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my initial
WP
submissio
n:
(a phrase,
sentence,
paragraph,
idea, move,
punctuation
, piece of
evidence,
etc.)
An observation or
question I
received from De
Piero or a
classmate:
The
change(s) I
made to
what I
initially
wrote: (ie,
the
change[s] I
made to
column 1)
How this
change impacts
my paper:
althoughthe
Whether it is
Sarahs chocolate
chip cookie,
Jessicas better
than crack, or
Tiffanys rocky
road smores,
recipes are not
typically geared
toward a narrow
audience,
especially since
there are so many
different
variations of
what they could
entriesfallinto
thegenre,share
similar
conventions,and
rhetorical
features,each
onehasaunique
elementthat
distinguishesit
fromallother
brownierecipes.
be.
But the
conventions of
dessert recipes
dont simply
stop there. Most
recipes also
include photos
depicting the
ingredients,
preparation and
end product.
1, Find a way to
bump this up into the
topic sentencethe
topic sentence
provides the idea
anchor for what the
paragraph is about.
2, Its tough to give
textual evidence
for photos, but you
can sneak around
this by describing
them.
3, Is it that plain and
simple? They all
have pictures, and
the pictures are all
the same? In what
way(s)?
Along with
claims that
sounded alike,
the authors also
cracked jokes
about how their
brownies will
change your
waistline or
some sort of
other humorous
statement about
gaining weight
from eating too
many sweets
Along with
claims that
sounded alike,
the authors also
lightheartedly
warned their
readers about
how their
brownies will
change your
waistline or
some sort of
other humorous
statement about
gaining weight
from eating too
many sweets.
Recipes are
usually not
written in a
formal format of
follow a strict
syntax. They are
typically written
using casual
language that
doesnt include
and exclusive
jargon
They are
typically
composed using
casual language
that doesnt
include and
exclusive jargon,
which as
described in
Murder!
Rhetorically
Speaking as the
terminology used
by those in a
particular
profession or
group (Boyd,
89). This is
especially
evident in the
smores recipe
whentheauthor
usedperiodsin
unconventional
placesthatwere
notindicativeof
asentence
ending,but
insteadto
emphasizehow
goodsomething
was.
By giving an example of
the feature that I
mentioned and providing
an example, my claims
have stronger proof.