Report: Jata Shankar

Jata Shankar
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The personal data protection bill, 2019 and its review
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The much awaited Personal Data Protection Bill, 2019 was introduced in Lok
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Sabha by the Minister of Electronics and Information Technology, Mr. Ravi
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Shankar Prasad, on December 11, 2019. The Bill seeks to provide for protection
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of personal data of individuals, and establishes a Data Protection Authority for
the same. There was a committee of experts under the chairmanship of Justice
B N Srikrishna, former judge, Supreme Court of India, to recommend methods
of addressing them.
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The Bill governs the processing of personal data by government, companies
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incorporated in India, and foreign companies dealing with personal data of
individuals in India. Personal data is data which pertains to characteristics,
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traits or attributes of identity, which can be used to identify an individual. This
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Bill categorises certain personal data as sensitive personal data which
includes nancial data, biometric data, caste, religious or political beliefs, or
any other category of data speci ed by the government, in consultation with
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the Authority and the concerned sectoral regulator.
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Actors in this bill include ‘data principal’, ‘data duciary’, and ‘data processor’.
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The data principal is the natural person to whom some personal data relates to.
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The data duciary is any person including the state, a company, or a juristic
entity who either alone or with others, determines the purpose and means of
processing the personal data. The data processor is any person who processes
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data on behalf of a data duciary however it does not include an employee of a
data duciary.

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This Bill sets out certain rights of the individual (data principal). These include
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the right to: (i) obtain con rmation from the duciary on whether their personal
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data has been processed, (ii) seek correction of inaccurate, incomplete, or out-
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of-date personal data, (iii) have personal data transferred to any other data
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duciary in certain circumstances, and (iv) restrict continuing disclosure of
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their personal data by a duciary, if it is no longer necessary or consent is
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withdrawn .
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As de ned in Clause 13 data duciary is an entity or individual who decides the
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means and purpose of processing personal data. Such processing will be
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subject to certain purpose, collection and storage limitations. For instance,
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personal data can be processed only for speci c, clear and lawful purpose.
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Additionally, all data duciaries must undertake certain transparency and
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accountability measures such as: (i) implementing security safeguards (such as
data encryption and preventing misuse of data), and (ii) instituting grievance
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redressal mechanisms to address complaints of individuals. (iii) They must also
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institute mechanisms for age veri cation and parental consent when
processing sensitive personal data of children.
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Clause 4 of the bill prohibits the processing of personal data without any
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speci c, clear and lawful purpose. Clause 9 of the bill prescribes that data
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duciary shall not retain any personal data beyond the period necessary to
satisfy the purpose for which it was processed and shall delete the personal
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data at the end of processing. The data duciary can retain the data for longer
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period only after getting consent from data principal. In some cases personal
81 data can be processed without consent under clause 12 which includes- (i) if
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required by the State for providing bene ts to the individual, (ii) to respond to
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order or judgement of any court or tribunal in India, (iii) to respond to any

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83 medical emergency involving threat to life and health of data principal or any
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other individual, during an epidemic, outbreak of disease or any other threat to
public health, (iv) to ensure public safety during any disaster or any breakdown
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of public order.
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The Bill de nes Social media intermediaries these include intermediaries
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which enable online interaction between users and allow for sharing of
information. All such intermediaries which have users above a noti ed
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threshold, and whose actions can impact electoral democracy or public order,
have certain obligations, which include providing a voluntary user veri cation
mechanism for users in India.
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The Bill sets up a Data Protection Authority which may: (i) take steps to protect
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interests of individuals, (ii) prevent misuse of personal data, and (iii) ensure
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compliance with the Bill. It will consist of a chairperson and six members, with
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at least 10 years’ expertise in the eld of data protection and information
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technology. Orders of the Authority can be appealed to an Appellate Tribunal.
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Appeals from the Tribunal will go to the Supreme Court.
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This bill prohibits the processing of sensitive personal data and critical
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personal data outside India. The sensitive personal data may be transferred
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outside India, subject to conditions for transfer of sensitive personal data and
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critical personal data but shall continue to be stored within India. Critical
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personal data (not yet de ned) can only be processed in India. Sensitive
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personal data may only be transferred outside India for the purpose of
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processing, when explicit consent is given by the data principal for such
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group scheme approved by the authority .
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personal data(data other than personal data) to enable better targeting of
delivery of services or formulation of evidence-based policies in such a manner
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may be prescribed .
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The central government can exempt any of its agencies from the provisions of
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the Act: (i) in interest of security of state, public order, sovereignty and integrity
of India and friendly relations with foreign states, and (ii) for preventing
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incitement to commission of any cognisable offence (i.e. arrest without
warrant) relating to the above matters. Processing of personal data is also
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exempted from provisions of the Bill for certain other purposes such as: (i)
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prevention, investigation, or prosecution of any offence, or (ii) personal,
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domestic, or (iii) journalistic purposes. However, such processing must be for a
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speci c, clear and lawful purpose, with certain security safeguards.
Offences under the Bill include: (i) processing or transferring personal data in
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violation of the Bill, punishable with a ne of Rs 15 crore or 4% of the annual
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turnover of the duciary, whichever is higher, and (ii) failure to conduct a data
audit, punishable with a ne of ve crore rupees or 2% of the annual turnover
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of the duciary, whichever is higher. Re-identi cation and processing of de-
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identi ed personal data without consent is punishable with imprisonment of
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up to three years, or ne, or both.
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The Bill amends the Information Technology Act, 2000 to delete the provisions
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related to compensation payable by companies for failure to protect personal
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data.
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81 To conclude this bill is a step taken by Government of India in its initiative
towards implementing data privacy laws in India as Supreme court has
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purpose, processing of personal data only with consent; Consent of the
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individual would be required for processing of personal data. Based on the type
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of personal data being processed, organizations will have to review and update
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