Major Writing Assignment

EFL104 Spring 2020

BIH

DO YOUR OWN WORK

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This assignment was completed in accordance with the Academic Code of Practice.

Capitalize all parts of your name, as in Johann Sebastian Bach.

Type the date as Month Day, 2020 or Day Month 2020

Name: Satar Mohammadi

Date: 12 May 2020
Guidance for essay assignments is in the writing guides. You are responsible for following
those guidelines.

Your final exam will be on paper without a dictionary or Internet.  You will need to have the 
skills in your head.  Keep this in mind as you do your work for the course.

CD Module 3: The Environment

The instructions and sources for this assignment are on the MW3
Instructions-Sources file linked to the MW3D assignment board.
Summary. Summarize the two MW3 sources in your own words.

Reminders: Review the lesson in ARW1 and the examples in the Paragraph-Essay
Structure file. Summarize in one paragraph, in about 10% of the word count of the
source. Provide all and only the most important ideas of the source. Do not add ideas
that are not in the source. Do not quote or copy from the source. Begin with an internal
citation. Provide the external citation after the summary. Show that you have
understood the lesson, the examples, and your tutor's ARW1 feedback.

Summarize MW3 Source 1 here in up to about 50 words:

According to “Penguins Running Free,” penguins in the Shedd Aquirum are feeling
more comfortable since it had closed for Covid-19. There is no one in the aquarium
except of their caretakers; so they have the full aquarium for themselves strolling and
wondering around. We can conclude that they need to be more free and guests
prevent them to be.

Summarize MW3 Source 2 here in up to about 75 words:

We learn from “Yo-Yo Ma: Songs of Comfort” that these days we need to do
something that help us to feel more comfortable. It is just what Yo-Yo Ma is trying to.
He started a project called Songs of Comfort. I the project, he began posting some of
his short performances of some pieces and also ask others to do some art works and
share that in #SongsofComfort. He believes that it will help people to be more united
and hopeful.

Good—remember your external citations.

Outline your MW3 essay. You may outline before, during, or after the
drafting process. Ensure that your outline is complete, has the correct elements, and matches
your essay.

Very good!

Topic [in your own few words. Show that you understand the general subject, the topic]: What
can I do to help myself and others in this situation of the world.

Title [name of essay at top center; short, interesting, capitalized correctly]: Humans as Parts of
a Body

Introduction

Hook [first sentence of your essay, attracting readers]: Covid-19 pandemic happened to
aware us think more about ourselves as humans.

Thesis statement [last sentence of the introduction; the point of your essay in one sentence.
Do not announce or describe your plans]: there is something that I can do for myself and
others to profit from this situation.

Body [Three important aspects of your thesis to explore. Outline each in less than half a line.
Do not type details, topic sentences, or paragraphs. See the Paragraph-Essay Structure file for
examples.]

Main Idea 1: Things to do for myself.

Main Idea 2: Things to do for others.
Main Idea 3: Making changes.

Main Idea of Concluding Paragraph [sums up the whole essay with a short phrase]:

Check draft topic sentences against your outline main ideas. Type the topic sentences of your
main idea paragraphs and concluding paragraph here. Does each topic sentence introduce its
main idea clearly, simply, and without details?

Main Idea 1 topic sentence: The first step is to start from myself.

Main Idea 2 topic sentence: When I find my duty in this situation, so I can share it with others.
Main Idea 3 topic sentence: By our efforts, changes will be available.
Concluding Paragraph topic sentence [the first sentence, not the paragraph]: So, the current
situation of us and the world looks bad, but we can benefit from it.

Concluding sentence of essay [the last sentence, not the paragraph]: covid-19 is just a gift from
god to make the world a better place to live.

MW3 Graded Draft Essay

Start typing below here:

Humans as Parts of a Body

Covid-19 pandemic happened to aware us to think more about ourselves as humans.

Human’s behaviors are disturbing the environment and their lives and they should try change
something. I should think that what is the message of Covid-19 and try to make changes. There
is something that I can do for myself and others to profit from this situation.

