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Reflection 8:
1. Upload your Essay 4 Draft for credit here : English 1T- Essay 4 Draft
2. Reflect on reading your work aloud (answer one of these questions):
• What was your experience of reading aloud your essay to your peers?
Reading my essay aloud to my peers today was a new and fun experience for me. I was
worried that my peers would judge or not like my essay because it’s not my revised or
best writing but that was not the case. My peers listened carefully and respectfully, and
they also smiled and nodded when we made eye contact. It was also a boost of
confidence to hear my peers say, “good job” when I finished reading.
• Were people able to identify your naysayer perspective and concession? Explain.
Both readers were clearly able to identify the naysayers perspective and concession
because I was very specific. I used sentence frames like “conservative Republicans would
object..” “conservative Republicans would support this belief by saying…”
• What are the specific parts of the essay that need the most work, according to the
comments? Explain and be sure to NAME the paragraphs, and or specific elements of the
essay you need to work on (for example: developing your claims, providing stronger
support, integrating your quotations, etc.)
According to the comments, I need to work on in text citations in body paragraph two
when I quote Luiselli and a site I used. I really need to make sure I introduce my quotes
and sites properly in this essay because in the last essay I did not lead in to my quotes that
well.
• Editing: What specific editing errors do you need to pay close attention to? Consider not
just what your peer responders mentioned in today's workshop, but also, consider what
your errors were in Essay 3.
I need to pay attention to my spelling and punctuation errors because I type too quickly
and forget to revise. I also had this issue in my last essay.
5. Create a Revision Plan:
1. Final Draft of the Essay 4 is due on Monday, at 11:59pm: Write a bullet "to-do" list of
what you need to do to ensure you revise and finish the essay, and save enough time to
edit for: MLA in-text citation, a Works Cited page, spelling and punctuation, and other
grammatical surface-level improvements.
● I need to add a quote from Luiselli book and provide analysis to my fourth body
paragraph
● Need to find a third source that discusses violence so that I can add onto my first
body paragraph
● I need to write my conclusion
● I need to add words from my personal dictionaries
● Make sure my MLA in-text citations are done properly
● Have a work cited page (refer to Little Seagull Handbook)
● I also want to have a peer read it over before I submit it (GOAL IS TO BE DONE
BY SUNDAY NIGHT)