Danira Ortega

Professor Batty

English 102

11 December 2017

Reflection

The changes I made for this essay was based on the commentary I got from Professor

Batty, and the Writing Center tutor. In the introduction, I erased some sentences that were not

giving any type of new information. Next, I changed the thesis to argue that Im also using the

gender theory, and changed my supporting points to be more specific, in which I added one of

my supporting points to be dialogue and the opera. I also had to explain the opera that is been

talked about in the play, include the main protagonist of the opera, who wrote it and the overall

story of this opera. I also split one of my paragraphs because it was too long. I had to change the

in-text citations for my essay to only have the authors last name and the page number. I also

made sure to eliminate some of the words that were not necessary for the sentences to make

sense, changed the order of the words to make the sentence simpler, or changed the words used

to make the sentences less repetitive. I also changed sections of my conclusion my conclusion,

and some of the sentences to not be so repetitive, and give the reader a new perspective on the

subject the whole essay is discussing, as well as how it can be applied in every day life, and why

it is important for us to accept everyone as how they are.