Resurrection writing

project
Teacher: Ms. Cami
Students: Otto, Jack and Jacinta
The group
Otto: Jack:
A positive and hard
An independent writer
working writer.
with amazing ideas and
Loves to learn and
unique stile. Loves
is always amazed
research and is
by his findings.
supportive with his
Hates the school
classmates. Hates doing
lunch and is willing
groceries with her mom.
to change it.
Jacinta:
A passionate and
hard working
writer. Loves art
and is cautious
about her writing.
Spaghetti is her
favorite food.
IOWA CORE
W.4.1 Write opinion pieces on topics or texts, supporting a point of view with reasons and
information.

[CCSS: W.4.1 Write on topics or texts, supporting a point of view with reasons and information.]
Oreo Graphic Organizer
1. Select a Topic that you are interested in working on
2. State the opinion you have about the selected topic
3. Find a reason that supports the topic
4. Find a second reason
5. Find a third reason
6. Restate the opinion you have about the selected topic
Writing conferences
Process:

1. Opening  Positive comment to the writer

2. Teaching Point  Still positive, use

examples of the writer’s piece and then
suggest changes

3. Closure  Set the writing goal

FOCUS OF THE WRITING CONFERENCE
* Adding supporting details and examples in the
piece

I can improve my introduction and the

supporting details for each reason explained in
the piece to create a better hook
 OTTO
EXAMPLE #1
Original introduction: Revised introduction:
My opinion is that they should change My opinion is that they should change the school
the school lunch food. lunch food. They could make it healthier or get it
from a farm. They could make homemade food
with different recipes. Also the could get more
fresh food.

EXAMPLE #2
Original text:
One reason is because the food is not
always healthy. Like the chicken nuggets
we don’t know what is in it so I am
guessing it is not very good for you.
Revised Text:
One reason is because the food is not always
healthy. Like the chicken nuggets we don’t know
what is in it so I am guessing it is not very good for
you. Maybe they could give out chicken strips or
legs that are more healthy.

* We can see how Otto added examples and more detail to his introduction and one of his
reasons in order to give the reader a better view of
 JACINTA
EXAMPLE #1
Original text:
If we had art everyday I think students
would become more creative.
Students being more creative could help
them to do better in school. This can also
help students express their creativity.
EXAMPLE #2
Lastly, art can help you become more
smart. For example, we do learn a lot
in art. So, you can use the skills you
learn in art when you’re older.
* We can see how Jacinta understood the suggestions and added examples to have more detail in
her piece
Revised text:
f we had art everyday I think students would
become more creative.
Students being more creative could help them to
do better in school. This can also help students
express their creativity. For example, expressing
your creativity can help them to express their
creativity in Language arts, math, or science.
Lastly, art can help you become more smart.
For example, we do learn a lot in art. So, you
can use the skills you learn in art when you’re
older. For example, we learn the Elements of
art. Some of the Elements of art are, color,
value, and texture.
 JACK
EXAMPLE #1
Original text:
Gym is fun and stress-relieving because exercise
can be stress-relieving. If I had a test coming I
would be stressed and more P.E. time can help
fight that stress. Also gym is good for your
heart.
EXAMPLE #2
Students would be calmer after gym
time. Some students would be
hyper because they have energy that
they need to get out. If schools had more
gym students would have longer
attention spans and do better in school.
* We can see how Jack added more detail and explained better each one of his reasons.
Revised text:
Gym is fun and stress-relieving because exercise can
be stress-relieving. If I had a test coming I would be
stressed and more P.E. time can help fight that stress.
Also gym is good for your heart. Exercise can also
help you making your self-esteem higher. Gym time
can help with anxiety, depression, PDST, ADAH
Students would be calmer after gym time. Some
students would be hyper because they have energy
that they need to get out. If schools had more gym
students would have longer attention spans and do
better in school. Then kids would better in school
because they would pay attention more in class.
Exercise has helped fight symptoms of anxiety and
depression in kids.
MINI-LESSON
(Flow and getting rid of repeated words)

