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Brian Lam
Mr. Gallagher
29 November 2010
After flipping back and forth and trying to grasp the writing style of Faulkner and
Hemingway, I realized that the single hardest task is how to transform Faulkner’s
elaborative writing style to Hemingway’s terse style while maintaining the tone with
respect to each author. I used Hemingway’s “A Clean, Well-Lighted Place” and “Hills
Like White Elephants” as a reference to help me get a better understanding of his broad
syntax method of presenting the tone. I chose Faulkner’s “Barn Burning” to rewrite with
Hemingway style. I notice that the Faulkner’s dialogues are an effective piece to use for
rewrite because this actually helped me understand the plot of the story and the meaning
I tried to rewrite, following the paragraph and dialogue format of the two
Hemingway works. Actually, both works follow the same format, so I just took bits and
pieces of his sentences to be used as part of my own such as his conjunctions, main and
subordinate clauses of his sentences. I found that looking back and forth and comparing
dialogue formatting requires careful attention on who is speaking from each line of the
dialogue. The reader has to pay attention who is speaking which lines, in order to keep
track of the dialogue. I know that Hemingway would sometime continue the dialogue
from a person who has already spoken by following another line of dialogue as if the
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with how the person would actually talk by pausing and speaking again.
The next step is trying to figure out how to put Faulkner’s dialogue into
Hemingway sentences. This part I really had to be careful, paying attention to the style of
each author because Faulkner dialogues would sound too emotional if the sentences are
that I know well. But, Hemingway sentence are crisp and lively, and flow very nicely
without hesitation or break. When I break down Faulkner sentences, I had to think my
own way of rephrasing as I try to reflect it through how I would speak these words to
another person.
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Brian Lam
Mr. Gallagher
29 November 2010
The last minute before the last light vanished from the sun the wind whoosh
against the leaves. In the morning time the alarm clock was noisy, but at dusk the hand
sustains the noise and the young boy liked to walk because he was joyful and now at dusk
it was chaos and he felt the unlikeness. The young boy walked closer and closer, to the
window of the cabin outside. The three men inside the cabin knew that the young boy is
watching, while he was a good boy they knew that if he bothered them he would leave
“What did you do to my barn, Mr. Snope?” the man asked. He had broken the
“No.”
“My barn burned that night. I got the stocks out but I lost the barn.”
They sat together at a table that lay on the middle of the cabin near the front door
and looked at the window where the leaves of the trees were all moving slightly except
where the young man laid his fingers at the corner edge where the wind cannot push his
fingers. The angry man pointed his finger to the window and the table shakes.
“Tell the boy to come inside.” At this time, you know that I rearranged the order of the plot;
instead of putting the boy in the house with the three men, I put
him outside looking in the cabin. The effect is to show that the
The boy comes inside, bewildered. boy’s innocence is separate from the adults. The boy’s innocence
exemplifies childhood naiveté separate from adult accusations. I
“What did your father do to my barn?” believe that rearranging this part is crucial because the family
relationship – the father and son – is important. It tests how much
“How should I know?” trust that the boy has on the father, and how much the father
could rely on his son not to tell the truth.
Another man stepped in to talk. “Let me handle this. Can you help us?” said the
Justice.
“Really bad.”
“What’s your name?” the Justice said and move his head slightly upward.
“I hope anyone who is named Colonel Sartoris would tell the truth. Just let the air
The young boy said nothing. The two men left the cabin. The boy looks at his
father, distressed.
Does the truth hurt? Hemingway
“You almost spoke the truth.” explores the pain and agony when
people have to endure the truth,
“Sorry, father.” which damages a strong
relationship between the son and
“You don’t know how worry I am” father. The young boy believes that
telling truth would set the father
“No.” free from guilt. While the father
believes that hiding the truth would
“Do you care for me?” prevent him from trouble.
“Yes. Why?”
“When they ask you again, don’t let them find out.”
“I am so confuse.”
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“Don’t let ethics change you. You’ve got to realize,” the father said, “that I don’t
I did not finish the whole story, but I think I may have a chopped-down version of
Faulkner’s writing.
The father tries to persuade his son not to tell the truth. Here, persuasion exemplifies the
act of manipulation. The father hopes that his son would not tell the truth because he does
not want to be revealed as a bad person. He only wants to let his son realize how serious
this situation can be if the father ends up arrested.