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Yes, I have spent my entire life battling and clashing. And now that I'm gone, I know Wakanda will fight
for its color, for its culture, and for its right, until the bright days will no longer be as DARK as the pitch-
BLACK night.
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Comments
It reads like a speech/eulogy or monologue rather than a journalistic feature
It lacks the necessary quotations or references that are expected to validate the humanity and reality of
the subject
It lacks coherence, unity of ideas presented. While the ideas are grand, they don’t hold much water.
It reads like a patchwork, the ideas don’t seem to come from one mind. Parang Japanese rengga.
While the grammar is generally acceptable, the writer’s vocabulary use makes me question his mastery
of the language. Is he thinking in Filipino and writing in English? Because there is a great disconnect
and it’s obvious. The use of “quiz bee words” in the articles deters me from understanding the context
of the sentences. I’m not here to learn new words from an article. I’m here to read about the issue in
the article that is so distracting with its sapping melodrama, the multiple voices that mislead me with
their hysterics.
And there are still problems with verb tense (the past, present and future are all in one time frame),
voice/perspective (narrator to mysterious African-American George Floyd to Black Panther).