William Lines

Mrs. Crandall

AP Language

18 December 2019

Growth and Improvement Owing to AP Language

Throughout the semester, both my style, organization, and precision of language

drastically improved. In the first drafts of my essays, I often write my paragraphs or place

sentences in a disadvantageous order. I would also use inarticulate language and dead words,

especially “to be” and “to have” verbs. Finally, my analysis of rhetoric developed into a

semblance of advancement and competence.

At the beginning of the semester, my writing often contained many shortcomings in depth

of analysis. For example, my rhetorical analysis essay lacked depth in its organization and

logical progression of ideas. The essay also failed to analyze the use of rhetorical strategies with

profundity. In my revision, the essay better took into account the organization of the essay and

was better organized itself, and the depth of analysis drastically differs.

This course has dramatically improved my precision of language as well. In my synthesis

argument essay on locavorism, my diction, syntax, and grammar were imperfect and flawed. My

revision of the essay evinces my improvement in grammar and syntax, as well as in diction and

vocabulary. An example of this is the sentence “Finally, the most significant benefit for

individuals of becoming a locavore is the improvement in nutrition and taste.” I edited this

sentence to “​Finally, the improvement in nutrition and taste most significantly benefit a

locavore.” This more concise sentence uses less meaningless words and a more easily understood
sentence structure. This sentence captures one of the many, especially in this essay, in which my

precision of language drastically improved.

In my argument essay, concerned with Alfie Kohn’s claim about competition, the quality

of my argument suffered significantly from my failing to construct the essay and arguments in

an advantageous and orderly manner. Even more so, I failed to use advanced language and

diction. In my revision, I organized the paper drastically differently and used significantly less

elementary grammar.

Throughout the semester, AP Language taught me a great deal about rhetoric, American

Literature, literary analysis, diction, vocabulary, grammar, and style. However, my attributes as a

writer that most significantly improved seem to be my diction, syntax, style, and depth of

analysis.