Sophisticated Writing: tips and tricks.

1. Deal with the concept/idea rather than simply stating the facts or current situation.
Our town is already drowning in a sea of black smog; the slightest increase in pollution levels
will surely make the situation completely unbearable for visitors as well as residents.
2. Express your point of view much more strongly.
We simply cannot afford to allow our town to be choked and paralysed by pollution.
3. Use imagery to make your point.
Our town is already smothered in a blanket of heavy smog most mornings; surely we should be
seeking to limit the damage rather than allowing it to continue?
4. Create a deliberately more complex sentence structure and control the flow of ideas
through careful use of punctuation.
I can fully appreciate the benefits improved infrastructure and accessibility will bring to local
businesses; however, this influx of possible customers will also send pollution levels soaring and
have an adverse impact on those of us who actually have to live here.
5. Start with a different word to the one you initially intended.
Our town is already polluted beyond reasonable limits.
6. Begin the sentence with a verb.
Making the town centre accessible to vehicles will simply compound the existing problem of
excessive pollution.
7. Put the subject at the start of the sentence.
Pollution is something we should be seeking to avoid, not welcome into the heart of our already
congested and smoggy town centre.
8. Try to include more than one key idea in a sentence (you may have experimented
with this when writing evaluative statements about texts).
I can fully appreciate the benefits improved infrastructure and accessibility will bring to local
businesses; however, this influx of possible customers will also send pollution levels soaring and
have an adverse impact on those of us who actually have to live here.
9. Write the sentence as a well constructed rhetorical question aim for greater length
and impact.
Surely the people of this town are crying out for more green spaces, social venues and better
public transport not an influx of commuter traffic and a blanket of grey smog?
10.Start the sentence with a discourse marker to anchor your point to the ones that
have preceded it.
Not only would this increase current pollution levels, it would also push our struggling
infrastructure to breaking point.