Drew Langdon

UWRT 1104

Dr. Mitchell

5 October 2017

Peer Letter Review

Kate,

Your Introduction really hit what your topic was about and I was prepared on what I was

about to read in the following paragraphs which was good. I would recommend trying to make

your transitions from paragraph to paragraph by using transition words or maybe a brief sentence

briefly stating that these two topics relate to each other to better your transition. I would also add

a works cited page to so you have your sources cited to prevent plagiarism. Overall your essay

did have depth and reach different aspects of cyberbullying which is good for a research essay.

All the information that you did have works really well to prove that cyberbullying is a big issue

in todays society which is making an uncivilized world. I would maybe add some statistics

about who is more at risk of cyberbullying or some other statistics related to cyberbullying. I

think your research essay is really good, but once you tweek a few things to hit on all the parts of

a research essay your essay would be really good and I think right now you are at a good place in

your writing and I hope to see the final product.

Good Luck,

Drew Langdon