Jamison Neal

Miss Cook

Composition

August 22 2017

Those Poor Unfortunate Teachers

Writing is unique, writing is passionate. A single sentence can make you think, a

paragraph might make you cry, and a novel can change your life, and everyone writes in their

own font. Some people can lay down a format and follow it through, while others will write the

same piece over and over again until it is perfect. But if you're like me, you write all over the

place. Our thoughts and ideas spewed all over the pages, waiting for some brave reader, usually

a poor unfortunate teacher, to decipher. And us authors are baffled by this. What we write

makes perfect sense to us, but in the mind of others it looks more like baby's first coloring book.

So i'm here to tell you how i write, in hopes of if maybe someday you happen to stumble upon an

author who writes like this(does there need to be something here? The sentence sounds too

long) you can understand and enjoy the craziness that will ensue. So to narrow it down, the Commented [1]: Yes! A comma is needed here. The
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ways in which i write things include, in no particular order, spontaneous spewage, emotion,

and absolutely no structure whatsoever. Well except when i'm forced to write things for a grade,

then i might have some structure.

 So to start with, Spontaneous spewage. Sounds weird but hear me out. What that

means is that when i write, ill sit down, think for a minute about some of the ideas in my head,

aaaand give up. I just walk away and let all of those thoughts stuck in my head dissolve into

nothing, and be replaced with some spongebob episode that i watched seven years ago. And

after a couple hours, sometimes even days later, an idea will pop up. Some crazy thought that

wants to be let out, that needs to escape. And it will drive me insane. I'll think about it all day

long, while im at work, during school, and before i go to sleep. That thought, that idea, festers.

And it grows, it gets so big that i eventually have to give in and release it. It runs to my

fingertips and through my pen, exploding onto the paper. And it doesn't stop. One after

another they flow out, creating elaborate stories and whimsical characters, places that i can only

dream of and people that i wish i could be. And before i know it, it's three thirty in the morning

and i have to be at work at six. So obviously it's not the healthiest writing style, but it's mine.

Which segways me perfectly onto my next topic, emotion.

So continuing on. People who know me get that i half ass a lot of things. If it doesn't

interest me i get bored. And that's the case with a lot of people. But with writing its different.

Everything i write has meaning to me, all of my work is a portrayal of who i am as an individual.

And that leads to my writing to be emotional. I want my audience to have a bond with my

stories. I want to make them sympathize with the girl whos lost all hope,and her only way out is
fifty feet below her. I want to make them smile, to recount a forgotten childhood memory after

a boy finally meets his father. I want my stories to make them think. To feel alive in some way.

Cause that's what writing is to me. It's painful, it's sickening and twisted. Its cruel, unfair and

maddening. And its hopeful. It reminds me that i'm human, and i can make mistakes. I can fall,

and it's okay. So now i'm going to be moving on to my last topic, which is honestly the most

boring, structure.

So to finish off with, the structure of my writing, or better, the lack of structure. With

spontaneous spewage comes a lot of negatives. Besides from the lack of sleep, another side

effect is no structure to my work. My ideas scattered in the wind, running amok amongst the

pages. This leads to some arguments with teachers, and don't get me wrong. There are some

teachers who encourage creative thinking and writing. They want you to express yourselves and

be you. But there are times where you must write a certain way, and because of my style this

leads to some very bad grades and some very angry teachers. And i won't lie, it hurts to be told

that what you wrote, what you devoted a lot of your time to, is wrong. That's hard to swallow.

But that's part of growing as a writer, understanding that not everyone will like what you write.

Some people might take offense to it, while others might just simply hate it. And i'm still

learning to accept that. I always have to calm the urge to lay it on someone, that's probably just a

me thing. Anyways the point is that as a writer you should not be afraid of criticism, and that
goes for any profession. Don't be afraid to put yourself and your work out there. You will most

likely have haters, but you might change someone's life for the better.

So to wrap things up. My writing style is spontaneous, it's a living breathing project

that's always changing, shaping and reshaping itself depending on the mood i'm in. it's full of

emotion, crammed full of my hopes and fears. And contains absolutely no structure at all. And

that's exactly the way i like it.

Rubric rating submitted on: 9/1/2017, 12:39:17 PM by danielle.cook@redstreaks.org

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Comments:
Total: 25/25 x 2 = 50/50

I really enjoyed reading this, Jamie. Your writing style is definitely unique, but that makes your
writing interesting to read. I look forward to seeing your writing develop this semester. Make
sure in your more academic essays you capitalize all you I's! :)