not use any evidence of where she got that statistic from or how reliable the source wants to become more believable she needs to become more credible. She needs to state where she found this evidence and why they are a credible source. Right now this statement. just makes her look like she has not done any research about her topic. Since ‘Nemko has used better evidence than Le by his credible sources, his article is superior. on? - Second, Nemko's evidence is superior to Le’s because of ethos. Nemko states “Colleges “The 1S & Vhestorical strates are businesses, and students are a cost item while research is a profit Siler” (6), Nemko is trying no personal pronouns to convince students that colleges are just trying to take foutmonty and don’t cde if you ~o > succeed or not. That is creating alot of ethos since most students think if they go college they 3. 0°22, will make money, have a bette life, and become socially accepted. When ther is someone going Oh) Uow mean PerTHOS e os ‘against that it ereates emotion and that is good for writer. As ‘a'writer he/she should want people ss se to feel emotion. Ifa writers not making anyone mad, happy, exeited, or feeling some emotion in — 4 6 So anyway than what is the point in writing. Nemko does a great job to get his point cross Leon BS 7 the other band, se can use some help with er writing, She states “bolding a degree isn a8 powerful a it was in previous decades” (). Thats true, but she is downing her whole writing on ple by saying that. She is ages Twesid so hard to get this degree and now it is going to change ny whole life, butt is not as valuable as it used to be. Ishe i trying to make someone Fee! Sn person “ 125, She dest want Someone saying well I good for her than you tell them only the good would be happy for you if you would have accomplished this two decades before she did. Le docs a poor job at setting up a high-quality ethos. Since Nemko has used better evidence through ethos, his article is superior. ‘Third, Nemko's evidence is superior to Le’s because of his experiences. Nemko attended college but was not successful. He (ai abo}t his experience with college and other people whobecame greatly successful without a college degree. Nemko states “the three most successful ‘entrepreneurs in the computer industry, Bill Gates, Michael Dell, and Apple cofounder Steve Wozniak, all do not have a college degree” (15). Nemko is trying to convince college students, that going to college is not the best option by listing not only his experience but experiences of incredibly successful people. This makes Nemko seem more believable. W! listing millionaires that never attend college it makes you think if it is really worth it. Le on the other hand, she jus aks abouther experience. Le states “Realistically, having a college degree will likely mean a comfortable living and the opportunity to move up at work and in life” (4). Leis trying to convince students that a college degree means a better future, but this is only one x person's experience’If she would have discussed many different peoples experience with college se and how it was successful then she would seem more convincing, This is just one person's ¢¢ opinion, if she would have done something like Nemko and listed many suecessful people that attended college she would become more believable. Since Nemko has used better evidence though his experiences, his article is superior. Nemko’s article isnot the best it could be, but compared to Le’s article it seems flawless: He uses creditable sources, ethos, and his own experiences better than Le can dream to do. Le’s article has some potential if she would put a little more effort and research into it. It seems that she completed it in a short amount of time. Nemko states some things that are extremely against the norm and completely different than most people think but backs it up with great facts and research to prove that he is correct. If Le would use some of those kinds of facts and research she would become more believable, Nemko’s article is superior to Le’s article in every way.