First: too long, what ca we loose?

Auspice: necessary, it is job

Tribe: necessary, primary social structure
Rank: necessary, whole purpose of it
Breed: not necessary, only necessity is metis or not metis

we can only really lose breed, we will get back to this

Second: awkward linguistic structure and spoken dialogue rule broken

Awkward Linguistic Structure: Kvothe sounds terrible, like you have a speech inediment. Should be
kwothe or qothe.

Words that sound like speech inpediment

Ahroun
Cliath

one has questionable pronounciation: “Fill-odox” or “File-odox”

Adjacent words too similar: Adren Athro, both begin with A and the last syllable beings with R.

Spoken Dialogue Rule Broken: Don't mix other languages, or gobletygook, in with english. Always
sounds bad unless you're shouting

Example: I am am servant of the Secret Fire, wielder of the flame of Anor. The dark fire will not avail you, flame of Udûn.

Only sounds good chewing the scenery.

Third: Bad speech rhythm

Current rhythm is this: Beat-Beat-Beat-Beat-Beat,

2 3 or some such beat arrangement has better flow such as

Beat Beat-Beat Beat Beat

Mayve 2 2 1?

Perhaps military flow?

Total Example:

Grant Férfi, Kenturion, Aniki, Iron Tusk

(this is basically: Grant, Homid, Ahroun, Athro, anda fake tribe name)

Following above observations and their solutions gives the follwing

Grant Twice-Born, second-pack warrior of Iron tusk

Metis thing: Really, non metis need not specify if they are or not. It's optional. So non metis would be

Grant, Second-Pack warrior of iron tusk

and then if it's a metis they have to do this:

Grant Once-Born... and so on.