The first step is to start from myself. Just like others, this situation threatens my life and as
I am trying to pay attention to health cares in order to be alive, I started to think why I was born
and why I am alive. Thinking about this question helped me to change some of my attitudes.
Moreover, although it is boring to stay at home for a long time, but I am trying to spend more
time to intense my abilities. I can practice my musical instruments more, I can do the college
chores better and I can do something new like reading books, exercising and other stuffs that I
did not have enough time for them before.

When I find my duty in this situation, so I can share it with others. People have a lot of
problems in this situation like poverty and business problems, being worry and desperate and
getting annoyed to stay at home. I think the first step is to help them think more deeply about
this situation and what does it want to learn us. If I started to think more about my duty of
being alive, so I can encourage others to think about these ideas. I believe that the first step to
change is to start thinking; because by changing attitudes, people will start to change their
behaviors. For intense, if we think that finally we will die and there is no material we can bring
with ourselves and just kindness remains, so we will try more to help each other.

By our efforts, changes will be available. Covid-19 pandemic shows that we were acting
too self-centered to comfort our lives but now we know that the effects of not paying attention
to the others and the nature will influence ourselves. I think I should use this situation to be
awaked and change my way of thinking and acting. If I do that and try to share my ideas with
others, the global awareness will increase and clearly, the power of a group is more intensive
than a person. If everyone think so, so there will be a lot of groups which are trying to change
themselves and the others.

So, the current situation of us and the world looks bad, but we can profit from it. As we
learn from ‘’Yo-Yo Ma: Songs of Comfort’’ we are here to comfort each other’s lives. We should
try to pay more attention and benefit to our surroundings, other people, animals and nature.
Covid-19 is just a gift from god to make the world a better place to live.

Covid-19 pandemic happened to aware us

Aware is an adjective. Verb collocations: for the concept: to become aware, to make
someone aware, to raise awareness.

Human behavior is, human activities are

I should think about the message of Covid-19

There are things I can do for myself and others to profit from this situation.

The situation threatens the life of others as well as me.

As I attended to my health in order to survive, I started to think about why I was born and why
I am alive.

Moreover, although it is boring to stay home for a long time, I am spending more time
enhancing my abilities.

I can do college tasks

and other activities that I did not have enough time for them before.

When I have identified my duty, I can

poverty, business problems, worry, desperation, and exasperation at having to stay home.

about this situation and what it is teaching us

Having started to think more about my duty in life, I can encourage others

the first step to change is to start thinking because

For instance, if we recognize that we will eventually die, that there is nothing we can take with
us, and that only kindness will remain, we will make more of an effort to

The Covid-19 pandemic shows that we have been too self-centered, too comfortable with our
lives. Now we know that the effects of not paying attention to the other and to nature will
come back on ourselves.

I should use this situation to awaken and to

If I do this and share my ideas with others, global awareness will increase. A group is more
powerful than an individual

If everyone comes to think so, there

Even though our current situation… looks bad, we can profit from it.

a gift from God

Draft Essay Rubric for Students and Tutors

Students are responsible for following the rubric.
Before you submit the assignment, did you...

Understand the topic? ___

Outline completely and correctly? ___
Write a well-organized essay with all the elements? ___
Write 400 to 500 words, not more? ___
Practice using the sources?
Show that you understand the instructions and the grading rubric? ___

