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This is being written in regards to your first revision on your first essay. Your first draft
was already pretty good. I could barely find anything wrong with it, except a few word order
switches and simplifying some of your word choices. Now that you have done both, your essay
looks great. I also loved how you made the thesis clearer and connected it to the closing
paragraph. You have plenty of examples that support your thesis and citation to reinforce them.
As a reader not familiar with the book, I think it was a great idea to add more details and a little
summary of the plot. Otherwise, it was slightly harder to understand.