Revision Notes

I made several revisions in my rhetorical analysis oI the websites oI Rise Against and Mac
Miller. The Iirst revisions involved quotation integration. The Iirst time around, I messed up the
MLA Iormat completely. I Iixed errors like the heading but also switched Irom endnotes to
parenthetical citation as well as an MLA style Works Cited page. In the original version, I used
numerous dangling quotes. I went back and integrated every quote into my own thoughts which
helped me tie in my own ideas to that oI my sources.
The improvements to quotation integration were the most crucial revisions. However, I also
went through and tried to oIIer a little more actual analysis to some oI the parts that were
lacking. I also restructured a Iew paragraph to make more organizational sense.
Overall I Ieel the revisions help to improve slightly the original rhetorical analysis.