MEMO

TO: Jackie Burr

FROM: Traven Bussell

DATE: October 10, 17

SUBJECT: Observation essay review

The topic of my observation essay was to view a place I have never seen prior. I have never seen
the city of Herriman prior to this event so I went there and just talked. I had no choice in this
topic, the class was assigned this topic, and so I did the topic. The purpose of this essay was to
show my reaction to an environment that I was not accustomed to. The essay did the task at
hand, and thus I am happy with it.
I would feel the greatest strength in this essay was the wording. I used interesting words and put
them together in a way that made the essay interesting to read. I learned from this essay that the
writer does not underline the title to the essay and has instructor after the instructor's name. As
for reflective writing, I learned that I needed to improve my writing in that category along with
my more formal academic writing.
If I had more time, I would correct the imperfections that I did not see in my time constraint.
Throughout the teacher's feedback there were marks and imperfections that I did not see as I was
in a rush to finish the essay. I would have fixed the issues with the introduction, with the title to
the essay being underlined. I would also have made the conclusion and introduction stronger.
In short, I need to improve my writing.