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This evaluation will discuss how the short story “The Pedestrian” by Ray Bradbury (1951) fits into
The Craft of Writing Module (NESA, 2017). The language features in the text that have an enduring quality
and are significantly suitable for the module includes third-person limited narration and point of view,
irony, characterisation and vivid imagery developed by descriptive language. These features exemplify the
effects of the craft of writing, and can therefore be utilized in The Craft of Writing course. This evaluation
will then discuss how to teach students the chosen feature vivid imagery in the craft of writing by referring
to ‘The Craft of Writing module’ and actual lesson plans (NESA, 2017).
The third-person limited narration and omniscient point of view in the text presents the thoughts
and actions of the main character Mr. Leonard Mead. This allows the audience to be embedded into the
world of the short story and to explore and experience what the main character is experiencing. The
omniscient point of view presents the theme of how the dystopian world with highly advanced technology
in society has led to the death of humanity and a totalitarianism order. This fits into The Craft of Writing
Module, as students can ‘analyse’ and ‘experiment’ with the concept of point of view in the text to
consider its ‘purpose and how it ‘shapes meaning’ in the text (NESA, 2017, p. 74). For example, in a lesson,
students could analyse how the point of view in the text presents a biased view of the dark future, and can
then experiment with the point of view in the text by changing the narration to first person.
In addition, characterisation in the text presents how the only humane character Mr. Leonard Mead
reflects the only form of humanity. Bradbury establishes this depiction by associating the character with
nature and warm bright light, as opposed to the rest of the darkness and death associated with technology
in society. This feature of characterisation fits into The Craft of Writing Module, as students would be able
to utilize how Bradbury establishes characterisation as a stimulus of how to develop their own powerful
character. This would also enable students to consider the purpose of characterisation, the targeted
audience and how it would shape meaning in the craft of writing (NESA, 2017, p. 74). For example, in a
lesson, students could analyse how Bradbury establishes the character Mr. Leonard Mead and experiment
with characterisation by establishing a new character in the text. Furthermore, Irony is significant in the
text, as Mr. Leonard Mead is portrayed as the most normal character in the story, however he is regarded
by his society through the robotic car as the most deviant and taken away to a psychiatric centre. This
feature of irony fits into The Craft of Writing Module, as students could analyse and utilize how Bradbury
establishes irony in the text as a model to develop their own irony in the craft of writing.
Moreover, the descriptive language in the text presents powerful vivid imagery of the main
characters’ senses and actions, the dystopian world, power of technology, as well as darkness, death,
isolation, loneliness and despair. This vivid imagery evokes the audiences’ senses and emotions throughout
the text and persuades the audience to empathise with the fact that society has lost its humanity from the
advanced technology and a political order of totalitarianism. The vivid imagery developed by the
descriptive language in the text therefore fits into The Craft of Writing Module, as students are required to
examine how writers of a complex texts use “language creatively and imaginatively for a range of purposes,
to describe the world around them” and to evoke emotion (NESA, 2017, p. 74).
In addition, this evaluation will now discuss how to teach stage six students vivid imagery through
the short story, “The Pedestrian”, in order for them to work this particular feature into their own writing.
This evaluation will refer to The Craft of Writing Module and actual lesson plans to demonstrate how to
teach students the chosen feature. In relation to The Craft of Writing Module, students are firstly required
to “appreciate, examine and analyse” a text as a model for the development of their “own ideas and
written expression”; as well as to further develop their ability to apply “textual forms and features” in their
own writing (NESA, 2017, p. 74). I have significantly applied this into lesson one, as students analyse how
descriptive language creates vivid imagery in the text and evokes the readers’ senses, and develop their
own craft of writing piece. I focused on this by conducting a mini-lesson, and I then modelled an analysis
task to the students, in order to prepare them to independently analyse the vivid imagery in the text.
These activities effectively build to the short writing task at the end of lesson one, as students utilize the
skill of what they been taught from previous activities to convey vivid imagery in their own writing.
Furthermore, in relation to The Craft of Writing Module students are secondly required to in the
pre-writing stage to “generate and explore ideas through discussion and speculation”, as well as to
experiment with language forms and features in the drafting and revising stage (NESA, 2017, p. 74). I have
applied this into lesson two, as students explore the notion of how to develop vivid imagery through the
brainstorming activity. This builds to the writing task where students develop vivid imagery in their own
writing by creating their own short narrative. The next activity ‘Think, pair, share’ significantly builds from
the writing activity, as students are required to evaluate and reflect on how they implemented vivid
In conclusion, it is therefore evident that I have discussed how the short story fits into ‘The Craft of
Writing Module’ from its enduring qualities. The features discussed are suitable for the craft of writing
course, as they can be utilized for students as a stimulus and to develop and apply in their own writing.
Subsequently, I have also demonstrated in the two lessons how to teach students through the short story
how to develop vivid imagery through descriptive language in their own writing.
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(Text etc) Lesson 1
Materials
PowerPoint.
‘Vivid Imagery in The Pedestrian’ scaffolding sheet.
‘Short writing task’ scaffolding sheet.
Procedures
Time Organisation Teaching/ learning activities
5 T/C Teacher: writes the learning intention on the board as an inquiry
mins question. How do authors create vivid imagery in narratives, in order
to provoke the reader’s senses?
