Even though globalization affects the worlds economics in a very positive way, its negative side should not

be forgotten. Discuss.
Globalization is a process of advancement and increase in interaction between the worlds country and people. It involes in locomotion, comunication, knowledge and skills. Globalazation is gaining speen over the entire world. It has attract enough world attention needed from international organization in promoting and encouraging human right and freedom , opportunities, economic, social and culture rights. However, there are some countries that are missing out the opportunities that are offered and its taken as a big problem to their country. They are the poorer countries that are not connected to the people globally and their people are unskilled due to the lack of knowledge and equipments. They are also unable to trade with the other countries which are richer and larger as they are unable to meet the demand propose to them. They also will not have the opportunities and the challenges that are require. Globalization has also encourage crime like the illegal trade in drug trafficking around the world through the air, sea and land. This has involve human smuggling and stuffing it in anything they can come across. This has affected a lot of problem to the country and the family of the drug addicts. This will also lead to other crimes like robbery and violence in the country. Another negative side of globalization is the dumping of the dangerous waste to the river, sea or the ocean. This will effect the aquactic creature, contaninate the water and cause harm to the people too. To conclude, globalization has done an enormous part in the worlds econnmics but the international organization should also not forget the poorer countries and the countries should also tackle the other negative side that affects the world.

This essay doesnt have a paragraph about the positive side of globalization, and it should so the task is only partially covered. The structure is fine, the paragraphs are logically connected and usage of linking words is sufficient. However, there are many spelling and grammatical errors (see comments underlined in blue). Overall, looks like a Band 6 6.5 essay.