Farmers in Dieng has planted potatoes since it becomes the main ingredient for several dishes served by Commented

Commented [MCS1]: singular/plural?

the restaurants in early 1986. Potato is indigenous plantation from Andes mountains which is has less
than 1000 mm/year of rainfall average. The potato plant needs more treatment in Dieng area with the
rainfall more than 3500 mm/year. As a result, the high humidity drives pest and plant diseases by fungi Commented [MCS2]: singular
easily to attack. Because of this, farmers add more pesticides to get rid of it. Furthermore, the soil in Commented [MCS3]: I think “As a result” would be a
Dieng area is lack in nutrients that is caused by erosion during the rainy season. Watershed good connector
Management Bureau of the Ministry of Environment and Forestry reported that the soil erosion level in Commented [MCS4]: lacks in (verb)
Dieng area is around 400 - 500 ton/ha/year that categorized as heavily level erosion (Arsyad, 2000). The
Commented [MCS5]: passive
lack of nutrients in soil has affected the soil fertility; it has reduced the production of potatoes in the last
ten years as well. Therefore, farmers are applying fertilizers unwisely to restore the soil nutrients Commented [MCS6]: restrictive/non-restrictive?

content. They applied more chemical fertilizers without any consideration to the environmental impact. Commented [MCS7]: is it a fact/past event?
The residue of pesticides and chemical fertilizers are carried by water through runoff to the rivers
surrounding. Thus, pesticides and chemical fertilizers have polluted the river which is flowing from Dieng
Plateau Area.

In general, you’ve got interesting ideas with strong supporting sentences which makes a piece look
academic (i.e. presenting facts, referencing). I would suggest you put your topic sentence at the
beginning, so the readers could expect your content more easily.