It is a belief that wild animals should be protected , while other people consist of insist on

solving the human's problems first. From my perspective, the priority should be the human's
issues.

(WHERE IS YOUR TOPIC SENTENCE FOR THIS PARAGRAPH?).

(Topic sentences) [Example: Some people think that protecting wild animals should be put
higher prority on]

……Topic sentence………..The existence of numerous wild animals plays an important role in

maintaining the ecological balance so that their extinction can lead to catastrophic

consequences. Some of them are predators of harmful species such as grasshoppers and
rats which often destroy agriculture and cause famine. Some of their them provide people

nutritious products like bird's birds’ nests in abandoned islands. Also, wild animals have
survived and evolved for millions of years so that they contain the very vital and precisely

biological evaluation that improves human's knowledge about nature and medicine. Some
immune systems against infected bacterias were discovered in wild animals.

However, the opposites opponents have them their reasons to say that humans should
solve their issues first. (This is the topic sentence of the paragraph so it should be placed

in the next para)

The starvation, wars and critical extreme natural phenomenons are threatening and

obsessing the lives of millions of people, the need for food and health care instant. Every
effort and source must be spent to solve those problems. As mentioned above, I agree that

solving the human's issues should be a priority. There would be no attention and support
on preserving wild animals if the stability of society is not guaranteed. The explosion in

biology in the 17th century went along with the improvement in living standard and
technology.

As mentioned above, I agree that solving the human's issues should be a priority. There

would be no attention and support on preserving wild animals if the stability of society is
not guaranteed. The explosion in biology in the 17th century went along with the

improvement in living standard and technology.

=> The second body paragraph is too weak!!!!!!!!! You should give more detailed

explanation and examples for the controlling idea in the topic sentence

To sum up, protecting wild animals is not as important as solving the human' s issues.