a leade! -ho -as a .ood e6a&ple to othe!s 8 to 2e a decent hu&an 2ein..1. ,his nonfiction na!!ati4e -as &eant fo! kids to ha4e an e6a&ple fo! ho- to act. ,his is sho-n 2ecause the -o!d choices tend to 2e si&ple! fo! lots of a.e .!oups to unde!stand. 'n E6a&ple, it uses the -o!d /"ein. one of the class clo-ns1, in &3 &ind ' -ouldnt call the& that 2ut it &a3 &ake 2ette! sense to kids. T(e main i)ea t(at t(is piece *e+eals is t(at it is impo*tant to li+e to yo,* best e-tent s(o. ot(e*s t(e *i/(t .ay to t*eat ot(e*s0 1Be a lea)e*0 not a 2ollo.e*34 T(is na**ati+e ,ses many a)mi*able lite*a*y )e+ices3 "y pe*sonal 2a+o*ite is t(e i*ony3 It )isplays sit,ational i*ony in a +e*y cle+e* .ay3 T(e Na**ato* is looke) ,p to beca,se (e is +e*y tall0 b,t (is 2at(e* talks to (im to make s,*e people can look ,p to (im as a *ole mo)el0 1Since people al*ea)y (a+e to look ,p at yo,0 /i+e t(em a 5/oo)6 *eason to )o so343 Also it contains .ell place) all,sions 78,otes90 t(is incl,)es a biblical all,sion3 T(is is .ell place) beca,se t(e mo*al o2 t(e sto*y /oes alon/ .it( t(e +e*se c(osen3 It also states t(e .ell:kno.n Gol)en R,le3 T(e A,t(o* places simple .o*)s at t(e *i/(t time to s(o. its meanin/3 Last (e ,ses a 2las( back to state .(at (e .as be2o*e (e con2*onts (is 2at(e*; t(is is also a /*eat sentence st*,ct,*e3 He ,ses .o*)s t(at a*e easily ,n)e*stoo) by ki)s at a yo,n/e* a/e0 t(is is most likely so all a/e /*o,ps lea*n t(e +al,able mo*al3 T(e synta- is st*,ct,*e) in a ce*tain manne* to /et t(e point ac*oss3 It sta*ts o,t .it( a 8,ote 2*om t(e bible int*o),cin/ yo, to t(e t(eme3 T(en it sta*ts tellin/ t(e e+ent like a sto*y 2*om be/innin/ mi))le to en)3 T(e be/innin/ int*o),ces t(e iss,e0 in t(e mi))le it e-plains .ays to 2i- it0 t(en at t(e en) it s(o.s t(e sol,tion3 T(e "oo) o2 t(e sto*y is o+e*all kno.le)/eable3 T(is is beca,se t(e na**ato* becomes kno.le)/eable o2 t(e *i/(t .ay to act3 Ima/e*y .as ,se) .(en an e+ent took place 72las(back9 02*om t(e past .(en t(e na**ato* p,lle) p*anks0 t(e e+ent .as easily +is,ali<e) o2 .(en (e st,ck t(e icy pack p,t )o.n a ki)s s(o*ts3 It is possible to 2eel t(e /,ilt t(e na**ato* .o*e3 T(e na**ato*6s point o2 +ie. is 2i*st pe*son3 He (as (a) t(ese e-pe*iences an) is s(a*in/ abo,t t(em 2*om (is o.n pe*specti+e3 T(e +oice is t(e 2o*mal mo)e*n .*itin/ style3 T(e tone is /,ilt 2*om t(e past an) t(e s,ccess o2 t(e 2,t,*e3 It is easy to tell t(at t(e na**ato* 2eels ba) abo,t .(o (e ,se) to be3 $ART =: 'RITING GOALS ' -ill sta!t off -ith a quote 2ecause it is an effecti4e -a3 to .et !eade!s attention. ' -ill use allusion in o!de! to 2ette! de4elop unde!standin. fo! the !eade!.

 ' -ill use a flash2ack in o!de! to e&phasi5e the 2i. chan.e this pe!son has .one th!ou.h and ho- the3 -e!e a 2ette! pe!son afte!-a!ds.

