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Format of An Informal Letter
Format of An Informal Letter
Lot 1305,
Taman Perdana,
Jalan Bakawali,
98000 Miri,
Sarawak.
Dear Margaret,
Hey! How are you recently? I had received your letter last week. You said you had joined a
english essay competition which was organised by your school, and you won the champion!
Congratulation! You did a great job! I'm sure that your parents should be proud of you. Besides,
sorry for the late reply. Because I have just spent my school holiday in Malacca with my lovely
family. So, let's talk about my trip in Malacca.
On the first day of my trip in Malacca, we went to the historical sites of Malacca, A Famosa.
We bought some souvenirs there, we have also take photographs there. After visited A Famosa, we
went to visit the crocodile farm. The way to go to crocodile farm was very bumpy and need 2 hours
to reach there. But we chat happily with each others so we don't feel tired on the way to crocodile
farm. I saw many species of crocodiles there, it's really interesting! It helped me to exhanced my
knowledge. We have also watched crocodile-feeding sessions. I wish that you can watched with me
because it's really horrible that many crocodiles get their food together!
On the next day, we went to Mahkota Parade, which is a large shopping complex and very
famous in Malacca. There sell so many things that worth to buy it. The price is so cheap the the
things is beautiful with creative. We have also watch movie in the cineplex which is situated in the
Mahkota Parade. It had a very large movie screen and it's really comfortable to watch a movie there.
After that, we have rest for a while in our hotel and went to the A Famosa Water World which is near
by our hotel. We enjoyed water games and had a picnic there. It's so fun!
We went back to miri on the next day. I had a really sweet memories during the trip. I'm so
regret about didn't take photographs when visited the crocodile farm. I've forgot about it. So, that's
all about my school holiday. How about you? How do you spent your school holiday? I'm really
interested to know about it. Anyways, wish you all the best and have a healthy body. Don't forget to
bring my wish to your parents too. Wait for your reply. God bless.
Your faithfully,
Victoria.
CORRECTED VERSION
Essay (words in red indicate corrections, words Comments
in blue indicate suggestions)
Lot 1305,
Taman Perdana,
Jalan Bakawali,
98000 Miri,
Sarawak.
15 September 20121 Write the date.
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joined participated in an English Essay Competition which was
organised by your school and you won were the champion!
Congratulations! You did a great job! I'm sure that your
parents should would be proud of you. Besides, sorry for the late
reply.This is because I have just spent my school holiday in
Malacca with my lovely family. So, let's talk about my trip in
Malacca.
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