Brainstorming activity/class discussion: The teacher leads the
brainstorming activity by asking students (How do we create vivid
imagery in narratives? What elements do we need to consider and
include?). The teacher writes the questions and all students
responses on the board.
Students: Will be activating their prior knowledge by stating their
thoughts and ideas.
10 mins T/C (Mini Lesson) PowerPoint.
Teacher: The teacher conducts a short PowerPoint on vivid imagery
with the students to teach them how to develop vivid imagery in
narratives, in order to provoke the readers’ senses.
Students: engage in the PowerPoint and take notes. Students are
also encouraged to respond and ask any questions.
25 T/C (Note: students have already read the text in previous lessons).
mins Scaffolding/modelling) Analysis activity.
Teacher: directs the activity by selecting a few quotes from the text
to model to the students how to analyse the descriptive language,
in order to present how it creates vivid imagery and shapes
meaning in the text.
In retrospect
The lesson was effective in relation to utilizing the short story, “The pedestrian” by Ray Bradbury as a model to
teach students how authors use descriptive language to convey vivid imagery and provoke readers’ senses. The
strengths of the lesson includes the mini lesson as the teacher introduces the concept and craft of vivid imagery
by using short text extracts to explore the effects of vivid imagery. The mini lesson also includes the teacher
identifying textual strategies that students could take up in their own writing. In addition, other strengths of the
lesson include the teacher modelling to students how to analyse the vivid imagery in the text, as well as
providing scaffolding sheets for the analysis, writing task and differentiation for all activities. However, the most
significant weakness in the lesson is that a lot of time was contributed to analysing the text, rather than focusing
on the craft and process of writing.
Mini lesson (PowerPoint).
Modelling Analysis Activity (Examples)
Auditory/hear
Tactile/touch
Gustatory/taste
Olfactory/smell
3. Despair
4. Death
5. Nature
Materials
Informal formative assessment: ‘Writing task sheet’.
Procedures
Time Organisation Teaching/ learning activities
5 T/C Learning Intension.
mins Teacher: writes the learning intention on the board: students will use
descriptive language in their own writing, in order to create vivid imagery
that appeals to the readers’ senses.
1. The 1st option includes students taking a phrase from the short story,
“The Pedestrian” by Ray Bradbury provided by the teacher and
transferring it by creating their own short narrative (Students are
expected to write at least a paragraph). Phrase: ‘On this particular
evening he began his journey in a westerly direction’…
2. The 2nd option includes the teacher providing students with an
image related to the text and getting students to extend the short
story through the image by writing at least a paragraph. Students
with additional learning needs are encouraged to complete the 2 nd
option.
3. Students can choose any quote from the short story, “The
Pedestrian” (with the teachers’ approval) as a story starter for their
own short narrative. (Advanced learners are encouraged to choose
this
option).
Students: choose their option and complete the writing task.
15 S/C (Reflection): Think, pair, share.
mins Teacher: directs students to evaluate their own piece of writing. Students
are to evaluate their own passage by:
1. Highlighting the descriptive language that they used in their own
short piece of writing.
2. Taking notes of what types of senses their writing piece conveys. (This
includes visual, auditory, touch, taste and smell).
3. Listing the images their story portrays.
Students: Will complete their evaluation.
Teacher: then directs students to pair up with another student to share
their work, ideas and to provide feedback to one another. Students will
then join into groups of four to share their work and discuss their pieces of
writing.
Students: will share their ideas and provide feedback to each other while
the teacher goes around the classroom and asks students about their
evaluation.
Homework Students:
Process contribute
Journal: to thewill
Students discussion and
reflect on share
what their
they haveresponses.
learnt this lesson
by writing in their workbook journals about what they have learnt in
relation to vivid imagery.
Evaluation/ Extension
I evaluated the outcomes of the lesson through several activities. I assessed outcome 4 through the
informal formative assessment writing task, where students had to demonstrate their understanding
and the ability to use descriptive language, in order to convey vivid imagery in their own short
writing piece. I also assessed outcome 4 through the class discussion by observing and listening to
students writing tasks. In addition, I designed the ‘Think, Pair, Share’ reflection activity to assess
students on outcome 9, where they evaluated and reflected on their ability and their peers to
implement vivid imagery and evoke the readers senses in their own writing. The learning in the
lesson could be extended by students completing more tasks that focuses on the processes of
writing.
In retrospect
The lesson was effective as it focused on students completing writing tasks and reflecting on their
process of writing. The writing task was significant, as it provided differentiation for students by
providing them with options, as well as extra scaffolding in the writing task worksheet. The reflection
was also a significant task, as students were able to reflect on how they have utilized descriptive
language to convey vivid imagery in their own writing, as well as to share feedback and ideas from
their peers.
Writing Task
You are required to complete a writing task. You must focus on using descriptive language
to convey vivid images in the task. There are three options to choose from. For all three
options students are required to write at least a paragraph.
Option 1. Take the following quotation below from “The Pedestrian” by Ray
Bradbury, and transfer it by creating your own short narrative.
‘On this particular evening he began his journey in a westerly direction’ (p.1) …
Option 2. Extend the short story, “The Pedestrian” through the image provided
below.
Option 3. Choose any quote from the short story, “The Pedestrian” (with the
teachers’ approval) as a story starter for your own short narrative.