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Watching Mrs. Sheppick run her classroom is like watching a well-oiled machine. There
is no doubt Mrs. Sheppick excels at her job. She’s an exceptional educator, mentor, and friend to
her students. You can tell she genuinely wants what is best for the ten students in her class.
Mrs. Sheppick’s love for people with disabilities began in high school. Years ago, she
was a peer tutor here at Copper Hills. But her experience in the life skills classroom wasn’t
always a positive one. “We would sit and play uno. Everyday I went in, there was a movie on.
The students didn’t go to classes. They sat in the same room all day,” she said.
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Mrs. Sheppick runs her classroom like a well-oiled machine. She excels at her job and is
Her love for people with disabilities began early on. She was a peer tutor years ago, but
her experience in the classroom wasn’t always a positive one. She said, “The students didn't go
One of the techniques said you should ¨avoid strings of prepositional phrases.¨ So I took
out words like ¨for,¨ ¨of,¨ ¨but,¨ and the word ¨and.¨ After doing this, I already saw a big
difference. But I condensed it even more by choosing a clear subject. Once I stated I was talking
about Mrs. Sheppick, I used ¨she¨ which helped when trying to condense my paragraphs. My
audience knew who I was talking about and I didn´t introduce a new character, so it didn't make
sense for me to say ¨Mrs. Sheppick¨ over and over again when it was already common