PENTAKSIRAN TINGKATAN TIGA

ENGLISH LANGUAGE

WRITING APPLYING THE STANDARD COMMENTARIES

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All content is relevant to the task and target reader is fully informed
CONTENT 5
about why stamp collecting would be a good hobby.

The candidate is able to communicate simple ideas and offer advice to

a friend on the topic of hobbies.
 I think you should…
 I hope you would like it.
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ACHIEVEMENT The conventions of an informal message, such as a friendly tone and
language of advice and suggestion, are used reasonably appropriately.
 Last Friday, You send me
 That all the information I given you. I hope you would like it.
Thank you.

The candidate is able to use simple connectors to link the sentences.

 It’s because
 ...be collected from any letters and you can change with your
ORGANISATION 4 friends or someone else.
 Then, you can

The punctuation is also used appropriately throughout the response.

The candidate uses basic vocabulary connected to the topic of hobbies

in an appropriate way.
 Collecting stamps, change, friends, country

Simple grammatical forms, including simple present and past and

some modal verbs, are used with some degree of control.
 You are starting
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 you wanted me to think
 I think you should do
 can be collected

Errors are noticeable, but meaning can still be determined.

 You send me about you are starting
 That all the information I given you.

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ENGLISH LANGUAGE

SCRIPT 7

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All content is relevant to the task and the target reader is fully informed
CONTENT 5
about why cooking would be a good hobby to choose.

The candidate is able to write a message providing appropriate advice to a

friend.
 think you should
 You can even
 You can cook
COMMUNICATIVE
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ACHIEVEMENT
Straightforward ideas are communicated using quite simple structures and
the tone is friendly and informal.
 once you get the hang of it
 It might be hard at first
 That will be my advice

The candidate is able to produce a text which is connected using simple

connectors appropriately. There are some attempts to link the ideas to
make more complex sentences using some simple cohesive devices.
ORGANISATION 5  Cooking might require a lot of skill but once you get the hang of it, it
will be as easy as ABC.
 It might be hard at first, but with practice
 You can even cook for your family if your mother…

The candidate is able to use basic vocabulary, which is relevant to the topic,
in an appropriate way.
 require, skill, get the hang of it, salt and pepper

Simple grammatical forms are used with a good degree of control and there
is some variety of structures.
 Cooking might require a lot of skill
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 It will be as easy as
 you can cook the finest of dishes

While some errors are noticeable, these mainly relate to spelling and
meaning can still be determined.
 Manegement
 Grin of salt

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PENTAKSIRAN TINGKATAN TIGA
ENGLISH LANGUAGE

SCRIPT 8

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All content is relevant to the task and the target reader is fully informed about
CONTENT 5
which hobby the writer is suggesting and why.

The candidate is able to produce a text to deliver simple ideas using some of
the conventions of an informal message to a friend. The tone is friendly and
appropriate advice is given.
COMMUNICATIVE  You should do reading
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ACHIEVEMENT
 Reading also can increase our knowledge.
 You should spend your time to read books
 I hope it can help you

The text is organised into paragraphs and although the majority of the
sentences are quite short, the ideas are linked with basic, high frequency
connecters.
ORGANISATION 3  In my opinion
 also
 Besides that
 because

The candidate uses basic vocabulary, which is connected to the topic,

appropriately, although there is some repetition of key vocabulary.
 Reading, knowledge, adventures, history, smartphone, habits

Simple grammatical forms, such as simple modal verbs and the present tense,
are used with some degree of control.
 You should do
LANGUAGE 4  Reading also can increase
 You should spend your time

Errors are noticeable but meaning can still be determined.

 It also can do when we bore
 I should pen off nowand expression appropriately to start sentences
such as In my opinion, Besides that, At your age. Although errors are
noticeable, meaning is never in doubt.

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ENGLISH LANGUAGE

SCRIPT 9

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The content is relevant to the task, but, because it is a very general response,
there are some omissions as there is no specific hobby recommended.
 What you like to do everyday during your freetime? Think about it.
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The target reader is on the whole informed as there is some general advice
about choosing a hobby.

