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But director Baz [Luhrmann takes on the story of Romeo and Julie in an intiguing way. Romeo and Juliet ell the story of two loves in feuding families and thei age foe. Specifically, in act two scene three Romeo and Friar Lawrence meet up, and Romeo decides he wants t.take Julie's hand in ‘mariage He requests to have Friar Lawrence mary the two of them, This scene directed by Baz Larmann differs greatly from director Franco Zeffirelli and his 1968 interpretation. Moreover, by directly using moder film effects andthe moment of the Firs epiphany, Lahmann has an Astonishing ability to create far more entertaining soene and reveal the greater storyline, respectively oben, Luhmano cepts the alone mote thn efi’ version by wing modem neff, such sin musi nd sting. Maden 1995, contemporain muse Ea te veers because gi Saiiy of he els guits,snare dram ine, and tobing bs tones. 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