What Factors Unify Groups of People?

The American Revolution was a big event. The common people working together

to rise up against their superiors and ultimately take control. The important word there

was together- they had to work together- which would be extremely challenging; all the

different working classes: farmers, merchants, sailors, etc., all had to overcome their

differences and become allies. The factors that unify groups of people are a common

enemy and one event that becomes a turning point.

People were unified in America during the Revolutionary War rebelling against

their enemy, the British, due to the turning point, the Boston Massacre. Firstly, the British

were putting taxes on everything (e.g. tea, paper, sugar, etc.). People were furious over

this, and there were many boycotts organized against the British and in Boston, where

the headquarters of the new court system was, there were several riots (Unit 1.1).

These taxes were called the Intolerable or Coercive acts, and their anger eventually would

unite them against their common enemy, the British. Secondly, in the Declaration of

Independence, our Founding Fathers (representing the different colonies) outright stated

that they thought that the British were tyrants. They thought that The King of Great

Britain was unstable, as there were so many usurpations and injuries, and this all

contributed to the iron grip he had maintained over the colonies (Unit 1.1). Lastly,

there was a turning point that completely united them against the British: the Boston

Massacre. The Americans were just simply throwing snowballs in protest, but the guards

started to attack with their rifles. The Americans were enraged; this was all the proof they

needed that the British were tyrannical (Unit 1.1). In conclusion, the Americans united
against the British, who had taxed them and ruled them with an iron grip, because of the

turning point: the Boston Massacre.

People were unified in Egypt during the Arab Spring against their enemy, their

president Mubarak, because of the turning point, a Tunisian fruit vendor who set himself

on fire in protest. Firstly, most of the Egyptians thought that Mubarak was an absolute

dictator. People thought everything wrong in their government was his fault, as well as

everything wrong with their economy (Slackman). Secondly, he hasnt allowed anyone to

oppose him. He had been elected four times and none of them were a fair election

(Davidson). Lastly, the entire Arab Spring was cause by one turning point, a protest made

by a fruit vendor. It was an incident where a young man, Mohamed Bouazizi, had set

fire to himself in protest after police confiscated the fruit and vegetables he was selling

from a street stall (Witnesses Report Rioting in Tunisian Town). In conclusion, the

Egyptians protested against their oppressive president Mubarak who didnt let anyone

oppose him, triggered by this daring fruit vendor.

Comments

Bold -Georgia
What about the arab spring? Sydney
The other sentences in the intro are just as specific. Make your intro go from very broad to
specific. -Sydney
Make the points more clear -Sydney
Put the citation in quotes ("Unit 1.1")
-Georgia
Mention this in the T.S for Paragraph 1
-Georgia
Maybe insert a different word -Sydney