Zach Monk

Mr. Chiaravalli
English 12
Oct. 10th 2014
The Colors of the Earth
At first there was nothing, nothing at all,
then came in the red.,
Rred was scared and felt really small,
then came in green and blue who didnt have any dread.,
Tthey sawy red sitting in the corner,
so they decided to join with him.
When this happens the colors mixed and formed every color imaginable,
after that they suddenly silently sought, and looked at each other,
what shall we use these colors for?,
for they did not know.,
Wwell water can be bluesaid blue,
and the land can be greensaid green,
but what could be red red sadly thought,
I know! said green,
It could be the blood of the animals,,
okaysaid red.

but most importantly they created humans.,

Tthey gave the humans a capable mind capable of learning and to imagininge things,
but the humans were good for a while, and then they started to spoil.,
Tthe humans started not liking the world that the three created,
the humans started wrecking and destroying everything,
and then the bBig three started to see the humans commit sin.,
Aall the colors took away what they created in order to destroy the world,
and that was the end.

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2 I appreciate your use of the various creation archetypes and characteristics of oral
literature. I really like how the 3 colors are the supreme beings here! However,

based on your comments, I can't tell if you used all characteristics of oral literature
deliberately. Also, there were several run-on sentences and minor errors that led
to some confusion. Please see my other comments/suggestions on your paper.