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Meaghan McAllister
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The 9/11 Memorial Museum: Thesis Statement- The 9/11 Memorial Museum due to the
controversy of the low quality design, force of Christianity, and commercialization of the
museum has created an unsettling feeling with citizens of New York and the families of the
victims of the terrorist attack. good

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Annotated Bibliography
Donofrio, Therese Ann. Ground Zero and Place- Making Authority: The Conservative
Metaphors in 9/11 Families' Take Back the Memorial Rhetoric. Western Journal of
Communication, vol. 74, no. 2, Mar. 2010, pp. 150169. Almost correct! Titles of

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journals, books & films are always italicized in MLA

Donofrios focus in this article is highlighting the elements of the TMB (name this group
in full with abbreviation in parentheses after) group, which includes the families of the
victims of 911, and explores how the families protest how the world trade center is no
place for politics (Donofrio, 151).no need for in text citations in an annotation. At first,
TBM had an issue with having the IFC(name this group in full with abbreviation in
parentheses after) associated with the creation of the memorial museum. She explains the
controversy over how the memorial of 911 should be built. The IFC wanted to input a
focus on history of freedom in the 911 Memorial Museum while the families of the
victims completely disagreed with that. Donofrio discusses the metaphors behind the
World Trade Center and what a place and a space really is. Donofrio explores the
meanings in a place and connects it to the feelings of the families of the victims. A place
where something as tragic as the 911 terrorist attack has created feelings associated with
possession and a connection to that place. The families of the victims have placed
authority over the space where their loved ones have passed, therefore they feel like they
should be in charge of how the memorial museum is set up. Donofrio also goes into depth
about the commercialization of 911. She brings up the fact that many businesses around
the time of the tragedy were using advertising to make money off it. Donofrio explains
how TBM also is controversial about tourism and the different aspects of it. Even though
they want people to visit the memorial, they are uncomfortable with the fact that people
make money off it. Donofrio also explains how the TBM group claims that there is theft

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behind the world trade centerwhat kind of theft?. It is a constant battle between who
owns this place and who gets to decide what to do with it. In conclusion, Donofrio
explains the metaphors behind memorials like the 911 Memorial Museumwhat are
these metaphors?. TBM, according to Donofrio, rely on these metaphors when it comes
to taking an authority over the place. The World Trade Center to them is a sacred place
where what happened there changed their lives forever. This article has helped me
explore the feelings of the families of the victims and how they have created a metaphor
behind the World Trade. Since I am focusing on the commercialization of the 911
Memorial Museum it also provides me with an outlook on it and the controversy over
tourism. Very good.

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Kennicott, Phillip. The 9/11 Memorial Museum Doesn't Just Display Artifacts, It Ritualizes
Grief on a Loop. Washington Post, The Washington Post, 7 June 2014,
www.washingtonpost.com/entertainment/museums/the-911-memorial-museum-doesnt-

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just-display-artifacts-it-ritualizes-grief-on-a-loop/2014/06/05/66bd88e8-ea8b-11e3-9f5c9075d5508f0a_story.html.
In the Washington Post article, Kennicott views the 9/11 Memorial Museum in a light
different from other scholars?. He focuses on the architectural aspects of the museum and
how according to him, they (the architectural aspects or the museum?) are playing grief
on a loop. Kennicott protests how the memorial museum is much like other museums?. It?
has created a new type of museum or memorial. These new museums, which he calls a
new religion, by tying education and extreme emotions and feed into our media obsessed
countryrevisit this sentence for clarity. Kennicott focuses on how the museum does not
focus on the right things. Instead, the museum? is pushing the ideas of Christianity
throughout the entire museum especially how it includes the Stations of the Cross and a
quote from Virgil. Kennicott also highlights how the museum focuses on repetition by
replaying the trauma to the visitors over and over again. More repetition is present by
creatingodd constructionexplain what you mean here.. imitations of the personal
memorials people had left around city. Kennicott also focuses on how the museum is
misinforming people on the Muslim religion. Kennicott protests how they ? are not
creating a greater divide (do you mean a big enough divide?) between the terrorists and
the Muslims who have absolutely no connection to the people who commit these crimes.
The museum does not actually say that all Muslims are terrorists but according to
Kennicott he believes that the museum allows that to happen by not completely
defending Muslims. He says in todays society that idea is built into Americanism and
Christianity. He also brings up how there is controversy over the gift shop to this
memorial museum and an admission fee. He says how the mistakes are not within the
politics but rather than how the museum was actually created. Kennicott criticizes how

