Austin Carney

Professor Pierson

November 17th, 2017

First and foremost, I corrected my APA formatting for intext citations and the worked

cited page. Nearly every citation was incorrect however that was addressed. Continuing, I did

some basic corrections such as grammar, rewording sentences and organizing paragraphs. I had a

couple run-ons which were addressed alongside the grammar issues. I slightly reorganized one

very large paragraph which I broke into two. At the end I did the most cosmetic by revamping

the last half of the last paragraph. I better connected a quote I had and rewrote the following

three sentences to conclude my paper.

Its important for me to properly use APA because I will be using it quite often in my

near future being in the STEM field. This is critical when writing and importantly researching

because it helps you build ethos as a rhetor. So, I corrected my mistakes and learned, resolving

my confusion. I revamped the last paragraph to better portray my thoughts, while concluding the

paper in the process. Getting rid of other grammar mistakes and awkward sentences makes the

paper smoother and easier to read. I followed many of the suggestions from my professor and

came to some other conclusions myself enhancing my final product.

I learned how well my writing has progressed in the past month. Certain portions of my

paper seemed elementary from my current standing in the class. I am uncertain it is due to maybe

I was tired or not in the groove when writing the end of my paper or I dramatically enhanced. I

definitely see an improvement all around regardless, but a few sentences were mind boggling (in

a bad way).