Edit your work Tutor Comments and Grading

Instructions, outline, summaries, Points:  1.5  out of 2
mechanics
- Follow instructions Remember external citations for the summaries.
- Topic correct
- Summaries correct
- Outline correct
- Correct capitalization, punctuation,
formatting, spaces, and spelling.
- Plain black 11-point or 12-point font—
one or the other, not both.
- Name your file Your Name MW3D
- Name and date at the top of this
worksheet.
Title, introductory paragraph Points:  1  out of 1
- Short, relevant title, centered and There are things I can do
correctly capitalized There is much I can do
- Hook attracts readers
- Introduce topic and why it matters.
- Save details for the body of the essay.
- Thesis statement ends introduction.
- Do not announce or describe what you
will do—that’s easy, and you don’t need
the practice.
Body: three main idea paragraphs Points:  2  out of 2
- Three complete, balanced paragraphs, Splendid ideas, eloquently expressed.
each with topic sentence, supporting
sentences, completing sentence.
- Each short topic sentence introduces
main idea without details.
- Supporting sentences support main
idea. Do not just repeat the main idea
over and over--develop it as the
paragraph lessons in your previous
studies taught.
- Do not announce or describe what you
will do. Just present your ideas.
Concluding paragraph Points:  1  out of 1
- Complete paragraph: topic sentence, Great ending. Put the Ma reference in the body
supporting sentences, concluding of your essay. New ideas belong in the main
sentence. idea paragraphs.
- Do not introduce new ideas.
- Do not describe your essay or repeat
details.
- Look back on the whole essay and ahead
to its impact.
- Readers remember endings, so we
must give them an ending to remember.
Source Use Points:  .5  out of 2
- Quote or paraphrase from each of the      
two sources on the MW3 Instructions-
Source file on the assignment board.
- Quote at least once.
- Use the sources to support your writing.
Don’t just drop a quote into a
paragraph.
- Remember that to quote is to report
the exact words of a source by putting
them in quotation marks. It does not
mean to find a quote in that source.
- Provide correct internal citations.
- Provide correct external citations.

Grammar & sentence structure Points:  1.5  out of 2

- Clear, understandable writing      
- Grammar and sentence structure you
should know
Floating points Points:    out of minus 3
Up to 3 points can be lost for ignoring      
instructions and tutor reminders.
Total for the assignment: 8/10 points Great drafting, Satar

MW3 Final Essay

1. If your tutor directed you to improve your outline, or if you want to improve it anyway,
outline here:
Topic:

Title:

Hook:

Thesis statement:

Main Idea 1:
Main Idea 2:
Main Idea 3:
Main Idea of Concluding Paragraph:

Main Idea 1 topic sentence:

Main Idea 2 topic sentence:
Main Idea 3 topic sentence:
Concluding Paragraph topic sentence:

Concluding sentence of essay:

2. Improve your essay. Follow your tutor’s advice and the writing guides.
Start typing your final MW3 essay below here:
 Final Essay Rubric for Students and Tutors

Edit your work Tutor Comments and Grading

Instructions, outline, mechanics Points:    out of 2
- Follow instructions      
- Topic correct
- Outline correct
- Correct capitalization, punctuation,
formatting, spaces, and spelling.
- Plain black 11-point or 12-point font—
one or the other, not both.
- Name your file Your Name MW3F
- Name and date at the top of this
worksheet.
Title, introductory paragraph Points:    out of 1
- Short, relevant title, centered and      
correctly capitalized
- Hook attracts readers
- Introduce topic and why it matters.
- Save details for the body of the essay.
- Thesis statement ends introduction.
- Do not announce or describe what you
will do—that’s easy, and you don’t need
the practice.
Body: three main idea paragraphs Points:    out of 2
- Three complete, balanced paragraphs,      
each with topic sentence, supporting
sentences, completing sentence.
- Each short topic sentence introduces
main idea without details.
- Supporting sentences support main
idea. Do not just repeat the main idea
over and over--develop it as the
paragraph lessons in your previous
studies taught.
- Do not announce or describe what you
will do. Just present your ideas.
Concluding paragraph Points:    out of 1
- Complete paragraph: topic sentence,      
supporting sentences, concluding
sentence.
- Do not introduce new ideas.
- Do not describe your essay or repeat
details.
- Look back on the whole essay and ahead
to its impact.
- Readers remember endings, so we
must give them an ending to remember.
Source Use Points:    out of 2
- Quote or paraphrase from each of the      
two sources on the MW3 Instructions-
Source file on the assignment board.
- Quote at least once.
- Use the sources to support your writing.
Don’t just drop a quote into a
paragraph.
- Remember that to quote is to report
the exact words of a source by putting
them in quotation marks. It does not
mean to find a quote in that source.
- Provide correct internal citations.
- Provide correct external citations.

Grammar & sentence structure Points:    out of 2

- Clear, understandable writing      
- Grammar and sentence structure you
should know
Floating points Points:    out of minus 3
Up to 3 points can be lost for ignoring      
instructions and tutor reminders.
Total for the assignment: 0/10 points