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the museum does not bring up the effect of 9/11 on America as a whole. In conclusion,
Kennicott has a negative view of the 9/11 Memorial Museum. He comments on how the
museum forces Christianity throughout the entire place and how museums like this one
have created a new religion of museums--repetition. This new religion, to Kennicott,
focuses on rituals and repetitionmove this to your earlier discussion of religion. . This
source will help me with my research because Kennicott brings a different opinion about
the architecture of the museum which is not often brought up. His perspective shines a
light on the commercialization and the propaganda behind memorial museums. He allows
a deeper insight on how museums can force a certain belief onto the visitors by repetition.

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You have done well to pull out Kennicotts main ideas and concepts. This seems like a
fascinating article.
Kimmelman, Michael. Finding Space for the Living at a Memorial. The New York Times, The

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New York Times, 28 May 2014, www.nytimes.com/2014/05/29/arts/design/findingspace-for-the-living-at-a-memorial.html#.

In Kimmelmans news article, he criticizes the 9/11 Memorial because it does not look
like it belongs in New York City. He describes the memorial as a place, which is intended
for the visitation of New Yorkers, that some New Yorkers dont even go to and even
avoid it. Kimmelman proclaims that the architecture of the outdoor memorial is not suited
for its purpose. What Kimmelman means by that is something that is supposed to
represent the recovery of New York City and its strength does the opposite. It was
supposed to include the ideas and opinions of the families and nearby neighborhood
residents but Kimmelman believes it didnt. In his opinion, the setting seems like it is
completely for tourists. He comments how people will look at one of the fountains and
hardly look at the other. Kimmelman explains how these people are probably just in awe
of these fountains rather than thinking about the true meaning behind them. There is no
personal or human feel to the memorial according to Kimmelman which turns him off
from it and makes the memorial seem very unwelcoming. He argues that this memorial
does not do much in the representation of New Yorks positive characteristics. He
describes the seating as somber and uncomfortable, like the rest of the memorial. The
grass that is put there to effectively make it more comfortable does the opposite because
it is so sparse. He says how that cannot be a less happy arrangement. He protests that the
quality of this memorial is not how it should be. To him, it needs a more welcoming,
New York feel because that is what New York is all about. In conclusion, Kimmelmans
opinions about the 9/11 outdoor memorial are negative. Kimmelman complains that this
memorial does not do justice as it should. This source helps my research because once
again it has shined tenses? another negative light on how this memorial was built and the
mistakes that were made. The misrepresentation of New York has led to a low quality
memorial museum which is not what the victims of the families deserve. Kimmelmans
article has broaden the depth of my research by revealing the mistakes that were made in
the design of the memorial. The tourism aspect has also drawn into the commercialization
of this museum. Being made for the appeal of tourists has concludedodd construction

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that many people were behind the creation of this memorial museum in order to make a
profit off of it rather than honor the almost 3000 victimsrevisit this sentence for clarity
of meaning. Is Kimmelman a New Yorker? Because this is classed as a secondary source,
be prepared to defend Kimmelmans opinions in an academic paper. Good summary.