Outcome/Goal: I can organize

my piece with coherent sentences
and avoiding repeated words
Standard:
W.4.4 Produce clear
and coherent writing
in which the Teaching Point: improving the
development and sentence fluency (cohesion and
organization are coherence) in the opinion piece
appropriate to task,
purpose, and
audience

Assessment: can students

identify the parts of pieces
where they have some flow
mistakes and repeated words
 EXAMPLES

Jacinta Jack Otto

Students Kids Gym P.E. is fun and stress- So I am
being more relieving because exercise guessing it is
creative could can be stress-relieving. If I not very healthy
help them to do had a test coming I would be for you. Maybe
better in school. stressed and more P.E. gym they could give
This can also help time can help fight that out chicken
students classma stress. Also gym sports are strips or legs
tes express their good for your heart. Exercise that are more
creativity. can also help you making healthy. hat are
your self-esteem higher. better for your
health
Sneak Peeks ……………….JACINTA

”Do you like art? I sure do. I believe the thing we

should change about our school is art. In my
opinion I think we should have art everyday in our
school schedule because, students can become
more creative, it can also be stress relieving, and
you can grow to be more smart.”

Jacinta has a very unique voice in her piece. Since her first sentence she is
already interacting with and engaging the reader while making unique
choices to reach the audience. Moreover she uses a tone that gives flavor
and texture to message and her voice is perceived in every line she wrote
letting the reader know her a little bit more
Sneak Peeks ……………….OTTO
“To sum it up, foods It Could be a lot healthier or
it could be really good to. But if you still don’t
agree with me did you know school food can cause
you to have health issues when you are an adult or
it could increase your chances of becoming obese!
Also it can shorten your life if you eat it a lot. I
hope that changed your mind.”

The writing trait voice was a strength for Otto in his piece. Throughout
the piece you can listen to Otto’s voice. With the tone he uses, he tries
to convince his audience about changing the school’s food. I think that
he uses a tone that supports the purpose and clarifies the message of is
idea. Moreover, I think that he got to interact with the reader and
engage the audience while making unique choices to reach the ones who
are being convinced.
Sneak Peeks ……………….JACK
Also, P.E. is fun and stress-relieving because exercise can
be stress-relieving. If I had a test coming I would be
stressed and more gym time can help fight that stress. Also
sports are good for your heart. Exercise can also help you
making your self-esteem higher. Physical activity can help
with anxiety, depression, PTSD, ADHD and chronic stress.
Also, the amygdala, the part of the brain causes anxiety is
less active during exercise.

Jack uses a highly effective sequencing, making best choices for progression
and enriching the reader’s understanding. I like how he has all the ideas
structured and logically sequenced, which keeps the reader engaged.
Moreover he uses clear, thoughtful transitions, showing the reader how ideas
relate and enhancing meaning and progress throughout the piece.
 NEXT STEPS…

Jack:
He can improve in his
use of voice. Selecting
Jacinta: the appropriate
information that would
She can improve in her
be included in the
confidence writing and
paper can help improve
Otto: she can include more
the fluency of the piece.
personal experience
He could organize
that would help the
better his ideas and
reader understand her
select the proper
point
information he
researches. With a
better organization, the
reader will be more
engaged.
REFLECTIONS
I learned… that students need clear and precise instructions from
Students need… a model in order to understand perfectly what they are
doing.
I observed… students got the chance to discover the power of their
voices and organized their ideas in order to make their opinion valuable

I’m truly proud of my students. I got to experience a beautiful process where

I could see them grow and become better writers. They not only showed their
abilities but also worked hard on their weaknesses.
 NEW UNDERSTANDINGS
Students need
Using graphic
well instructed
organizers is a great
modeling from
strategy for students
their teacher
to have a clear
perspective of their
ideas

Being prepared and

It is important to knowing exactly what
not only motivate you are going to tell the
students but also student is fundamental
to increase their for them to improve in
confidence their writing