Writers name: Shuwen Zhou Reviewers name: Yanzhao Li

Peer Review Response Form: World Englishes Argument

1) Look at the thesis statement in the introduction paragraph and rate it:

Yes! They dont Yes, but it could They do this No, they dont
need to make any be improved. just a little bit. really do this.
changes.

Does this thesis include

the title of the article?

Does the thesis include

the authors name (Sung
or Matsuda & Matsuda)?
Does the thesis forecast
the main topics of your
partners argument?

Does the thesis make a

specific, original, and
arguable claim?

2) Look at PIE in the body paragraphs.

POINT
Does each paragraph have just ONE point? no
The first body paragraphs cannot find the point for this body paragraphs.
Are all of these points clear? No
All body paragraphs point is not clear.

ILLUSTRATION
Does every paragraph have at least one illustration (reference to an article or personal
experience)?no
You do not have illustration in second body paragraphs.
Do any paragraphs need more/less illustrations? Be specific where!
second body paragraphs need more illustration.

EXPLANATION
Is every illustration fully explained? Yes

 Is it clear how illustrations support the main points?

Yes.

3) Read & React: Read the paper. On their paper, write your reactions as you read.

For example, make notes when:

you like/dislike the point that they make
you think that the examples are/arent helpful
you think that an idea is/isnt clearly expressed

Were there any places where you felt lost or confused? Make notes of those places and explain WHY
you felt confused.

I like the point that he make

I think that the examples are helpful

i think that an idea is clearly expressed

4) Suggest:
If the writer does only ONE thing to improve this paper, what should s/he do? Be specific! Explain why
this suggestion will be helpful.
Rewrite second body paragraphs because it is not a pie body paragraphs.
When youre finished, turn this into D2L and discuss with your partner!