$ART >: ORIGINAL

O"$OSITION

/9ou a!e the salt of the ea!th. "ut if the salt loses its saltiness, ho- can 2e &ade salt3 a.ain: 't is no lon.e! .ood fo! an3thin. 2ut to 2e th!o-n out.1 7atthe- ;$(< E4e!32od3 possesses thei! o-n unique talent, 2ut so&eti&es thin.s .et in the -a3 of lettin. ou! talent sho-. 'f people dont let thei! talents shothe3 -ould 2e no diffe!ent f!o& the pe!son standin. !i.ht ne6t to the&. 73 talent is sin.in., 2ut -as te!!ified to sha!e &3 .ift on sta.e. ' lo4e sin.in., 2ut ' used to 2e so sca!ed of .ettin. on sta.e. ' !e&e&2e!, once ' -as on sta.e fo! the fi!st ti&e, ' had to lea4e -hile pe!fo!&in.. Afte!-a!ds ' .ot sick and -ent ho&e. ,his -as the &ost &o!tif3in. &o&ent ' had e4e! had ' ne4e! -anted to 2e on sta.e e4e! a.ain. 73 &o& noticed ho- e&2a!!assed and sad ' -as, and conf!onted &e a2out it. She said ' did .!eat, and e4e!3one .ets ne!4ous. 'ts ha!d &ust .et used to 2ein. in f!ont of a c!o-d, not &an3 people can do that. /' kno- 3ou can.1, she said, ' can do an3thin. ' can set &3 &ind to. She said, /9ou cant let one incident p!e4ent 3ou f!o& sha!in. 3ou! -onde!ful talent.1 ' kne- that 7o& -as !i.ht and took he! -o!d to hea!t. ' a& so .lad that ' didnt .i4e up and ' ha4e let &3 talent sho-. ' ha4e done this 23 p!acticin. 2ein. speakin. and sin.in. in f!ont of c!o-ds. ' =oined cho!us so ' -ouldnt 2e alone and lo4ed it. ,hen ' =oined a chu!ch 2and -ith fe-e! people. ,hen finall3 ' auditioned at a "!oad-a3 su&&e! ca&p and landed &3 fi!st solo. ' kne- then that 23 lettin. &3 talent sho- ' ha4e planted =o3 in &3 hea!t. ' a& so p!oud ho- fa! ' ha4e co&e 23 not .i4in. up and lettin. &3 talents sho-. 9ou can do it too, let 3ou! o-n special talent shine and it -ill .et 3ou .!eat !e-a!ds.

$ART ?: REFLE TION Goal One Re2lection:

In t(e /oal0 I .ill sta*t o22 .it( a 8,ote beca,se it is an e22ecti+e .ay to /et *ea)e*s attention0 I accomplis(e) it3 I c(ose to p,t a meanin/2,l 8,ote t(at s(o.s t(e basic i)ea o2 my sto*y3 I c(ose a +e*se 2*om t(e bible3 Goal T.o Re2lection: T(e /oal0 I .ill ,se all,sion in o*)e* to bette* )e+elop ,n)e*stan)in/ 2o* t(e *ea)e*0 is accomplis(e)3 I ,se) a biblical all,sion t(at p,t a pe*specti+e on t(e iss,e3

Goal T(*ee Re2lection: In t(e /oal0 ,se) a 2las(back in o*)e* to emp(asi<e t(e bi/ c(an/e t(is pe*son (as /one t(*o,/( an) (o. t(ey .e*e a bette* pe*son a2te*.a*)s0 is accomplis(e)3 I ,se) a 2las(back as t(e be/innin/ o2 my sto*y sayin/ (o. I ,se) to be sca*e) on sta/e3

"y '*itin/ $*ocess: %9 "ake a list o2 e-pe*iences I (a+e (a)3 =9 Eliminate to t(e best t(*ee t(at yo, can be most )esc*ipti+e on3 >9 Fin) a biblical *e2e*ence@ 8,ote t(at e-plains my topic3 ?9 Sta*t t(e .*itin/ o22 .it( t(e 8,otation0 an) t(en e-plain t(e main i)ea o2 t(e sto*y3 A9 State 2las(back as pa*a/*ap(3 69 E-plaine) (o. t(e c(an/e (appene)3 B9 E-plain t(e 2inal *es,lt3 C9 State t(e lesson3 D9 $,t i)eas into pa*a/*ap( 2o*m3