The candidate is able to produce a text which communicates simple ideas

about choosing a hobby in simple ways that. The tone of the message is quite
COMMUNICATIVE general with little reference to the friend’s problem.
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ACHIEVEMENT
 Besides that, you can also list out your hobbies.
 I hope you can start a new hobby happily

The candidate can link their ideas in the message using simple connectors.
 Think about it.
 Besides that, you can also
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Although the sentences are quite short, there is some accurate punctuation
 You can choose more than one hobby, it doesn’t matter.

The candidate is able to use basic vocabulary related to the topic reasonably
but with some more formal expressions, which are inappropriate or misused in
this context.
 to fulfil your free time

Despite the short sentences, simple grammatical forms are used with a good
LANGUAGE 3
degree of control with very few slips.
 you are not forced to choose
 make a timetable of your hobbies for your daily routine

There are very few errors, but this is in part due to the simplicity of the
structures used.

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ENGLISH LANGUAGE

SCRIPT 10

SUBSCALE MARK COMMENTARY

The content is relevant to the task and the target reader is fully informed
CONTENT 5
about the hobbies that the writer is suggesting and why.

The candidate produces a text which communicates straightforward ideas

in simple ways. The tone of the message is friendly and informal, which is
COMMUNICATIVE appropriate for the task.
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ACHIEVEMENT
 How are you? I hope you are fine
 bye my friend

There are some basic, high frequency connectors which are used to link
ideas, but they are over-used in this text.
 and, such as, also
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However there is some repetition due to the lack of referencing pronouns
 Other are good also such as sports sports is a good hobby

The candidate uses basic vocabulary reasonably for the task, although
there is a lot of repetition of key vocabulary.
 choose, healthy, work hard, give up
LANGUAGE 2
Simple grammatical forms are used, but the control is limited due to
punctuation, tense and word choice errors.
 You are thinking of starting a new hobby is cooking, it can make
your body healthy and smart thinking

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PENTAKSIRAN TINGKATAN TIGA
ENGLISH LANGUAGE

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The target reader is minimally informed about the topic of celebration,
CONTENT
1 although there is some relevance to the topic.

 I want to celebrate the birthday in my house

COMMUNICATIVE Due to the length of the response, the candidate produces a text which
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ACHIEVEMENT communicates a simple idea in a simple way.

Although the sentences are short, the ideas are connected and there is
use of a basic, high frequency connector.
ORGANISATION 1  my birthday
 and
 the birthday

Due to the length of the response, the candidate is only able to use a
basic range of vocabulary and simple grammatical forms, although
LANGUAGE 1
there is some degree of control.
 My family and I want to celebrate the birthday in my house.

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ENGLISH LANGUAGE
SCRIPT 12

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All content is relevant to the task and the target reader is fully informed
CONTENT 5
about a celebration which the candidate enjoys.

The candidate is able to use the appropriate tone and register for an essay
to communicate straightforward ideas. There is a clear introduction, which
outlines the celebration and the reason for it, and the writer’s personal
opinions are described.
COMMUNICATIVE
5  The feelings in me were amazing. I was excited and happy and
ACHIEVEMENT
many more

The target reader’s attention is held due to the engaging tone and the
chronological, event-by-event narration of the celebration.

The candidate is able to produce a well-organised and coherent text using a

variety of cohesive devices, particularly time references, to link their ideas.
 The night before
ORGANISATION 5  On the day itself
 When we got
 Since it was an afternoon…After lunch
 By 7pm evening

The candidate is able to use a range of everyday vocabulary as well as

some less common lexis appropriately.
 heart of Malaysia, skip school, magnifficent, iconic stops, diverse
cultures

There is a range of grammatical forms used with a good degree of control,

particularly the use of prepositions.
 This celebration came to be
 Planned and confirmed it
 We met up at
 When we got out of the train station
 one of the world’s top 10 tallest buildings
LANGUAGE 5  The view from above
 We continued touring

The errors occur when trying to express more complex ideas and when
attempting to use less common lexis, but they do not impede
communication.
 And so did the idea came in
 About an hour or so, we reached the city
 We all grown up in
 The foods were
 We then go ahead
 Though feeling sad but it was a warm and lovely day
 The celebration that enjoyed a lot

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PENTAKSIRAN TINGKATAN TIGA
ENGLISH LANGUAGE
SCRIPT 13

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CONTENT All content is relevant to the task and the target reader is fully
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informed about a celebration the candidate has enjoyed.