Burlingame, Debra. The Great Ground Zero Heist. WSJ, Wsj.com, 7 June 2005,

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www.wsj.com/articles/sb111810145819652326.
Burlingames article, although 11 years old, shows the original intentions of the creators
of the 9/11 Memorial Museum. Before being removed, the International Freedom Center
(IFC), was involved in the makings behind the museum. Burlingame protests how
completely wrong their involvement in the museum would betenses?. The title of her
article, The Great Ground Zero Heist, sets the main idea of the article by explaining how
Ground Zero is being taken. In her view, the IFC is stealing the memorial museum for
their own benefit rather than to allow the public to pay their respects to the people who
had passed. Burlingame makes the comparison between the views of what freedom is to
Marines and to the IFCexplainwhat do Marines have to do with the museum?. The
IFC would have put a history lesson about all the mistakes that the nation and world have
made when it comes to freedom. Burlingame realizes that the knowledge of those events
is necessary but that the 9/11 Memorial Museum is not the place for it. Burlingame
explains that when visitors go to the museum that they will expect to see an actual
memorial for the terrorist attack on 9/11 but instead see a history lesson on another
tragedy. Burlingame highlights the person behind all of it, Tom Bernstein. It is people
like Bernstein who would mistakenly use a memorial for a place of another tragedy and
disregard the mourning and grievance of the families and friends of the victims of the
9/11 tragedy. Burlingame says the lessons that are supposed to be behind the tragedy
shouldnt be forced in the same exact place where many people passed. After all, there
are still human remains at this gravesite. She explores how the memorial museum should
be what 9/11 was all about, the stories of the heroes involved in it. Specifically about a
firefighters body who was cut in half because he was helping a woman by carrying
herthis statement needs more context because the logic does not make sense.. In
conclusion, Burlingames article is a protest of the IFC for what they were planning to do
to the memorial museumthis sentence would be most useful at the beginning of your
annotation because it puts Burlingames purpose in perspectivethen your summary
would have more impact.. Thankfully, these plans were never put into place. Her article
helps my research because it brings forth even more mistakes of the creators of the 9/11
Memorial Museum. Although they? fixed this one by removing the involvement of the
IFC, it still helps outline the background of the controversy behind the memorial museum.
The IFC decisions in the designing of the museum would have created a greater uproar
within the families of the victims like it did to Burlingame. Good summaryjust check
for issues of logic at the sentence level.

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Hamill, Denis. Hamill: 9/11 Museum Should Be Free to All. NY Daily News, NY
Daily News, 18 May 2014, www.nydailynews.com/new-york/hamill-9-11-museum-freearticle-1.1796718.
Hamills article consists of a complete protest against the $24 admission to get into the
9/11 Memorial Museum. Hamill believes that the money behind this memorial should be
government funded. Hamill makes claims that it is not because the government does not
have the money, but they are putting money in the wrong places. He, along with the
previous New York mayor Bloomberg, want to protest to the government that this
memorial, along with other existing ones, should not be paid for by the public, especially
at such a high price.

Hamill begins his argument by comparing the current situation? with the purchase? of
Manhattan Island. It costedtense? the same amount as the admission fare. Im lost here.
What does the purchase of Manhattan Island have to do with the admission fee of the
9/11 Memorial?
Hamill highlights other memorials that cost money to visit and some that dont, proving
that our nation does not have a positive standpoint on how to handle the financial
situation behind memorials. Hamill quotes Pete King who is a representative of?. Pete
King also believes that the memorial should be free to visit and claims that D.C. has an
issue with giving New York funding for things?. Hamill repeatedly exclaims that what
the country is doing is wrong by charging money to visit a memorial. He calls it horrors
for dollars. To get this money from the government, he believes we need people from all
political parties to get it ?together. He refers to the scene of 9/11 as a battlefield of
American history and that it isnt something like a tourist attraction, supporting his belief
in that no one should have to pay to visit a memorial. In conclusion, his point behind all
of this is that the 9/11 Memorial Museum is not a place for a tourist attraction but rather a
place that one can freely remember and respect the victims of this attack. This source
helps me with my research because it gives even more reasons why the 9/11 Memorial
Museum is being commercialized. The commercialization that is present is discouraging
behind the whole point of a memorial and is creating a lot of controversy from different
point of views.awkward sentence structure Hamills extreme protest against the
admission fee brings up the feelings of many different people that it should not cost
anything or at least as much as $24 dollars to visit and honor a memorial.
Meaghan,
This is an excellent annotated bibliography.
Your document is very nicely formatted, and your MLA 8 citation style is accurate.

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Your sources are excellent-fascinating and relevant to your thesis.

You have done an excellent job summarizing your scholars key concepts, and you have done an
excellent job explaining how their work is useful for developing your essay. Indeed, I can see this topic
has sparked your interest, as it is clear you have done a lot of reading and a lot of thinking around your
subject.

For revision:
There are some issues with awkward sentence structures, vague pronouns and logic within the
unfolding of your ideas and claims. Iron these issues out and you will have a powerful document
here.
Grade: A-

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