Part One:

Feedback from Ms. Stein: My response to the feedback:

1. Date or No Extra space 1. I knew I needed a date. Will make
2. An excellent intro sure next time
3. A sweet memory 2. Thanks!
4. Avoid slang 3. Thanks!
5. Crossed out my citation 4. I didnt know that a lot wsa slang
6. Clear wording 5. I didnt know that I didnt need that
7. Great word 6. Sounds better
8. Math 7. Thanks!
9. , 8. I had it like that at first but my mom
10. Spelling told me to capitalize it.
11. Avoid personal pronouns. It is Onils 9. I need to be better with commas
biography. It is ok to bring it up in 10. My mom laughed at me when she saw
your conclusion. that one
12. Run on sentence 11. I tried hard to do without pronouns
13. And but in some places I couldnt word it
14. Apostrophe differently
15. Great Story 12. Sometimes a period is better than a
16. Hmmm familiar comma
17. Ms. Grindall his eyes 13. It doesn't work with and
18. You already told us 14. Simple mistake
19. Lovely 15. Thanks!
20. Indented to0 far 16. Haha
21. Capitalization 17. I have no clue why thats there.
22. Check font Editing error
23. Need header on all pages 18. My bad
24. Dont need Web. 19. Thanks!
20. MLA said 1.5, I guess that its for
something else
21. Editing error
22. Editing error
23. Lesson learned
24. Ok

Part Two:
Write a paragraph that explains your plan for your next essay. What will you focus on? In what
areas do you need help?
 The next essay I will really focus on editing. The last essay I edited it thoroughly

but once I did that I made a lot of changes. What I need to do is make an initial edit and

then after changes I need to do a final run through. 90% of my mistakes were simple

mistakes such as punctuation error, misspelling, or having a different font. Something

such as a font issue can be easily fixed by doing an additional edit. The other major flaw

in my writing is printing. Everytime I try to print at home it never works. I wouldnt let

me print directly from my computer so I would always have to print at school. Printing a

copy before would give me an advantage such as spotting a missing date like on my

biography. I have recently figured out how to set up my printer with my computer.

Hopefully in the future this will help me with recognizing simple mistakes. I believe that

buy fixing my printing issue and taking time to edit a fourth or even fifth time my

writing will greatly improve.