The candidate is able to communicate straightforward ideas in a

reasonably appropriate style for an essay. The essay is written from
a first person perspective, which is appropriate for the topic. The
preparations for the party are explained in detail and the writer’s
COMMUNICATIVE 4 personal feelings are described.
ACHIEVEMENT  My mother baked an ice-cream cake
 I went to her room and closed her eyes to give her surprise
 She was suprised
 She was as happy as a lark
 We enjoyed the moments

Although the candidate has used paragraphs to organise the text

and the ideas, there is only limited use of cohesive devices to
connect the ideas and only simple connectors are used within the
often quite short sentences.
 when teacher reached me and asked me
ORGANISATION 3  I stood up and start
 This is because
 because that is her favourite
 But, this news
 More than that, after she saw

Basic vocabulary, connected to the topic, is used appropriately,

and there is a lot of repetition of key words.
 favourite, phone, surprise, party

Simple grammatical forms, such as the simple present and past

tenses, as well as some examples of the past and past perfect
tense, are used with a good degree of control.
 This is because that was
 She was treated like a queen.
LANGUAGE 3  My sister wore a dress
 I had saved an amount of money
 I brought her to
 We had decorated

There are some noticeable errors, including spelling and errors with
word choices, but meaning can still be determined.
 to gift my sister an I-phone
 to make her fun
 after she saw the prizes

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ENGLISH LANGUAGE

SCRIPT 14

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All content is relevant to the task and the target reader is fully informed.

Although the candidate describes one specific celebration which took place in
the past rather than one which is enjoyed on a regular basis, the topic has been
CONTENT 5
discussed and we know why they enjoyed this particular celebration and we can
assume that they enjoy birthdays in general.
 Last few weeks, I celebrated my classmate, John’s birthday with other
classmates.

The candidate has written an essay on the topic of a celebration and has
communicated straightforward ideas reasonably appropriately. There is an
COMMUNICATIVE introduction, some factual information and a short conclusion.
ACHIEVEMENT  His birthday is on 1st of October. We celebrated together in the class.
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 As we were singing birthday song to him, he felt surprised and shocked.
 We went home happily on that day

The candidate makes good use of paragraphs to organise the information in the
text. The ideas are linked through the use of simple connectors.
 And, also
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There is also some limited use of cohesive devices to show the sequence of
events.
 Last few weeks, That day, After, As, Then, After that, After

The candidate uses basic vocabulary connected to the topic of celebrations

appropriately, although some vocabulary is overused.
 birthday, food, drinks, singing, prepare, prepared, play some games
together, enjoying, joy, enjoy

Simple grammatical forms are used with a good degree of control, particularly
past forms.
 As we were singing…he felt susprised
 Then we gave him
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 After that, we ate
 After finishing…we all everyone felt

However, there are some errors with verb agreement, tenses, and when trying to
express certain ideas.
 I has been taking
 Busy to prepare the food
 We ready to start
 We all everyone felt very enjoy and joy

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PENTAKSIRAN TINGKATAN TIGA
ENGLISH LANGUAGE

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All content is relevant to the task and the target reader is fully informed about
CONTENT 5
the celebration, the preparations for it and why the writer enjoyed it.

The candidate is able to use the conventions of an essay reasonably

appropriately. There is an introduction, which describes what the celebration
was, and both factual information and personal opinions are given.
Straightforward ideas communicated in a generally neutral tone, which is
COMMUNICATIVE appropriate for the task.
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ACHIEVEMENT  The celebration held in mutiara compleks
 I was get rdy to the celebration and went to there at 7pm
 It was a interesting moment to me
 I feel so glad…I wish to have a celebration like this every year

The candidate is able to use some basic, high frequency connectors to link the
ideas within sentences.
 and, that, also, because

ORGANISATION 2 There is occasional use of some simple sequencing connectors within

paragraphs but there is no clear purpose or connection between all the
paragraphs.
 After that
 I feel so glad when

The candidate is able to use basic vocabulary appropriately although there is

some repetition of key vocabulary
 celebrate, party, relatives, invitation

Simple grammatical forms are used with some degree of control, but errors
occur in nearly every sentence.
 The celebration held to meet our relatives
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 I was get rdy to the celebration
 because me and my family went to all the relatives home and invites
them
 After that welcome all the relatives in the hall and also talk to some of
the relatives whom I close to…)

The frequent errors are noticeable, but meaning can generally be determined.

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